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Adam335
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| 18 May 2013 04:56 PM |
| Love it. Great work, brother. |
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Imitater
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| 18 May 2013 04:56 PM |
i am imiater random black hand thug who dies randomly
also looks good, but check some grammar |
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Imitater
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| 18 May 2013 04:58 PM |
"that there were.My name is Castellnus"
spaces after periods |
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coolben08
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| 18 May 2013 05:04 PM |
| Good job and who is adam is he in TGI? |
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| 18 May 2013 05:06 PM |
Interesting book, lad.
-Are you ready for kindness to be relinquished? |
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Josh6906
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| 18 May 2013 05:08 PM |
"The Black Hand" Nice how you named that after the Serbian terrorist group that killed Arch Duke Ferdinand. Awesome start for your story though. c: |
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EDOG999
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| 18 May 2013 05:09 PM |
| Quiet the story, you've outdone yourself Castellnus |
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| 18 May 2013 05:14 PM |
| SUGGESTION FOR NEXT CHAPTER: You mentioned your sister before, so she needs to play a big role within your life. She needs to make some mar on you; or create some emotional struggle from your childhood. |
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| 18 May 2013 05:14 PM |
| Nice Book. Needs something... |
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