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| 28 Apr 2013 04:59 PM |
Within a the deep recess of the mind, only a blackness stands out. A fire of Everlasting pain and torment flickers along the border of insanity. This is what most people think of a Vaktovian warrior. They look into their eyes, and see torment. They see death. Anger. Blood. Though some would call a Vaktovian less than worthy, I've come to understand these men and women. Blood is glory, and discipline is law. This used to be the way of the Vaktovian Empire. Now, I see what most would see in the Average Empire. A hunger of Ambition, a lowered sense of free will.
On this day, I will be starting a book. Something that starts with a young Vaktovian soldier, and how he slowly came into Realization. Here is the first Chapter.
[Preview]
''They're coming, Drak''. Drakond looked down the field, where thousands of soldiers marched to the sign of death. A three way line. Red as blood, dark as death. ''What did you expect, John?'' Drakond said, his eyes staring at the field in front of him. ''We were in the way of the Vaktovian Empires conquest, so they decided to destroy us. It's the Vaktovian way. Conquer and Conquest, remember?'' John looked ahead, and his eyes almost close to a line, he was squinting so ferociously. ''So, the stories are true''. John whispered, as he looked ahead. Three Vaktovians walked into view. Two in a Formal suit, badges adorning their entire chests. The other one, taller than the others, sleek yet still as imposing as the rest. Black armor adorned his chest, a red and white cap flowing to the calm breeze that the country provided. A metal helmet with red points on top fitted atop his head, and caused a darkness to settle against his face, so much that you couldn't even see it. It was Vaktus himself. Then, as if on cue, Vaktus turned his head, in the exact direction Drakond was hiding. Vaktus then started walking across the short field, in Drakonds position. John ran away as fast as his legs could carry him, paying no heed to Drakond or Vaktus. Drakond'ss face hardened beneath his mask, and he was just about to run himself when a claw clamped on his shoulder, and a dark voice said ''Found you''. |
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| 28 Apr 2013 05:00 PM |
A/N= Authors Note.
A/N: The preview is actually somewhat further in the book, around the middle. The actual Chapter begins here. Each Chapter will have 4-5 Paragraphs in it, and there will be a new Chapter, every Night!
[CHAPTER 1]
''I don't know if this will work out, John. They only accept the best, and they have been known to be extremely brutal...I don't know if we'll pass their exams.'' Said Drakond, staring at John without blinking. ''I've heard they are the most respected Earthly Military in existance. We may not make it alive.'' Said John, an eyebrow arched in amusement. Both of them looked at each other, then exploded in laughter. John actually had tears coming out of his eyes, and Drakond was shaking his head slowly from side to side. ''Come on, let's go see how this works out.'' Said John, grabbing Drakond by the arm and leading him to the F.E.A.R Recruitment officer. The Officer looked at them for a moment, then his eyes brightened in realization that they were Civilians, not foreign military. That meant they could be recruited. ''Hey boys! I'm Dan, nice to meet you. Great weather we're having, huh? A great day to join F.E.A.R, eh? That's right, you could be one of the lucky people chosen to join fear!'' Dan said, his eyes twinkling in hope. Drakond and John looked at each other for a moment, then back at Dan. Then John opened up his mouth to speak.
''Did you have to say that about his mother?!'' Drakond exclaimed, huffing from the exertion of the chase. John was still laughing at the conversation. ''Listen, if I had known that there were 12 others standing by, I wouldn't have done it!'' John said, still trying to supress himself from laughing. Drakond looked at him for a moment, then slowed down to a jog. He then pulled John over to him, behind a large metal pipe. ''Shut up for a minute, listen'' Drakond whispered, his head poked out from their newfound hiding place. After a moment, they slid out from their cover. What they saw suprised them. The 12 F.E.A.R soldiers were laying on the floor, out cold. Then John laughed out loud on what he saw next. Dan, the recruitment Officer, was laying upside down, his Undergarments on his head, with the words ''FEAR at its Finest'' on the front. Drakond raised an eyebrow, then heard a soft clink. A shadow loomed over John, and Drakond saw two arms slowly raise above Johns head. John stopped laughing, and looked at Drakond. ''What, do I have something on my face?'' John asked, still unaware of the threat above him. Drakond, then ran foward, and pushed John out of the way as the two hands clamped down on where He was a moment before, Drakond now taking his place. Then they heard a Dark, deep voice say ''So, you two were about to join FEAR, eh?''. They looked up, and saw a Soldier in Black and Red Body armor, with a glare that could melt metal. He then reached foward and grabbed Drakond's Arm.
