Camdis21
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| 05 Nov 2012 09:38 PM |
-Before I start this, this isn't a cooperative roleplay, its basically a story. Thanks.
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[Prologue] A buff country kind of man set his 22 down on the porch. He felt the urge, the urge to hunt. He set off into the lush forests of Kentucky. As he trudged through the autumn leaves, he saw a graceful deer prance around a pond. As it gained the feeling as it was in trouble, it looked around. Before the deer noticed, it was gone. As he walked back to his house, he noticed a small group of men gathered near his house.
[Chapter One] "What?" "no, I'm not familiar with that...." the man replied to the men's consistent questions. As he kept saying the same answer, the men became annoyed. "Look. You were in a coma for three years, and lost your memory of being a soldier. Don't you remember, Mark?!". "Perhaps, perhaps you are correct..." Mark replied. "Okay, you regained SOME memory. If you do not remember, I'm Ken, code-name "Warpig." The man next to me is Clark, code-name "Greed"." Ken explained. "And mine?" Mark asked. "Blade."
-I will continue tomorrow.- |
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FIRECAKE
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| 05 Nov 2012 10:13 PM |
you write like me in 3rd grade
too much talking
not enough actual writing
anyone can write dialogue |
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Camdis21
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| 05 Nov 2012 11:07 PM |
| Prologue was nice, but something happened in chapter 1... |
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Camdis21
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| 06 Nov 2012 03:13 PM |
| yes, i dislike chapter 1 myself... |
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