PenBlade
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| 05 Jan 2013 03:21 PM |
Hook: I'm gon' life my life on top of the world, Top of the world (2x) Gotta live my life on top of the world Top of the world (2x) I'm gon' live my life on top of the world
V1: Maybe before my last breath, You will see a man that, Ran till the last step/ Don't matter if I got some cash left, I know my seed will be the tree, Of a legacy that I had left/ But was it left right? Leave me in the dark night (Dark Knight) I'm just a Joker, hopin' I'm livin' my life right Just might, go crazy if I don't hear the answer, My life is like a cancer/ They like "Put yo hands up." I'm like "Surrender? Never."/ I'm doin' me, and I ain't gonna stop I'm livin' like a Villain, but I know I am on top
Hook:Top of the world (2x) Gotta live my life on top of the world Top of the world (2x) I'm gon' live my life on top of the world
V2: Sometimes we sit here, we neglectin', No respectin', Cuz most of us are frontin' like our lives don't need perfection, My occupation is wreckin', everything they expectin', I ain't no pop star, but I only move in One Direction/ Now they askin' "Who is he?" Now they wonderin' my name, I run in my own lane, Nemesis is the king!/ Till my heart stop pumpin, No more blood in my veins, Watch me show up everyday, Homeboy I'm goin' insane!/ I'm doin' me, and I ain't gonna stop I'm livin' like a Villain, but I know I am on top
Hook:Top of the world (2x) Gotta live my life on top of the world Top of the world (2x) I'm gon' live my life on top of the world |
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PenBlade
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| 05 Jan 2013 05:25 PM |
| I need some feedback, like this or hate it? |
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PenBlade
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| 05 Jan 2013 05:51 PM |
| Thanks! Check out my other songs too. |
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PenBlade
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| 05 Jan 2013 09:59 PM |
| Lookin to get signed if anyone is interested |
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link6249
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| Joined: 06 Jan 2011 |
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| 05 Jan 2013 10:13 PM |
| Dude. No. Ro-labels are BS. Seriously... |
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| 05 Jan 2013 10:22 PM |
| 7.5/10. You are good with rhymes. You still have to work on things. But I like. |
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PenBlade
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| 06 Jan 2013 09:28 PM |
@ link, it passes the time.
@ M8, thanks for the feedback. Let me know what you think I should work on and I will try my best. |
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| 07 Jan 2013 01:22 PM |
@M8 I agree, needs a little more rhythm but other than that... 9/10 |
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Fozdy
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| 07 Jan 2013 02:39 PM |
"Dark night (dark knight)" Why don't just type it in one?? |
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PenBlade
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| 07 Jan 2013 09:00 PM |
| I try to use lots of word-play in my rhymes, and when I do I explain it in parentheses so people get it. |
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| 08 Jan 2013 07:08 PM |
| So how is your house in the clouds? You lonely? Lol. But still, No Worries, you DID improve to like 9.8/10. Congratz. |
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PenBlade
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| 08 Jan 2013 08:03 PM |
| Lol Cloud 8 is where I kick back. Thanks dude. |
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| 08 Jan 2013 08:06 PM |
| I could sing it on put it on youtube, but I dont rap -_- |
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PenBlade
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| 08 Jan 2013 08:11 PM |
| I don't look down on singing, in fact it's in tons of my songs, so I'd appreciate if you didn't look down on my music. Just sayin man. |
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| 08 Jan 2013 08:19 PM |
Okay rap it for you.
Ill give you credit too. |
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PenBlade
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| 08 Jan 2013 08:46 PM |
| What you talkin about? I lost you bro. You gonna do my rap on Youtube? |
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| 08 Jan 2013 08:48 PM |
| Yes. Except, I need a different rap. -_- I think I might do one with a more similar beat to a song, like Whistle. I need to know the beat. |
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PenBlade
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| 08 Jan 2013 08:50 PM |
| Oh, I got you. My bad. I don't really have a way to show you the beat, so yeah you'd probably have to use another song. |
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PenBlade
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| 10 Jan 2013 07:43 PM |
| Check out the other songs on my debut album, Villains, if you haven't yet. |
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| 10 Jan 2013 08:39 PM |
Your not a rapper. Even if you were you wouldnt be on here posting lyrics that are free to take. Another thing This is Lyrics no sound. Also you wouldnt even be mainstream. You act like your famous and everyone knows your name. Nope? a album? Who starts off with a album? Kidding me. And get your lyrical skills up kid.
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PenBlade
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| 10 Jan 2013 08:59 PM |
| I know they're free to take, which is why I don't put down my best stuff. And I'm pretty sure I noticed there's no sound. I just write down lyrics for the fun of it. I couldn't care less if I was mainstream because most mainstream rappers just talk about money, girls, swag, and curse every other word. That's not rap. I don't act like I'm famous and not many people know about me....not sure where you got that assumption. And I know it's unusual to start with an album, but I don't care. People have done it before. Also, if you can't prove to me that your lyrical skills are better, then I take that comment with a grain of sand. If you can prove it, then good for you. I'll listen to you then. Last, but not least, thanks for your feedback. |
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