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koopaNGC is not online. koopaNGC
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04 Dec 2012 10:45 PM
There once was man who was incredibly rich, that he was wealthy enough to buy whatever luxury he desired with the exception for one. He could never get himself a girl he could call his own.

One day he ordered the best men on the planet tha he could rally up, all skilled at their trade, to make him an artificial lady to love him and his aching heart. They built the machine they called the "Beauty Queen" and she would spend her days right by her man's side, day and night. It was for one year the man lived with her together. He enjoyed her company, but his heart could never bring itself to love her.

One day he met a girl in private who she grew to be quite fond of the wealthy man. Their relationship grew and grew with each of the following days until she demanded that he marry her. On that same day he ordered the machine to leave his mansion and never come back again with his new fiancé by his side.

The machine stalled and pulled the knife from the turkey she was preparing for dinner later that night and threw it at the man. It struck him in the chest not deep enough to be mortal, but extremely painful nonetheless. In agony he turned around to his love and muttered out only one single word, "run". Unfortunately, whatever exit they chose as they made their escape was always greeted by the "Beauty Queen" with another knife in her hand. They eventually had no choice but to run upstairs through a labyrinth of rooms to finally pick a large enough closet only big enough for the both of them to remain concealed.

There was silence as the man thought wildly to himself while his girl cried pitifully in silence. After an hour had passed, the machine's voice made itself clear to be within the room when the man had gained the bravado to even touch the door handle. "I thought all you two needed was each other so I will give you two just that. To be alone and die together, but as soon as the door opens only your faces will be mounted upon the fireplace. You will join the big game you have hunted so well my dear ex-husband, because I have found that lovely hunting riffle which was once your grandfathers."

The frightened couple sat in the closet unaware of the world that was outside the small dark space they were in during the night they were there, only to be taking turns sleeping and living in a nightmare neither of them had blamed for on the other.

Finally the man spoke up. "I want to make a compromise. Please hear me out." When the negotiations were made his girl walked out of the closset leaving the man alone. Unexpectedly, there was a gunshot and the man yelled as he heard a slump to the floor. The closset had been locked from the outside as soon as she had left and now the man was trapped. He did not wait long, however; to be reunited with his girl once again...

As a souvenir the "Beauty Queen" kept the one thing the man had treasured most of all after the gunshot rang out; her heart, while the man was locked forever in the closet with the corpse of the girl, the machine had generously returned, who would never again say she loved him now that they were together again in the peace and darkness.
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PyroEX is not online. PyroEX
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04 Dec 2012 10:48 PM
that was good
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koopaNGC is not online. koopaNGC
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04 Dec 2012 10:51 PM
@PyroEX, Thanks, I thought no one would read it due to how long it is.
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hwen4 is not online. hwen4
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04 Dec 2012 10:51 PM
What is this "machine", and how can I get one.
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koopaNGC is not online. koopaNGC
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04 Dec 2012 10:53 PM
@hwen4, First of all you're going to need a lot of dollar signs. Next you need to use that to hire a bunch of smart people from across the globe to create an AI for your own needs. Then you wait as they build... Followed by ???


...Profit!
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Milbert23 is not online. Milbert23
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04 Dec 2012 10:54 PM
it reads like a synopsis
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koopaNGC is not online. koopaNGC
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04 Dec 2012 11:00 PM
@Milbert23, I had a bit of the Twilight Zone in mind as I typed it, but I wanted to make it short enough for some to actually read it all.
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Pwnszor is not online. Pwnszor
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04 Dec 2012 11:04 PM
Cell phones.
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hwen4 is not online. hwen4
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04 Dec 2012 11:06 PM
Though was was it that a random Robot came in and killed them both....
LOGIC
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koopaNGC is not online. koopaNGC
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04 Dec 2012 11:07 PM
@Pwnszor, It's not modern day. You can tell, because of the line about the mounted animal heads on the walls. Current day laws prohibit the creation of such stuffed mounted heads. Cell phones don't exsist yet.
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Pwnszor is not online. Pwnszor
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04 Dec 2012 11:10 PM
Then how was there such technology to have a "Machine" called the "Beauty Queen?"

That's kind of contradicting.
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hwen4 is not online. hwen4
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04 Dec 2012 11:12 PM
Oh ok, I get it. AI kills family ha, ha, ha
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koopaNGC is not online. koopaNGC
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04 Dec 2012 11:12 PM
@Pwnszor, Yes, but it fits into the science fiction a bit. As I said I had the Twilight Zone in mind, and it took the greatest minds to create. This story is not meant to be taken as realistic, but more made up.
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Pwnszor is not online. Pwnszor
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04 Dec 2012 11:13 PM
Sorry, but 6/10 honest rate.
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koopaNGC is not online. koopaNGC
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04 Dec 2012 11:14 PM
@hwen4, What are you talking about? AI kills girlfriend, guts out her heart, and throws her back into the closet she locked with the boyfriend who is still alive. The boyfriend is stuck in there with a dead body on him and can't leave the closet, so he eventually dies of starvation. It's that simple.
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koopaNGC is not online. koopaNGC
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04 Dec 2012 11:15 PM
@Pwnszor, When I read this the highest I thought it deserved was a 3, so I'm okay with this.
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lego258 is not online. lego258
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04 Dec 2012 11:15 PM
Really good.
9.9/10 would read again.

~OT's Father.~
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koopaNGC is not online. koopaNGC
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04 Dec 2012 11:18 PM
@lego258, Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.
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tnt91 is not online. tnt91
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04 Dec 2012 11:20 PM
0/10 no swag whatsoever .. i am sorry for this !
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koopaNGC is not online. koopaNGC
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04 Dec 2012 11:23 PM
@TNT91, It's okay. I hold no grudge on you.
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