''I asked you a question, Boy. You would be wise to respect your Superiors and do as they say'' the man said, the glare still in place. ''Hey, you can't do that!'' Said John, his hands on his hips, with a glare on his own face. The men stared at John silently, then slowly reached over and grabbed a small Metal pole from his side. He then pressed a button, and the whole pole suddenly lit up as A laser shot up from it. It was a Laser based sword, technology that could not be found on Johns Homeworld. ''N-no, Sir. We were pranking them again, like we always do. We wouldn't join it for all the Credits in the world!'' John stammered. Drakond then grabbed the mans Arm, and tried to push it away. But the ropes of muscle underneath his Uniform were as hard as Iron, and could no doubt do the same damage as any Iron based weapon could. Drakond then pushed as hard as he could, with no avail. The mans eyes moved to him, amusement playing across his face. ''Sorry kid, I have no use for you. It's the bratty one I want.'' the Man said, who then dropped Drakond on the floor, and advanced on to John. Drakond, then slowly stood back up, his arm aching. John tried to speak, to say anything. A retort, a sentence of defiance. But all that came out was a Small whimper, as the man slowly moved his sword towards John.
Just as the man was about to swing, Drakond's instinct kicked in. He went under the mans arm, then grabbed his wrist. He then took out his own personal weapon, a small Iron club, and smashed it on the mans wrist as hard as he could. There was a resounding crack that could be heard across the room, and the man dropped his weapon. The man clutched at his wrist for a moment, then looked at Drakond. His eyes seemed to turn red with anger. Drakond then threw the club at the man, which missed and thunked against the wall. He then looked down at the pole, and pressed the red button. The laser shot out, and stopped at its limit. Drakond then waved the Sword around like it would solve all the problems in the world with a single sweep. He then said ''I don't know who you are, but you're not hurting John!''. The man hesitated for a moment, then advanced. ''Hey! Didn't you hear me? Back off, or else!'' Drakond shouted, still waving it around. ''Think you have the Guts, kid? Go ahead, try to kill me. Drakond then stopped, the word ''Kill'' flashed around his mind. Grusome events played across his head, ones that seemed like a distant memory. The man took advantage of Drakond's freeze, and ran foward to the kill.
Drakond stood motionless for a moment. Then something strange happened, something that couldn't be explained. The man seemed to move in slow motion, his every move being calculated by Drakond. Drakond slowly dodged the mans fist, then punched the man in the gut. It ended up hurting Drakond more than the man, seeing as the man had body armor. Drakond then jumped up and kicked the man in the neck, sending him staggering backwards. After that, he swung the sword in an arc, and chopped off the mans hand. Time seemd to speed up almost instantly. The man looked at his hand, then at Drakond. Then, to Drakond's suprise, the man Grinned. ''Well, runt. You've just earned yourself an opportunity. Sparks came out of the mans wrist stump. ''I-I don't understand. Why aren't you bleeding?'' Drakond whispered, his heart pounding in his chest. ''Because, Runt. I'm a Cyborg. We tend not the bleed in some areas. Now, about that Opportunity. How would you like to Join Vaktovia?''. Drakonds eyes then lit up, and he slowly backed away in fear. He had just fought a Vaktovian. One of the most feared races that existed. Then John spoke up for Drakond, answering for him. ''Yeah, he'll join. On one condition. I'm going with him''. Drakond stared at John, then back at the man. ''Very well. My name is Sar. Just Sar. And you, my little friends, are about to go through hell''.
