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DiamondDragonair is not online. DiamondDragonair
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04 Oct 2012 04:29 PM
Everyone is gonna hate me now.


PROLOGUE :

Moonlight was setting over the forest.
"Diamondstar, I had a dream..." A blue cat turned over with curious icy blue eyes.
"Hmm?"
"I saw...I saw a river. It was flowing,,,,And then I saw cats fighting. Then, I saw a green glow...Then I woke up." The other cat mewed. She was a tortoiseshell cat, with green eyes and a slightly chipped ear.
"I see. Do you know what it means?" The tortoiseshell looked away for a moment.
"To tell the truth, I don't. I thought you should know." She finally replied. The blue cat did a nod of approval and slid back to her cave, unseen in the moonlight.


(PLEASE LET THIS BE GOOD. P.S : Some characters will be introduced in the next part. If you haven't noticed, Diamondstar is me )
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DiamondDragonair is not online. DiamondDragonair
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04 Oct 2012 04:32 PM
;-;
Come on OT.
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PixarLane250 is not online. PixarLane250
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04 Oct 2012 04:32 PM
dumb
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DiamondDragonair is not online. DiamondDragonair
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04 Oct 2012 04:32 PM
nope
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rich681 is not online. rich681
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04 Oct 2012 04:32 PM
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starlilynight is not online. starlilynight
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04 Oct 2012 04:33 PM
hold on, i need to find the nearest Warrior Cat books in my library next time i go.
also, which one is meeee~?

~Tell it again, Grandpa!
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alnick is not online. alnick
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04 Oct 2012 04:33 PM
i like it so far

but i'm biased positevly towards most things about warriors, so idk if my opinion should count
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DiamondDragonair is not online. DiamondDragonair
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04 Oct 2012 04:35 PM
as i said, some characters will be introduced in next part.
ALNICK I NEED A NAME/
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NeighborlySHUTUP is not online. NeighborlySHUTUP
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04 Oct 2012 04:35 PM
This sounds like something closer to the middle of the story. What the hell is going on?
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DiamondDragonair is not online. DiamondDragonair
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04 Oct 2012 04:36 PM
@Neighborly
*Laughs*
You do not know literature.
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alnick is not online. alnick
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04 Oct 2012 04:36 PM
>ALNICK I NEED A NAME/

WARRIOR OR APPRENTICE

WHATEVER USE THE PREFIX HAWK

CAPS
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PixarLane250 is not online. PixarLane250
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04 Oct 2012 04:36 PM
@Diamond

You don't know how to use proper grammar, specifically the rules of dialogue.
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DiamondDragonair is not online. DiamondDragonair
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04 Oct 2012 04:37 PM
Alright let me write chapter one...
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PokemonEevee is online. PokemonEevee
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04 Oct 2012 04:37 PM
op do u even lift
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DiamondDragonair is not online. DiamondDragonair
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04 Oct 2012 04:38 PM
@Pixar
...
HAHAHAHAHA.
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DiamondDragonair is not online. DiamondDragonair
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04 Oct 2012 04:38 PM
@eeve
oh what the heck.
you are removed from my stories k if you continue.
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NeighborlySHUTUP is not online. NeighborlySHUTUP
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04 Oct 2012 04:43 PM
I do understand literature. I also understand that there are so many things that you have yet to explain.

-Why are they cats/ Is this some kind of cat world?
-What is the setting?
-Why are they in a forest?
-What is the slightest bit of conflict?
-What is the blue cat's name?
-Why does the blue cat think this dream means anything at all?

Also, if you want some feedback, you're going to get criticism. Stop laughing at us for it.
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PixarLane250 is not online. PixarLane250
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04 Oct 2012 04:43 PM
The series you are basing this off is horrible.
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alnick is not online. alnick
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04 Oct 2012 04:44 PM
@neighborlySHUTPUP

half of these are explained by reading the actual warriors books

and the rest are sure to be explained later
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Ratiosu381 is not online. Ratiosu381
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04 Oct 2012 04:44 PM
>makes horrible warriorcats fanfic
>puts ot in title
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alnick is not online. alnick
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04 Oct 2012 04:45 PM
">makes horrible warriorcats fanfic"

>read one paragraph
>say it's horrible
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DiamondDragonair is not online. DiamondDragonair
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04 Oct 2012 04:47 PM
oh these questions are so funny
"-Why are they cats/ Is this some kind of cat world?
A : Because the characters don't have to be idiotic twolegs
-What is the setting?
if you can read it says "forest"
-Why are they in a forest?
Because the live in there idiot
-What is the slightest bit of conflict?
Um...Does there always have to conflict every paragraph.
-What is the blue cat's name?
DID YOU EVEN READ IT
-Why does the blue cat think this dream means anything at all?
because you will find out.
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NeighborlySHUTUP is not online. NeighborlySHUTUP
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04 Oct 2012 04:47 PM
@alnick

This is a Warrior's fanfic? Oh, sorry. I don't read that series so I didn't know. But what is it with people and writing fanfiction on here? Can no one come up with an original idea anymore?
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alnick is not online. alnick
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04 Oct 2012 04:48 PM
>Can no one come up with an original idea anymore?

i'm confused by that

how is writing fanfiction not original
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PixarLane250 is not online. PixarLane250
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04 Oct 2012 04:48 PM
I like how you think you are good at writing when it is sub-par with other 4th grade pieces.
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