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| 07 Oct 2012 02:59 AM |
Jake is skating in skate park,and his best friend Jack never shows up,he goes home and takes out his laptop and finds out his best friend is banned. He puts on new clothes and heads out for adventure trying to find the man who banned his best friend, he passes dangerous stuff on the way!He finds a young warrior that helps him.But the man who banned his best friend sneaks in and assassinates the young warrior. In the end the man who banned the best friend,Mercury and Jake fighting in a epic battle with swords, Jake kills the man and retrieves back his friend,Next time u see them they are skateboarding in the skate park.
Here are the free roles:
Merc (banning dude)
Young warrior (Lloyd)
Jack
Ninja's (Yes i made them,i will need atleast 2)
Slenderman
Bad Assassin
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lavigor
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lavigor
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| 07 Oct 2012 04:37 AM |
| Actually can I be the banner |
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| 07 Oct 2012 04:46 AM |
| Ok i will get back to u ASAP |
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Mr44
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| 07 Oct 2012 11:28 AM |
I just want to point out a fundamental problem with your writing: two important characters have similar names (Jack and Jake). You want the viewer to easily distinguish who the protagonist is and who the guy who got banned is. Having similar names could confuse the viewer.
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