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| 10 Mar 2013 10:50 PM |
(Just want to try it out. Please give feedback.)
--[CHAPTER ONE]--
The boy awakes in his bed. "Yes!" he shouts, not too loud, as the rest of his family should still be asleep. He looks at the clock. 6:30 AM, the exact time he set it for. The boy got out of bed and slugged across the room in his pajamas. He looks out the window and sees Pidgey flying. A peaceful morning. The boy gets dressed. He puts on a white shirt with black jeans, and a black watch saying the exact time, 6:33 AM. He puts on his black and white sneakers and ties the laces as tight as he can.
Now.. should I explain? This boys name is Joshua. He has dirty blonde hair that has gotten darker ever since he has gotten o.lder. Now, it seems to be a light brown color. He is 11 y.ears o.ld and is turning 12 in a few months. His mother has announced that he may get his first Pokemon, which made him extremely happy. It is March 10th, 2013, and he is getting ready for his first Pokemon.
As he heads out the door of his bedroom, he sees his little sister slugging across the hallway, yawning every few seconds, looking extremely tired. "You look like you didn't sleep well." he says to her. "Yea.. I had a bad dream." she says. "What was it about?" he asks. "I cant really remember.. but I was tossing and turning all night." she says.
"Ah.." Joshua says. "I went to go sleep with mommy." she says. "Is she awake?" Joshua responds. "Yes." his sister says, and then the door across the hall slowly opens. The boys mother walks out.
"You're already up, Joshua?" she says. "Yeah." he responds. "Its not like you; I guess you are really excited for this Pokemon!" his mother says.
THE END
(How did you like it? Please give feedback, and if there is nothing positive to say, do not say anything at all. Also, by say I mean type. So no loopholes. :3) |
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| 10 Mar 2013 10:51 PM |
By THE END, I meant of Chapter One. Hopefully that was obvious. If I get good feedback, there will be a Chapter Two! |
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| 11 Mar 2013 10:29 AM |
anyooooneee feedback please |
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TNTJack
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| 11 Mar 2013 11:13 AM |
I shalt take pity on you.... Overall, glad you have good grammar, didn't make it confusing and just let it be more real. Good job, and I will probably read more chapters of this if you post them. |
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| 11 Mar 2013 12:18 PM |
Thank you. I know, a lot of Pokemon Forum RPer's have terrible grammar. If I get about one or two more fans, or anyone who supports this, I will start working on chapter two. |
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Raidorz
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| 11 Mar 2013 01:29 PM |
--[CHAPTER TWO]--
One hour later that day, the time is 7:52 AM. The family is just finishing breakfast. "So, honey, you are getting your Pokemon at 8:30 with Professor Rowan, right?" the mother asks. "Yes." Joshua replies. The TV blares. The news is on. Usually at this time, that family sits on the huge couch and watches TV. To keep that going, they do so.
"Breaking news! Wildfire in Petalburg Woods!" the reporter says. In the background of the reporter, there are a ton of flying and water type Pokemon, trying to help the forest out. Many firemen help the forest out.
"Oh my.. I hope everyone there is alright." the mother says. After watching the news about the fire, they notice it is time for Joshua to leave. 8:14 AM.
Joshua gets up. "It should take me about 15 minutes to get to the lab, so, I will be off." Joshua says, then bolts out, and runs to the lab.
15 minutes later, Joshua runs into the lab to see Professor Rowan. He turns around, and slowly walks towards Joshua.
"Ah, so, you are here.. As you may know, I am covering for Professor Birch. We both wanted to see different regions, so we exchanged regions for a while. Anyways... I have some bad news for you." Rowan says.
"What is it?" Joshua asks. "There are no more Pokemon. None." Professor Rowan says. Joshua's eyes widen. "N.. no more?" he says, in the strange voice crack he always enters before he sheds a tear. "Don't worry, Joshua!" Professor Rowan quickly replies. "There is a plane coming to Littleroot Town with many, many Pokemon on board. They are all going to be starter Pokemon, and you will be the first person to choose one!" Professor Rowan says.
"Okay, thank you, P-Professor." Joshua says, sniffling. "Now, go home, I have some business to attend to." Professor Rowan says. Joshua runs out the door. |
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TNTJack
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| 11 Mar 2013 01:45 PM |
* Awkward moment when you realized you woke up early for nothing* NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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| 11 Mar 2013 01:57 PM |
Nice to see that everyone is liking it! I will post Chapter Three soon. |
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:08 PM |
--[CHAPTER THREE]--
One day passed. The family wakes up, and Joshua wakes up again, knowing that today he will finally get his Pokemon. He gets dressed.. puts on the same thing as yesterday, but don't worry, it's clean. He usually likes to wear that outfit. As they finish breakfast, a knock on the door is heard. Joshua yells, "I'll get it!" then runs to the door.
He opens it, to see Professor Rowan, holding two briefcases. "Well, good morning Joshua!" he says, his brown hat shading his head from the sun. "And to you, sir. So, I am assuming you are here for the Pokemon?" Joshua says, very excitedly.
"Yes. May I come in?" Professor Rowan asks. "Sure." Joshua says as he steps back. Professor Rowan walks in, as my mother quickly greets him. "Good morning, Rowan. Would you like some coffee?" she asks. "Yes, thank you." Professor Rowan says.
Joshua's mother runs into the kitchen and makes coffee. Professor Rowan and Joshua sit down. Professor Rowan gently puts both briefcases on the table, then they open.
15 Pokemon there in total. 15 Pokeballs. "These are incredibly new and rare to this region." Professor Rowan says.
"Here there is Squirtle, the playful turtle. Then there is Piplup, from my region, like Squirtle, he is very playful and adorable. And in this, there is Oshawott. Clumsy, impatient.. but very creative and playful. Of course, Mudkip! Who doesn't like Mudkip? And Totodile! With those sharp jaws.. he will surely bring you to the top." Professor Rowan says.
