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| 11 Mar 2013 05:57 PM |
Take your time on this one. Show not tell means put the reader in the characters place, describe it so well that they feel as though they are experiencing it. Example of bad: It was cold and rainy. Example of good: Giant drops of rain pelted my thin raincoat threatening to come penetrate. The wind swirled in gusts around me, tossing my auburn hair in a tangled mess.
THIS CONTEST WILL BE DESCRIPTIVE WRITING! PLEASE USE ADJETIVES AND SENSORY DETAILS. SHOW NOT TELL. THIS IS AN IMPORTANT WRITING TRAIT THAT WILL HELP IN ALL OF YOUR FUTURE WRITING...prompt: "I was completely embarrassed, no, mortified. My cheeks burned cherry red, and my entire body shook violently. A feeling of numbness spread down to my toes and I was frozen in fear."
Any questions? Always feel free to start a party convo for tutouring. |
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| 11 Mar 2013 06:04 PM |
Quite frankly, I've never seen a single 'descriptive writing' contest ever make it on roblox.
Especially not one this unnanounced. |
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| 11 Mar 2013 06:12 PM |
| well this is for my writing group.... |
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| 11 Mar 2013 06:14 PM |
Ah, my apoligies.
Continue on. |
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| 11 Mar 2013 06:45 PM |
Well, Miss. If this is for your group, I would like to give you directions to the Clans & Guilds subforum, where this belongs.
For every mop, there is a piece of copper. |
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| 11 Mar 2013 07:20 PM |
My entry:
It was cold and rainy. My raincoat was red. The sky was dark. The man was asking me for help. I killed the man. My quest was completed. I died to a lightning strike. |
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| 11 Mar 2013 08:28 PM |
| (crap just about to write to well..I got to go to bed... e-e) |
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| 12 Mar 2013 12:30 PM |
| How long does it have to be? |
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| 12 Mar 2013 01:39 PM |
| The city was cold and damp.I ran ahead, in need of help. The police went ahead. I was holding a sack, full of money. How much you ask? 100,000,0 (continued in a pm) |
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| 13 Mar 2013 08:12 AM |
I was completely embarrassed, no, mortified. My cheeks burned cherry red, and my entire body shook violently. A feeling of numbness spread down to my toes and I was frozen in fear. It was a winter evening, snow danced down from the colorful skies. I was halfway down my jogging trail when I ran into my crush-- The thing was, I left my warm,cozy,Taxi Yellow jacket at home. I also noticed I was turning blue due to the cold and my half-minded decision to go on a jog today. He waved in my direction and I waved back, he started walking towards me, I don't know because I cant see my face, but I'm sure its a mix Of red, Blue, And other unnatural colors. "Hi" He said. "Hi.... Nice weather this evening?" We both burst out in laughter. "Can I walk you Home?" "Sure" We started walking, and 3/4ths of the way back I started shaking, yes shaking, My skin was a very deep shade of Blue, Almost matching the night sky. "Here Take My Jacket." He Then Gave me his jacket, and without any time for me to argue, kept walking. Some Time After, We made it home, I opened the door and we said our goodbyes. I jumped into my bed with warm plushies and soft pillows.
Home Sweet Home. |
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| 28 Mar 2013 02:49 PM |
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YOU ARE AWSOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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| 28 Mar 2013 02:50 PM |
helll ya u were embarassed
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