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| 10 Apr 2013 07:54 PM |
*Note this story is completely fictional*
It was a stormy night, as 5 VS commandos set out to take the stronghold. The operatives: Grey-known as Fox, Wacky-known as Eagle, Ashwin-known as Tiger, Ultra-known as Bear, and Hialex-known as Rhino.
"Hey, Grey, you got you camo. on?" said Ash, "Yeah. Hia you ready?" said Grey. "Lets rock and roll." said Hia. This was going to be Hia's first major field operation that he lead. "Lets move out!" said Hia. *They go to TGI's Stronghold* "Everyone quiet. Alright, heres the plan. Wacky and Ultra you follow me. Grey, stick with Ashwin. Ultra, wacky and I will go from the left, we'll be the distraction, Ashwin and Grey, while the fight is going on, you sneak in, use your swords to kill any hostiles, but be quiet! Do NOT be compromised! Got it? Okay, lets move out." As Hia, Ultra, and Wacky walk along the left, a single bullet flies by. "Augh!" said Wacky as he falls down. "He's hit!" Says Ultra as he bends down to tend to Wackys wound. Hia spins around and returns fire. Bullets fly everywhere, an inch away from Ultras neck. "Phew! Wacky, your going to be okay. Its only a flesh wound, to the sholder, I think I can pull it out..." "AUGH!" Screams Wacky in pain as Ultra pulls out the bullet. "Dont worry it will be fine." says Wacky. "Hurry that up!" says Hia while still returning fire. "Dont worry Hia, I just need to bandage him up it will only take me a minute." "Okay Lets go!" screams hia. They all run off into the shadows.
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"Grey, thats our distraction! Lets go!" says Ash. "Im right behind you." says Grey. Grey and Ash climb up the wall and slowly move to the gate opener, when suddenly they hear a voice. "Stop right there". They turn around to see TGI troops pointing Devestators at them. "This isnt good." says Grey.
Wait to see what happens in the next edition of "The VS Weekly!" |
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| 10 Apr 2013 07:57 PM |
| Awesome, put me in the next on I'm back-up. |
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| 10 Apr 2013 07:59 PM |
| And I get to save wacky's life, the story was great. |
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wackyvert
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| 10 Apr 2013 08:02 PM |
| yay ultra gets to save my life |
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| 10 Apr 2013 08:22 PM |
Pretty good, but a few problems.
1. Grammar, spelling, and punctuation. 2. We lost against TGI. 3. Make me in charge next time, please? |
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| 10 Apr 2013 09:06 PM |
| Okay, I will have another Edition. Sorry if it wasnt the best. @Free I will MAYBE add you in. I will try. |
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| 10 Apr 2013 09:42 PM |
| Suggest: Next time don't say "[Name] Said" Try and use "Yelled" Or "Asked" or other words, makes it flow better. |
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grey987
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| 11 Apr 2013 06:48 PM |
| Now that I've got a chance to read, I like what's been done so far. If I can, I might write a story of my own. |
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mariopoi
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| 11 Apr 2013 06:51 PM |
>grammar spelling pronouncation we don't need that |
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