He explains more.
"Then the playful grass types. Bulbasaur, the charming, playful little dinosaur. And then there is Turtwig. Who doesn't like that cute little face? No one, he is extremely cute! And Snivy.. well, Snivy plays jokes a lot. Not one to be tempered with!"
Professor Rowan rambles on and on and on and on! Wow, he sure likes Pokemon!
(There is more to this chapter but I have to do. Chapter Three and a half will be up later.) |
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:15 PM |
(but I have to do)
What does that mean?
I mean't I have to go soon. :P |
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| 11 Mar 2013 05:16 PM |
*I'm here to provide commentary thats funny.* Imagine if all the pokeballs were somehow empty. Heres a example on how that would be... Joshua: I choose Squirtle. Professor: Al-Wait...I'm pretty sure I got the wrong shipment...These are all empty pokeballs....Sorry.... Joshua:................ Joshua:NOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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| 11 Mar 2013 06:30 PM |
LOL That would be hilarious.
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| 11 Mar 2013 06:34 PM |
--[CHAPTER THREE AND A HALF]--
"That's a lot of Pokemon." Joshua says. "Yes. All very rare and friendly." Professor Rowan says. After a few seconds, Joshua leans in and grabs a Pokeball that is in the middle of both briefcases. He grabs the Pokeball as it shines. "I choose Mudkip!" |
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| 11 Mar 2013 06:41 PM |
| Lolhi. I like this. KEEP ON GOING MAN. YOU CAN DO IT. WOO. YEAH. |
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| 11 Mar 2013 06:57 PM |
(I'll start naming chapters)
--[CHAPTER FOUR (1/2)]-- Kyle's Arrival-
"Woo!" Joshua says, as the Mudkip jumps out of the Pokeball. A knock is heard on the door. Kyle, a friend of Joshua who also needs his Pokemon walks in. "Hey, Joshua." he says, completely ignoring everyone else. Kyle can be pretty rude, but usually not to friends. "Hey, Rowan." he says, as he jumps on the chair and puts his feet on the table, pushing the briefcase off the table. All the Pokeballs hit the ground, and all the Pokemon fly out.
"Whoa!" Joshua yells. "Sorry, not my fault." Kyle says. |
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| 11 Mar 2013 07:08 PM |
Damnit Mudkip You're more overpowered than you are in 4chan. |
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| 11 Mar 2013 07:39 PM |
--[CHAPTER FOUR 2/2]-- Close One
The Pokemon disappear. "Kyle!" Professor Rowan yells. "Look.. its-" "It is your fault, but, I forgive you." Professor Rowan says. "Those Pokemon are fast and playful. If they escaped... you would probably be running with them!" Professor Rowan says as he bursts into laughter. "Kyle, which Pokemon shall you choose?" Professor Rowan asks.
After seeing how great Joshua and Mudkip are getting along, Kyle wants a Hoenn starter. "This one!" Kyle yells as he grabs a Treecko's Pokeball. Treecko jumps out, and crawls around, then finally looks at Kyle. Professor Rowan stands up, and takes both briefcases. "Well. You two.. have fun on your journey. Take these." he says, as he throws two Pokedex's at Joshua and Kyle. Professor Rowan walks out the door.
Kyle and Joshua sit there, playing with their new Pokemon. |
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| 11 Mar 2013 07:49 PM |
--[CHAPTER 5]-- Vacation
Joshua's mother walks in, smiling. "Boys! I have great news! We are going on a vacation!" she says. My sister runs in, smiling. "What? I am coming?" Kyle says. "Yes. Your mother and I talked, she said it is fine. We are going to Solaceon Town." the mother says. "Really? For how long?" Joshua replies. "A few days, about 3 or 4. We leave in a few hours, and I packed most of your stuff, boys. Lets get packing! It is also important to bring your Pokemon to see new things, especially from other regions!" the mother says.
Time passes by in the day. At 5:31 PM, they are heading out the door. "To Sinnoh!" they all yell, then walk out the door. |
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| 11 Mar 2013 07:57 PM |
Hm....We were *this* close to making a complete reference to the show...*This* close...
*I am free for Creative thinking, providing ideas and helping out Rps* |
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| 12 Mar 2013 11:01 AM |
--[CHAPTER SIX]-- Fun in the Air
The family boards the huge plane to Sinnoh and they sit down and wait. Joshua and Kyle sit beside each other. "Are you ready for 16 hours of boredom?" Joshua says. "Boredom?" Kyle asks. "No. I brought some stuff." Kyle says. He takes out his phone. "I've got some fun games on i-" The screen on it turns black. "It died?" Joshua asks. "Yup." Kyle answers. "And you forgot the charger at home, didn't you?" Joshua asks. "...Yup." Kyle answers after a moment of silence. Joshua cant help but smile, but then look out the window and wave goodbye to Hoenn. Joshua loves Hoenn and all the people there, and even for 4 days.. he will surely miss it. Joshua leans his head against the window and falls asleep. Meanwhile, Kyle tries to find something to do.
After a while, Joshua wakes up and he notices Kyle is asleep. Joshua looks out the window to see many flying type Pokemon racing.. and then he sees Absol and Lucario racing on the ground.. He smiles.
"Attention, attention!" the pilot yells. "We are landing in Sinnoh!" he says. Kyle wakes up. |
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| 12 Mar 2013 11:05 AM |
Reality: "We are ALMOST landing in Sinnoh. Just a few hour delay..." He says. Kyle wakes up. "You woke my up for this???...." |
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