mimi1203
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| 12 May 2013 06:46 AM |
The "Head" well somehow this story came up in my idea this may fail but i can share it :D okay. WARNING: this story has horror themes and kinda bloody
It was a sunny day. A Quiet day in the city plaza. A group of robbers came to plan the assault at a Rich man`s mansion. They`re all Excited to rob the Mansion,but they do not know what lurks down there..
"Okay! here`s the plan!" as the leader started "Wait what?! The Mansion?!,Oh man we`re gonna get rich" a member replied "Well yeah, umm... we can rob it midnight"a female member whispered
The rich man was going Outta town so he would not be there.. but therefore a forbidden thing.. The thing that they do not know..
It was 11:30 pm as they went to the mansion. "its really dark,we should illuminate the path" whispers the leader. But when the female member enlightened the way. she found a glimpse of something..
"WHOA OH!" the female member got shocked "what is it?" the leader asked "i saw something it`s like a floating head" the female member answered "enough of silly things let`s go" a member`s voice.
As they opened the door the female robber felt something.. It`s very windy though but the curtains is like stuck... The five robbers gathered to walk through corridors..
the female member`s vision fades slight head ache.. "ugh ugh argh" the female members groan cause of pain..
"Wait what stop doing that thing" the leader whispered. The female robber`s vision changed to something.. she sees like she`s colorblind..
in her vision is like running before them "AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!" a scream heard at the distance.. The robbers got stun and the female member`s vision goes normal..
A member opened his flashlight illuminated the thing The thing is a head with long girl hair and with a slit mouth well, no eyes The thing dragged away the leader "AHHH HELP ME!!!" the leader begged for help
The other robbers forced to run... A member got bitten by the same thing,the female robber saw the gruesome death of the member.. she ran Very Quickly... Until she found the third member`s body lifeless.. An unknown floating thing emerged from it`s Body..
"OH GOD I GOTTA GET OUT OF HERE!!' she gasped and ran to exit door she got tripped by the fourth member wounded.. saying... "hee...lll..p meeee...." she got scared running through the exit..
She got slipped next to the thing The female robber grabbed her flashlight and pointed it on the thing.. the thing got hurt and emits a smoke
she followed the creature until the dead end... the creature got burned up in ash.. dropping a necklace.. with a paper and a sign.. "im sorry dear i could not step back i can only put you out of your misery." hinting that this thing is the rich man`s wife that got decapitated by her own husband..
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fathat121
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| 12 May 2013 07:46 AM |
| I thought this had to be in a paragraph format. I was also surprised at the grammar, however I realized that this is a horror story. Are you allowed to overlook grammar in horror stories because of suspense, etc? |
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mimi1203
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| 14 May 2013 12:47 AM |
| sorry for that i do not know such as deep English words,correct grammar(i know i am horrible), and messed up with this... I am seriously not american i am an Asian D: |
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| 14 May 2013 12:59 AM |
| Make sure to PM me the link. |
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fathat121
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| 14 May 2013 03:51 PM |
| Well, it's the ideas that count. By the way, I'm also Asian. (Insert Happy Face Here) |
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| 14 May 2013 03:52 PM |
| the hell is a creative nation |
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fathat121
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| 14 May 2013 03:53 PM |
| It's where I get my lamb chops. You should consider joining. |
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| 14 May 2013 03:56 PM |
| Why, that's funny, I just made a story an hour ago. Can I submit that? |
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