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| 09 Oct 2012 11:48 AM |
Long ago, in the medieval era- an era were one roam free with wind flowing in each strain of one’s hair and a smile on his face, but it was also an era of lust and sword stained with blood- gripped by an evil tyrant. In the land of Hizki, where forest and timber grew upon the ground. When spring came out flowers and nature rose up wildly but beautiful. Though it was beautiful in one season when fall came by you would know it is too late to stock up for winter, for when the frost rages on and you are weak you will find it will be your last and most important lesson to prepare for war. For even fighting on the rough weather is a battle and can become a war. That is why they give blessings to Ulla- spring maiden, hoping she will battle on the winter spirit- Makir. Though the people are not much worried about the weather- no for men are much crueler than a harsh snow storm for men can crush one’s emotions much worst to the point the victim wishes to not taste death but devour it. Thus I wish to say the country is in a nasty civil war because of two brothers- Zicri and Ahijah. The hate between the brothers began the war. They were twins- Ahijiah was born a few moments before Zicri was released out of his mother’s womb. Now, Zicri was born by the sword he had the natural talent, he had his father. Ahijiah on the other hand, was quiet- he read the books and even tried to translate the ancient scrolls. He was a very lonely child for his father was always out training his brother and his mother died years ago because of frost bite when he was young. Ahijiah’s father was disappointed of him especially because he was his eldest son with his nose into scrolls and books. So when their father- a king, was on his death bed he choked his last few words- commanding Zicri as king. Ahijiah was furious to hear his younger brother becoming king when all those years he studied ways to help his country in politics and battle tactics but him never really fought in battle by the sword, though he has been trained only a few years before he gave up when he was only a child. He left his brother and dying father vowing he would return was a rightful army and knowledge from the gods. Decades later Ahijiah became king of the east of Hizki when his brother rules what his father did- west. Ahijiah has not yet had knowledge from the gods, nor even a rightful army. In fact his people are actually suffering economically; he keeps on burrow supplies, food, soldiers, and currency fro other nations. Though has been making friendships to most the nations he burrows from but sometimes his people doubt him- believing his *friends* just might truly show him who they are and when they do, if they do, they will end in another sad story. But they do enjoy him because he is a very compassionate character- caring about his people’s every needs. Though on the other hand, Zicri has mastered the sword and trained his people to become honorable warriors. His people may suffer some years but at least he knows he tried his best and no one can accept anything more. His people find him more reliable because he has a trusted army and a good spirit. Though some find his spirit too far on the dark side. Ever since his brother abandoned him, he gripped the sword in his hand also vowing to see the soul of his brother cursed into the core of the underworld. His hate for his brother burns so deeply his people fear to see the monster inside of him. But our story does not start off in a palace of Ahijiah, or the training grounds of Zicri. But in a small town of Foxwood. One made of timber and a few trusting troops, but an interesting story. What is the fate of the story? Alright, so that is pretty much the storyline. Foxwood stands on Zicri’s territory, so the few guards are from other countries. I wish to make this role-play as descriptive and interactive as possible.
Rules 1. No Mary Sues 2. No Godmodding 3.Follow Roblox Rules 4. Stay active unless you have an acceptable excuse 5.Follow Roblox’s terms of service 6.Use “()” when not role-playing. 7. Have acceptable grammar. 8. More rules may yet to come. 9. Put Steel Sword in other if you read the Rules
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My Characters
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Name: Frendel Forthwind, but his real name is Andrew Hadrian
A.g.e: 19
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Appearance: He has red hair that curls in a messy way, baby blue eyes, cheeks are sprinkled with freckles, and his skin is peach pink. He weighs 156 lbs with mild muscles. He wears a commoner’s leather shirt with tattered cotton shorts.
Occupation/ Job: Woodcutter but is actually a spy of Ahijiah.
Personality: He has a delightful personality, always agreeing with people, smiling, a type of guy you would want to be with.
Bio: He was one of Ahijiah’s favorite spies because he has been living like one for his whole life. He never knew about his parents though he assumes they abandoned him. He could always get the job done mercilessly. He never cared about his victim’s feelings but the reward of his master. He is just one of many spies that are sent to the Zicri’s towns. He takes on the simple life of a woodcutter, though he is trying to find ever weakness of the town, every weakness of the structure of the town and the people.
Disabilities: He is blinded by wealth; he sold his soul to golden coins. He will do anything for wealth even if it meant becoming a traitor.
Fears: He fears becoming poor so being a woodcutter hurts him a little bit but not much because when he finishes he will be rewarded greatly. He also has the fear of being out in the woods at night because there could be vicious animals out, that is why he tries to get shifts in the daylight.
Character Quote: “Don’t look at me disgusted if I take money over friends, I have a cold heart because my parents did.”
