scorspi
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| 20 Nov 2012 10:31 PM |
"Sir its the epidemic... It hit the planet and in seconds it was engulfed... Engulfed in Crystal." "Crystal? A meteor hit our planet and it turned to crystal?!" "The meteor wasnt a meteor... It was a pod. a broken one when it crashed it sent crystals all around. engulfing the planets core and freezing over the planet. Everyone survived. If you call be frozen in crystal for eternity survival. "Its just us and our crew?" "Yes..." "It seems that the pod came fro-" A new voice entered the room. "Sir! another crystal pod is coming straight for us!" "Evade it!" "Were trying! whatever it is its emitting a EMP!" "Well shot it the-" That was the sentence the space captain never finished before the crystal pod hit the ship and it was frozen as the ship drifted back and crashed into the planet that the ship had launched from. coated in crystal. 1,0000 years passed since then and those men are still preserved perfectly in crystal. Now the same thing is happening once again.
~Scorspi
This was just a short story someone can read for entertainment. This was originally going too be a RP but i couldnt find a way too make it one. Feedback will be appreciated. Im sorry its so short. |
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| 20 Nov 2012 10:33 PM |
| this sounds freaking amazing |
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scorspi
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| 20 Nov 2012 10:36 PM |
| Really? Thanks. Maybe you could help me turn this into a RP? I was thinking that the pods were launched by well... Crystal beings that want too corrupt the universe with crystal and turn it into there own image and there would be different races and you had too join up with them too fight off the crystal beings. |
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| 20 Nov 2012 10:40 PM |
This reminds me of my roleplay, but it might be cool to use this idea into a kind of sequel.
But I won't
Just, yeah.
Me likeys. |
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scorspi
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| 20 Nov 2012 10:44 PM |
| What? im sorry for stealing your rp ideas? I dont know. I want too make this into a roleplay but i know a trolls gonna ruin it and im gonna be all sad. |
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scorspi
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| 20 Nov 2012 10:54 PM |
| Thanks for all your feedback. Ill attempt too turn this into a RP. If you could help that would be amazing. |
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| 20 Nov 2012 10:55 PM |
1m 4 troll but 1 dont l1k3 ru1n1ng rps, th4t 1s m34n
1 w1ll m4k3 sur3 you wont b3 s4d |
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scorspi
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| 20 Nov 2012 11:04 PM |
Sir its the epidemic... It hit the planet and in seconds it was engulfed... Engulfed in Crystal." "Crystal? A meteor hit our planet and it turned to crystal?!" "The meteor wasnt a meteor... It was a pod. a broken one when it crashed it sent crystals all around. engulfing the planets core and freezing over the planet. Everyone survived. If you call be frozen in crystal for eternity survival. "Its just us and our crew?" "Yes..." "It seems that the pod came fro-" A new voice entered the room. "Sir! another crystal pod is coming straight for us!" "Evade it!" "Were trying! whatever it is its emitting a EMP!" "Well shot it the-" That was the sentence the space captain never finished before the crystal pod hit the ship and it was frozen as the ship drifted back and crashed into the planet that the ship had launched from. coated in crystal. 1,0000 years passed since then and those men are still preserved perfectly in crystal. Now the same thing is happening once again.
The Races
Humans Manti (Insectiod aliens somewhat like mantises) Strong with attack force Sluglums (Slugs with a slimy squishy skin but they do have phychic powers. Great for seeing through nebulas and fighting phychic slug battles Rockmen: Strong immune systems and high strentgh able too defeat enemies quickly Engirion Mostly cyborg creatures great for repairing stuff but not good for fights. Energon: Advanced technology users they can add extra power too a system just by operating that system. reduced health. Unknown: These are the crystal beings. Nothing is known about them.
(Im officially turning this into a RP. how good is this so far?) |
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| 20 Nov 2012 11:06 PM |
Crystals?
This, this is not crystal m. eth.
*TURNS AND CHUCKS IT AT THE WALL*
*BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM* |
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scorspi
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| 20 Nov 2012 11:09 PM |
It's...
It's from Breaking Bad.
*sigh* |
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excalis46
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| 20 Nov 2012 11:16 PM |
| It's not horrible, but I think it could use some work. Races need more description, you'd need to give rules, and provide a Character sheet. You're spelling and grammar could use a little work and people would appreciate that, though I personally don't mind too much. |
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scorspi
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| 21 Nov 2012 08:21 AM |
Thanks and I'm doing it bit by bit. Too see how well it goes, Grammar isn't a top priority. I mean seriously? Its the internet. People don't use grammar all the time. Ill start working on rules now. |
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| 21 Nov 2012 08:49 AM |
Us roleplayers are sophisticated,
And blatantly don't want to join a rp that looks 'Liek dis,' |
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scorspi
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| 21 Nov 2012 08:53 AM |
The Races
Humans:Obvious? Manti (Insectiod aliens somewhat like mantises) Strong with attack force. green skin colored however they cant repair items very fast. Sluglums (Slugs with a slimy squishy skin but they do have phychic powers. Great for seeing through nebula's and fighting phychic slug battles Rockmen: Strong immune systems and high strength able too defeat enemies quickly. No upped attack force just higher Health. Suffocates slower. Engirion Mostly cyborg creatures great for repairing stuff but not good for fights. Zoltius: Advanced technology users they can add extra power too a system just by operating that system. reduced health. Unknown: These are the crystal beings. Nothing is known about them.
Shiptems! (Ship systems)
O2 chamber: Your in space. if you run out of oxygen you die. Problem? This is a main target for enemies because you lose fresh oxygen while its down. Weapons:Allows you to make and shoot weapons. Bonus for charging weapons if a crew member operates it. Shield systems: Blocks lasers and beams. Missles can breach it though. Bonus too recharge time if a crew member operates the system. Drone control: You can control repair drones assault drones hull repair drones laser drones and shield drones. Engines: Also a main target if your engines are broken you have less evasion chance and you cant fly away. Bonus too movement if a crew member operates. Piloting room: You need i quote NEED, too have a crewmember on this too fly. Cloaking:Vanish from sight too charge your weapons or try and give your crew a breather. Medbay: Obvious? Crew teleporter: Teleport your crew too the enemy ship too defeat there crew members. Remember too teleport back though. Sensors:See your own ship! Doors: Yes you need a door system. or else your crew would be trapped.
Ship C.S Name: Captain: Crew: (Admins can start with crystal crew members and i will tell them what they do.) Systems: (Piloting, doors, engines and weapons are required. you can have two extra besides these required ones.) Color: Perks:(Only admins can start with perks)
Captain C.S Name: A.ge: Gender: Appearence: Personality Bio:
Rules Traditional roblox rules.
Perks and stuff you dont know will be revealed too you when you find or discover them, same with weapons. |
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| 21 Nov 2012 08:53 AM |
| Awww man now i don't think that was very good what i just posted... |
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excalis46
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| 21 Nov 2012 04:40 PM |
| It's getting better, cool idea letting players command their own ships. I still think races need alot of work, I'd be happy to redo your race descriptions for you if you'd like. I really want this to do well since I'd love to be part of a big galaxy at war type roleplay. |
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scorspi
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| 21 Nov 2012 04:40 PM |
| I can send you a piratepad link! |
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| 21 Nov 2012 04:41 PM |
| Sounds good, though it'd be my first time working on piratepad so you'd have to excuse my experience there! |
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| 21 Nov 2012 04:55 PM |
But for me to make a character is slightly confusing. Do I use both templates or one? Other wise, Me Gusta |
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| 21 Nov 2012 04:57 PM |
| Both are different templates for different things. the top one is for your ship and the bottom is for your captain. |
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