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| 11 Mar 2013 01:54 PM |
Comic name: Fuze Description: Time is not to be toyed with, and most people know to leave it alone. All was well on earth, the people lived in harmony and peace, but when an incident sparks... Disaster strikes. Time is pushed to brink of its limit, knowing that one wrong move could change the history of the universe... Forever. Fortunuately, there is always a hero. Join Spark on his adventure to mend the rips in time and space, and overcome his greatest enemy...
LOL a little over the top, but here's the promo: http://www.roblox.com/fuze-promo1-item?id=109243542
rate and give positive and/or negative feedback, I could use some ideas/advice on my drawing skill or storyboard. :P |
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:02 PM |
sounds horrible
looks horrible
you're horrible
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:04 PM |
... a little specific plz? I appreciate your feedback but i need specifics or i can't imrpove myself... I think the decal's still pending review :( |
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:05 PM |
Yeah, it's still pending. Any info on why the time space continuum was damaged?
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:05 PM |
uncreativre story
uncreative title
uncreative character
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:06 PM |
@moon
The guy didn't even give out much about the story, and we know nothing about the main protagonist. I could care less about the title.
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:08 PM |
but what he gace out was the most uncreative garbage
it shows that any other information probably isn't any different
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:10 PM |
You know what would be uncreative? A muscular man named John Doe saving the world from Martian invaders, while under the pseudo-name of Super Duper man. I see some potential in OP's comic.
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:11 PM |
it's a good idea, but it's been done before
unoriginal, uncreative
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:11 PM |
Ok, so here's the story... If the decal was done reviewing i could give u a visual, when it's ready, teh guy on the right is called firestorm. Firestorm is from around 2014
So this guy starts out ok, then he begins a conquest for power, he gets his dad to start an organization under the surname of MIST ( madley incorporation of satellite technology ). this is just a surname. So MIST develops a truckload of deadly weapons under anyone's knowledge, they release these weps in a war between North Korea and China. This isn't such a good idea, because instead of winning a war, it destroyed half the continent, so after that, they develop a wormhole generator, to bend time. Int he near future, the guy ont he left, cyclone, infiltrates the MIST HQ and uses the wormhole generator to "fix" the past... he succeeds, but he changed a bunch of other stuff that eh wasn't supposed to, and created a time-space rift (butterfly effect)... so now everyone is time traveling all over the place, trying to fix it, but they just make it worse.
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:14 PM |
Aren't North Korea and China allies? Any reason for the war in this dystopian society? And I'm assuming the made the wormhole to attempt to fix the aftermath of the nuclear war? The story needs some polishing.
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:15 PM |
give this guy some more constructive critique!! and ur comic is really cool by the way =)
id like to see a continuation of this comic. |
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:16 PM |
>Firestorm
same type of name used in warriors cats unoriginal
>So MIST develops a truckload of deadly weapons under anyone's knowledge, they release these weps in a war between North Korea and China.
place creates secret weapons starts war seen it before
>they develop a wormhole generator, to bend time
unoriginal
>he succeeds, but he changed a bunch of other stuff that eh wasn't supposed to, and created a time-space rift (butterfly effect)... so now everyone is time traveling all over the place, trying to fix it, but they just make it worse.
done before
I'm not saying it's necessarily bad (only really to me) just that it's riddled with unoriginality |
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:16 PM |
| correct, as this is a fictional graphic novel, I spiced it up by adding a little conflict which broke the alliance... and yes correct again, MIST created the wormhole generator in an attempt to fix the damage that had been done, but Cyclone utilized the prototype, which still needed tweaking. |
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:17 PM |
| I noticed, though this story is used on the basis of most science fiction stories, I tried to keep the story original as possible, but the main part of the story is about Spark, not the time space continuum, thx for feedback. |
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:19 PM |
ju try to spice up the names a little
the story would be okay, I just think that the character's names need some work |
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:20 PM |
| thx for the feedback, any advice? |
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| 11 Mar 2013 02:20 PM |
I'll keep into consideration, thx again :) gtg eat lunch, ill take any replies after i eat |
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| 11 Mar 2013 03:05 PM |
im back... IDK why the decal is still reviewing. :/ |
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| 11 Mar 2013 03:08 PM |
| OMG SO KAWAII 10/10 EDGY MARY SUES QUALITY ME3 GRADE WRITING |
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| 11 Mar 2013 03:11 PM |
might I ask some clarification? i didn't understand anything that you said xD |
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| 11 Mar 2013 03:11 PM |
just givin some criticism m8
trying to help
but I also tried not toi be an asshat this time |
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