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| 17 Apr 2013 03:01 PM |
As aceslayer picked the piece of paper for the new FEAR HR, Buster, HD, Andrew, And Robotic were sitting in the seats on the stage. Corporal tyeman5678, and Ex-Officer bryanjunsuh were just arriving together through the gates to watch the reaping.
"Today is a great day in FEAR History!" said aceslayer "Today, 2 WTO's will get their FEAR dreams fulfilled."
*Aceslayer slowly puts his hand in the box and pulls out a name*
The crowd is gasping to know who it is
Aceslayer is saying, "And the first new FEAR HR is..." *gets shot and blood spurts from his head*
Sonic was outrages! He jumped out of his seat with ALL of the FEAR HRs by his side with a gun in their hand. Somewhere in the shadows of Venezia is a traitor. All of a sudden, Corporal tyeman5678, in his seat, sees a shadowy figure run from the top of a building.
[TO BE CONTINUED]
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| 21 Apr 2013 08:17 PM |
Eh? Anyway, good story, good luck with future chapters. |
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| 27 Apr 2013 01:26 PM |
Chapter 2!
There was chaos everywhere! Nobody knew what to do. General iroctheworld took stand to calm everyone down. Corporal tyeman5678 ran quickly to see who that shadowy man was. As he was running, he stopped to see a sack.
[BACK AT THE REAPING]
"Who has done this to us! But why aceslayer!" iroc screamed.
Warrant Officer HD was walking in circles thinking who did it. All of a sudden, his phone rang.
"Hello HD! I know who is next. Hahahaha!" *phone suddenly goes blank*
[BACK WHERE TYEMAN5678 IS]
As he was running through the streets, he saw someone who looked like DrDrRoblox, the TRA Commander. Tye thought, they might want revenge ever since the war we had. He approached slowly towards "DrDrRoblox", but DrDrRoblox was an impersonator. He grabbed Tye by the chest, but JacobProne came running to save Tye. e shot a few bullets, but the impersonator ran away.
[TO BE CONTINUED] |
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| 28 Apr 2013 09:03 AM |
| To make a long story short: Someone died. |
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| 28 Apr 2013 09:05 AM |
| Pretty good, chapters a bit short. |
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| 28 Apr 2013 09:22 AM |
| I bet it was that Redsoxs4. >.> |
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| 28 Apr 2013 09:40 AM |
Chapter 3!
Jacob and Tye chased the impersonator but got too tired and stopped. Jacob walks away to go to his apartment. As soon as he leaves, Tye goes back to the Reaping Area to find a huge mess of chairs and a few dead people.
[BACK WHERE HD IS]
After his phone suddenly went blank, he went to General LordNobody "Dude, after all the mess, I got a call from a unknown person saying he knows who is next." HD said
'I dont know what that means, but keep a look out for any more weird calls" LordNobody said.
The both walked down to their houses, wondering about who killed Aceslayer. The next day, SONIC held a meeting at FEARMeeting to discuss serious security matters and how we can improve.
Sonic was saying: "We need to improve our security matters! Aceslayer was a great man and didnt deserve to die this way! Anybody have any suggestions?"
Nobody spoke. It was just silence. SONIC dismissed everyone to go defend their forts.
[BACK WHERE TYE IS]
As he was walking down to his house, he found his favorite HR, mnlky. He was saying some weird things.
[TO BE CONTINUED]
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| 30 Apr 2013 04:16 PM |
| make more and please add me in the story |
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| 30 Apr 2013 04:20 PM |
So iroc "calmed everyone down" by taking the stand and screaming?
[//: NFC Overseer|Thelegender :\\] |
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| 30 Apr 2013 04:23 PM |
"Sonic was outrages!"
This has to be one of the more poorly written stories on the forum. Not the worst, mind you, but I've seen prettier vomit than the words you've smashed together here. |
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| 30 Apr 2013 04:25 PM |
meh 3/10
[UAF] Lieutenant Вячеслав Панкратов |
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