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| 22 Dec 2012 04:51 PM |
| Once upon a time there was a family called the Cramp Family. So when they got their tree there was a spider web and so on each day there was a new one. the family thought it was good luck but they started to cramp about it. So after one of the children got out of school the Mom embarrassed her child. The child said mom your cramping my style talking about the spiders. So the mom felt bad and was depressed. so the next morning they realized she kick the sleigh. she was bitten from a spider. then there was a spider web with letters saying 'See what you did". The next morning they moved out of the house because of the spiders. When they were packing one little spider got in there. Then the Cramps were never found again. |
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| 22 Dec 2012 04:54 PM |
| As original as your stories are, you NEED to work on spelling and grammar. You have potential, don't waste it on low-effort one offs like this. RP is a dangerous place. Bebi lurks like a panther, and there are others who will tear you apart for things like this. Just be careful, and check out some other stories and RPs for inspiration |
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| 22 Dec 2012 06:16 PM |
| Also, I would recommend you don't make a new thread for every short story. Keep them all in one or make a big compilation. Otherwise, expect people to get mad. |
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