Other: Steel Sword
Name: William Fenwick
A.g.e: 45
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Appearance: He has straight long raven black hair with gray streaks which he braids. He has a rough beard covering his chin. His left eye is blindfolded because he lost it in the war, but on the right he has an emerald green eye. He weights 190 and is 6’4 feet tall. He wears his fancy puffed cotton shirt with a velvet waist coat and silky pants with noble boots covering his feet.
Occupation/ Job: Duke of the town
Personality: He is serious and has no sense of humor but that doesn’t mean he is cold hearted he warms up to his people, trying to deal out everything fairly. He loves the people of his town and wishes to help them every way he can. Though he has a hatred for traitors.
Bio: Once fought in the war as a brave knight was granted a town to govern. He has a wife and a daughter. He worries about his daughter, she is fascinated about combat though she knows the burden and sorrows of war. He only wishes to raise his daughter like a girl is suppose to be raised.
Disabilities: Many scars cover his body, he has a bad foot and walks with a limp, and he has only one eye.
Fears: He has fears of raging fires and his town being taken.
Character Quote: “Cause trouble in my town I will cause trouble on your skull.
Other: Steel Sword
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Name: Mirabelle Fenwick
A.g.e: 16
Gender: Female
Race: Human
Appearance: Long black hair from her father with brown eyes from her mother. She has tan like skin from training out in the sun. She weighs 134 lbs and has mild muscles from working out. She is required to wear her dress but forsakes the rule.
Occupation/ Job: Duke’s daughter
Personality: She is daring and adventurous, trusting, though she hates traitors just like her father.
Bio: She lives with her father as the duke’s daughter. She find her life very boring, though she is very gifted to be able have a tutor though her father has generously given her a trainer which she finds a great advantage. She knows her father wishes her to be like all daughters of dukes, the smart and intelligent girl that might even marry a prince and become queen, later saving the country from some big war.
Disabilities: She is a rebellious type that can get her into trouble.
Fears: She tries to be as lively as possible though she fears being under pressure and having her love ones dead.
Character Quote: “Why live life like everybody else? You will just become another sad story in the end when you could be remembered as a brave warrior with a legacy.
Other: Steel Sword
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fireturn
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| 09 Oct 2012 11:56 AM |
Firstly nicely done. Your writing needs some improvement but nothing that can't be fixed with practice. I'm intriuged to see where this is going, clearly there has been though behind this.
Please clarify what races are available though... If you would |
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Jinxy
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| 09 Oct 2012 02:06 PM |
| (Looks good. If you typed this up in Word, I recommend pressing the 'enter' key twice between paragraphs) |
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| 09 Oct 2012 02:22 PM |
(Thank you, this is porbably one of my worst threads because I udually like to make stories out of them but I didn't do it this time because I am still planning out for a great one.
I really let the people decide what races they want, if it is something too powerful or just nonsense then it will be disapproved of.) |
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RJ1995
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| 09 Oct 2012 03:27 PM |
| (I may join later in the day.) |
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| 09 Oct 2012 03:47 PM |
| (I probably will join after reading everything.) |
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| 09 Oct 2012 04:24 PM |
Name: Nathaniel Cecil
A.g.e: 17.
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Appearance: He wears tight brown leather pantaloons, buckled up with his belt, shiny silver. His boots are black and strapped down. he has a bloody bandage on his hip, from an older wound. He wears a cloak around his body, a hood coming up and covering his eyes. His mouth has a small stubble of a beard. He wears a small plate over his chest to protect him from arrows, this is visible only if he opens his cloak up. He also has two knives inside his cloak, for cutting and throwing. He keeps his sabre on his hip, poking out and behind his cloak. He looks skinny and tall, agile yet weak on the physical side. Obviously someone who has some tricks up his sleeves.
Occupation/ Job: A thief, doing what he wants, when he wants. An adventurous and appealing lifestyle, dangerous nonetheless.
Personality: Cocky and adventurous but silent. Charming, in a sense.
Bio: He was raised an orphan, and paid for his bread through pickpocketing. He was always a bit of a quiet boy, but always had his way with thieving, his skill was noticed by some other thieves, so he was taken in by them and taught how to make his way. After deciding on the town of Foxwood for residence, he has gotten a name for himself, wanted posters hanging up, describing this nameless phenomenon. He's been able to live in a secret hideout, but has had his eyes on the Duke's residence, but he's not doing it for money, but for the bragging rights.
Disabilities: He's got a careless attitude for his own safety, which has gotten him in trouble, with the law and with his health, before.
Fears: He's got a deathly fear of being caught and beheaded, which is why he usually tries to plan everything he does.
Character Quote: "It's not about making money, it's about taking money."
