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| 10 Mar 2013 10:36 AM |
[Enjoy.]
I awake to the alarm clock, as usual, then I stand up and begin changing into my clothes, it was routine. The only thing off was that my brother was across the street at his friend's house. I went throughout the daily schedule of eating breakfast and playing a couple video games, then my mother walked out from her bedroom; this is where she tells me to shovel the driveway, that tedious routine, it was the same thing everyday.
I finished up my game and stood up and began walking for back door; in which the family used. I walked to the garage and opened it; I leave it unlocked now to decrease the time it takes to do the chore. I grabbed the snow shovel and a pair of gloves from the bin near the wall. I then shut the door behind me and walked for the driveway, which was buried, as always.
I began digging away at them massive amount of snow that chilled me to the bone, I disliked the snow; everything about it. I continued though and shoveled one scoop after the other, my eyes were freezing from the ice cold air. I wiped my eyes and leaned on the shovel; I was barely half way done. I sighed and continued anyhow, stopping now would only get me in trouble.
As I neared the end I smiled with the thought of being able to stop soon. I felt my knees shake either from exhaustion or joy of being nearly done; or a mix of both was also possible. I grinned which most likely made me look weird to the neighbors, as always. Only five scoops left, four, three, two, thunk. I hit a sold surface, I sigh; a rock. I push aside the snow to find a bright red jacket. My eyes widen as I push aside a bit more snow to find me icy blue brother lying there in a frozen heap.
My muscles tensed up and I looked around nervously, I grabbed my brother and shook him, he was okay. He had to be okay, he was at the neighbors, he was fine, he was fine; he had to be. This wasn't the routine, this wasn't the routine. My eyes filled with tears, this wasn't the routine dammit.
This wasn't the routine. |
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styledog
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| 10 Mar 2013 10:41 AM |
@Style, Not exactly the reaction I was going for..but okay. I hope you enjoyed.
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| 10 Mar 2013 10:43 AM |
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| 10 Mar 2013 10:44 AM |
@Gweb, did you not like it?
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gwebster2
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| 10 Mar 2013 10:44 AM |
-TRANSLATION- That was moderately sad. |
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| 10 Mar 2013 10:45 AM |
Yeah, that was kinda what I was going for.
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| 10 Mar 2013 11:02 AM |
I was hoping for a bit more feedback. :l
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| 10 Mar 2013 11:16 AM |
Apparently this was a humor story...
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| 14 Mar 2013 09:01 PM |
| Very intriguing, you should write more. |
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styledog
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| 14 Mar 2013 09:06 PM |
I agree with the above
It's not the size of the dog in the fight, but the size of the fight in the dog.-Archie Griffin |
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| 15 Mar 2013 04:07 PM |
| Wow...you're a good writer. I love sort of creepy stories like this. You just made my top reads list. |
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| 15 Mar 2013 04:08 PM |
| .....How could you....This reminds me of when my sister died at the hospital IN MY ARMS! I HATE YOU! |
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| 15 Mar 2013 04:16 PM |
| Be reasonable now, Almec. Creative isn't out to make you feel as bad as he possibly can. He didn't know what happened to your sister. |
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| 15 Mar 2013 04:18 PM |
Is this supposed to make me feel sad, sorrowful, or otherwise unhappy?
Sure, it's a great story, He's very good at writing and all. But I just don't feel for them.
Regardless, as said before, great story. I couldn't do better. |
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ALMEC
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| 15 Mar 2013 04:37 PM |
Whatever...I could care less......((Added to list of enemies))
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| 15 Mar 2013 04:42 PM |
You can say he got a......*puts on glasses*
Snow job.
YEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHH
Jokes aside, it was a 'cool' story.
Ok, I'll stop the snow jokes..... |
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ALMEC
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| 16 Mar 2013 05:50 AM |
:3
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| 16 Mar 2013 06:23 AM |
| Please expand on it. I'd love to see some more. |
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