A/N: Sorry for the Cliffhangar, but I like to keep people hooked. Read and review! |
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| 28 Apr 2013 05:01 PM |
| The vaktovian way is posting on c&g |
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Lefty13
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KingEpic5
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7890jj
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| 28 Apr 2013 05:06 PM |
copied copied copied copied
**y u copy** |
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| 28 Apr 2013 05:06 PM |
| Hopefully I can be in this version. |
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| 28 Apr 2013 05:07 PM |
| @789, This is now mine. Check the version made by drakond he gave it to me and I'm starting it up again. |
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| 28 Apr 2013 05:08 PM |
| PM me if you'd like to be in this. |
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| 28 Apr 2013 05:10 PM |
| Many major clans will have a role in this. |
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Eraticus
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look01
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| 28 Apr 2013 05:20 PM |
| I forbid you from writing this. |
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| 28 Apr 2013 05:33 PM |
| I cant do this? Its not anything bad about VAK there just the best. |
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| 28 Apr 2013 06:49 PM |
| Put me in... I want to be the one to kill someone. ;) |
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| 28 Apr 2013 06:58 PM |
| Everyone please post the link to this in your Blurb and status |
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| 28 Apr 2013 07:00 PM |
| Make sure to add the Anti-VAKS and "Vaktovian Republic" |
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| 28 Apr 2013 07:06 PM |
The main concept and plotline is unoriginal. Character development is stereotypical. Story structure is decent.
Overall: 6/10-Mediocre |
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| 28 Apr 2013 07:12 PM |
plagirsim the book sucks anyway tbh
[UAF] Lieutenant |
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| 28 Apr 2013 07:14 PM |
NICE BOOK!!111!1!!1
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5GgflscOmW8 |
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| 29 Apr 2013 05:09 PM |
Huff Huff Huff Said Drak. This is Hell, he was right! I've never had something so hard as this. What was todays work Drak? Three hundred push-ups and 500 jumping jacks. Then we have to head to sword training. Ugh this is impossible! I've been working nonstop for 3 hours. Well it will be worth it soon, if we can become a VAK. Maybe if we work extra hard we'll become a Level 2 Soldier! That would be awesome. Soon training came, we did gun training, sword training, Obby training, and verbal excersises. After the training Captain Cod came up to me and said " I like the way you role, You're very strong and you obey very well I want you to become a level 2 soldier."
" No way!" Says Drak " Are you kidding?" " Do I look like I kid?" Said Cod. " No sir, Sorry I just.............I cant believe it, this is amazing!" " Well work hard soldier and you'll become a VAK in no time!" Later that night, Drak went up to John and told him. John said " Congrats............." Later the next day they heard Captain Cod shouting about a raid. They said " A raid? Yes a raid. Awesome our first raid as VAC's!" So they went up to Captain Cod and said " Sir where are we raiding?" Cod said FEAR fort Allianor II." " FEAR they said! But there so strong and big we have no chance!" tst, Captain Cod laughed and said " Havent you read the description? It says in there were here to show bigger clans that we can win by skill not by numbers." So they head over to fort Allianor when they get there they say " WE HAVE THREE REAL VAKS WITH US? CODRULER NITRO78 AND ARCANECLONE?" This is awesome they said " Were never gonna lose with those three!" But when they look at who's here for FEAR they gasp.............. Ryan? Ex? Fantasma? They looked backone more time and said " If this is where I die I want to die a glorious death!" Then they pull out there swords and charge into battle!
Sorry for the cliffhanger I just want to keep you hooked.
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| 29 Apr 2013 05:14 PM |
I'm in FEAR now? e.e After this part, I wanna be a big part :D |
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| 29 Apr 2013 05:15 PM |
| You will. I left you at a cliffhanger I added you and 2 other peoples names in here they will have a huge part in this battle. |
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