Other: Steel swords (sell well with the fences,) |
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loppolh
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| 10 Oct 2012 12:10 PM |
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Name: Joseph Flowers
A.g.e: 31
Ge.nder:M
Race: Human
Appearance: A little top heavy, owing to his previous trade as a blacksmith. Flowers is usually seen in uniform, even when on leave. As a cavalryman, he takes pride in a smart appearance, though when on campaign this is not always easy or even possible to achieve. He wears a dark blue long tailed coat with white facings, white smallclothes, and a light blue epaulette on the left shoulder to denote his rank. His tall boots and crested helmet make him stand out, unless he is amongst other troopers. Hair Color: Black Hair Style: Ear length swept to left Eye color: Blue Height: Five foot four Build: Sturdy Voice: Bass; calm and level
Occupation/ Job: SGT in the army.
Personality: Sergeant Flowers is a man of few frills. His interests are simple and he doesn’t believe in over-complicating things. The most important thing to him is getting on and doing his job. Enjoyment of said job is not a necessary part of his thought process. While it does help to take pleasure in your work, Flowers finds it possible to do well on pure professionalism alone. Whatever needs doing, he can be counted on to do it.
He is not easy to make angry. Annoyance, yes. Anger, no. The most certain way to do so is to do something overtly dangerous and/or threatening where he can see it. There is nothing he dislikes so much as a careless soldier. In general, Flowers is a steady, unflappable fellow. He is happiest to simply get on with things and see to it that any job given to him is done in the best way possible.
Because of his rank and length of service, he is not afraid of enforcing discipline. Even officers are not exempt from a polite word of correction. It would be accurate to say that Flowers is more willing to set an officer straight than most others of his rank, because he believes that officers should set a good example for their men. He does not tolerate disrespect from junior troopers and never hesitates to correct misbehaviour from them.
Bio: Joseph joined the army at the age of sixteen under the name of ' Joe Flowers'. He trained for ages and ages until his peers so his capabilities. He is currently gazetted as an Ensign.
Disabilities: Often too brusque for good relations with officers, known to hold grudges, not very agile
Fears: Artillery, receiving any bad news about his family
Character Quote: " I'm not asking for the gold of the world or all the jewels, all I ask for is a clean heart."
Other: Bronze swords, woops steel swords. |
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| 10 Oct 2012 12:19 PM |
| (Not accepted, you know this is in the Medieval age. And can you please change the last name. Plus the roleplay is really focusing on the town not in some army fighting in another part of the country. If you want to have some type of occupation in the military you might want to be a townsguard.) |
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| 10 Oct 2012 12:39 PM |
| (It appears you put a lot of work into that. So, if you still want to join I can hep you.) |
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loppolh
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| 10 Oct 2012 03:01 PM |
| (Alright, thank you for the effort though.) |
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RJ1995
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| 10 Oct 2012 04:22 PM |
| (Ok...One last question. Is this high fantasy (Lots of magic & stuff) or low fantasy (Pretty much just medieval in a different setting), or somewhere in-between? This will determine the generation of my character.)? |
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| 10 Oct 2012 05:21 PM |
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Name: Walter Firethorn
A.g.e: 19
Gender: Male
Race: Caucasion
Appearance: Very Tan from working in the field. About 5'7" Started work as an apprentince blacksmith at 16 became a master blacksmith at 19 and became less tan during the three year period.
Occupation/ Job: Master blacksmith
Personality: Quiet. Verry salitary. Likes to be alone.
Bio: I lost my mom at birth. My dad was a very religious man upto the day that he died, The day I turned 14. I am an only child. The only learning I did was when I was learing to blacksmith.
Disabilities: Illiteracy.
Fears: Royalty.
Character Quote: "If you can't do it Right, don't do it."
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| 10 Oct 2012 05:23 PM |
| (The in between. But all mages discovered will be immediatedly signed into the military. Though if you are a mage in hiding and they find you, you shall be given a harsh punishment.) |
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| 10 Oct 2012 05:26 PM |
| (Not accepted, you are missing something important, you might want to read back. Anyways you can not possibly be a blacksmith at the age of 19 yet and plus there will already be a master black smith. And I adviise you to be maybe a woodcutter too so you can be more in the roleplay and see my character. And if you wish not to do that, then be a famer or something...) |
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| 10 Oct 2012 05:33 PM |
[Would I be allowed to make a recruit guard, who was sent there to learn the ropes.
He isn't much of a fighter, but has small magical ability.
Not a full fledged wizard or mage, but could amount to something in the future?
Pretty much the rookie who can barely use a sword, and is kind if easily intimidated.] |
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| 10 Oct 2012 05:42 PM |
[Wait, what other races ARE there? :L
Just noticed there was a race section in the CS.] |
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