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| 04 Oct 2012 04:29 PM |
Everyone is gonna hate me now.
PROLOGUE :
Moonlight was setting over the forest. "Diamondstar, I had a dream..." A blue cat turned over with curious icy blue eyes. "Hmm?" "I saw...I saw a river. It was flowing,,,,And then I saw cats fighting. Then, I saw a green glow...Then I woke up." The other cat mewed. She was a tortoiseshell cat, with green eyes and a slightly chipped ear. "I see. Do you know what it means?" The tortoiseshell looked away for a moment. "To tell the truth, I don't. I thought you should know." She finally replied. The blue cat did a nod of approval and slid back to her cave, unseen in the moonlight.
(PLEASE LET THIS BE GOOD. P.S : Some characters will be introduced in the next part. If you haven't noticed, Diamondstar is me ) |
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rich681
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:33 PM |
hold on, i need to find the nearest Warrior Cat books in my library next time i go. also, which one is meeee~?
~Tell it again, Grandpa!
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alnick
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:33 PM |
i like it so far
but i'm biased positevly towards most things about warriors, so idk if my opinion should count |
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:35 PM |
as i said, some characters will be introduced in next part. ALNICK I NEED A NAME/ |
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:35 PM |
| This sounds like something closer to the middle of the story. What the hell is going on? |
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:36 PM |
@Neighborly *Laughs* You do not know literature. |
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alnick
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:36 PM |
>ALNICK I NEED A NAME/
WARRIOR OR APPRENTICE
WHATEVER USE THE PREFIX HAWK
CAPS |
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:36 PM |
@Diamond
You don't know how to use proper grammar, specifically the rules of dialogue. |
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:37 PM |
| Alright let me write chapter one... |
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:38 PM |
@eeve oh what the heck. you are removed from my stories k if you continue. |
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:43 PM |
I do understand literature. I also understand that there are so many things that you have yet to explain.
-Why are they cats/ Is this some kind of cat world? -What is the setting? -Why are they in a forest? -What is the slightest bit of conflict? -What is the blue cat's name? -Why does the blue cat think this dream means anything at all?
Also, if you want some feedback, you're going to get criticism. Stop laughing at us for it. |
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:43 PM |
| The series you are basing this off is horrible. |
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alnick
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:44 PM |
@neighborlySHUTPUP
half of these are explained by reading the actual warriors books
and the rest are sure to be explained later |
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:44 PM |
>makes horrible warriorcats fanfic >puts ot in title |
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alnick
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:45 PM |
">makes horrible warriorcats fanfic"
>read one paragraph >say it's horrible |
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:47 PM |
oh these questions are so funny "-Why are they cats/ Is this some kind of cat world? A : Because the characters don't have to be idiotic twolegs -What is the setting? if you can read it says "forest" -Why are they in a forest? Because the live in there idiot -What is the slightest bit of conflict? Um...Does there always have to conflict every paragraph. -What is the blue cat's name? DID YOU EVEN READ IT -Why does the blue cat think this dream means anything at all? because you will find out.
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:47 PM |
@alnick
This is a Warrior's fanfic? Oh, sorry. I don't read that series so I didn't know. But what is it with people and writing fanfiction on here? Can no one come up with an original idea anymore? |
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:48 PM |
>Can no one come up with an original idea anymore?
i'm confused by that
how is writing fanfiction not original |
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| 04 Oct 2012 04:48 PM |
| I like how you think you are good at writing when it is sub-par with other 4th grade pieces. |
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