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| 25 Sep 2012 10:59 PM |
(ICESHACK3000) Fact is you need help writing those rhymes Your not an MC if someone else made those lines Blasting in your boom box verbal violence lyrical stylist In a time were young rapper are known as childish It's the confidence I'm convinced that I will one day blow Writing rhymes with my lyrical pen led Bombing rappers like a nuclear warhead It would only make sense if you give up You can't run the race the pace is to fast you just won't last Even on full blast you dash Hoping for the best but expecting the worst There's a limit to everything and you just crossed the line And thats a mountain you'll soon regret you ever climbed Because now your in the rap game The place where people will kick you when your down Chew you up then spit you out No matter how much you shout I doubt you'll get help So just remember this one thing It's not about the salary being payed hourly Realizing reality knowing your credit is really yours Unlike a copy cat yeah I'd like to see you copy that Not making raps for feedback and to see how they react Just relax so be you don't change and stay true
(ICESHACK3000) Your just a star in the making patiently waiting to get to the top Don't get your hopes up It's harder than it seems to catch your dreams until you take your self to the extreme You don't require the skills for your fame desire It's not as easy as you think I took a chance with my cleaver rap hook The difference is I'm real, not like a story book And there's all these people trying to convince me That I'm running on empty But I've been inspired rewired rehired So now I'm teaming up with one of the bests Showing my name now that I'm back Writing on this page I then let him take the stage...
(JaylenJohnson2) Ok now pull up your pants please don't sag Don't even use the word swag Don't be retarded and be with a pixel Make your flow blow like a whistle Don't get mad don't blow up like a missle Don't be stupid, please don't show out Show the people what you're about Be so popular don't be lame Shows fakes that you got game Be so wild don't be tame After A while you'll be glad you came Make life different don't make it stay the same So for now just be real Make your flow as hard as steel |
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| 25 Sep 2012 11:04 PM |
| This is legit. Need a bit of work, but overall, its legit. |
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| 26 Sep 2012 07:03 AM |
| Wow.Nice song ICESHACK.Btw,Im in your group. |
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dballz12
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| 26 Sep 2012 08:38 AM |
| Yeah it was nice bruh -Chief keef- keep it 3hunna mayne |
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| 26 Sep 2012 03:43 PM |
| I thought I kinda did bad on my verse :c |
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ducky980
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| 26 Sep 2012 03:55 PM |
| what are you talking about? ice did much much worse |
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| 26 Sep 2012 04:19 PM |
"You can't run the race the pace is to fast you just won't last" is from is from Points of Authority, right? It's a good song though! |
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JuicySavi
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| 26 Sep 2012 04:36 PM |
| LUV IT SO TRUE!!! hehe you should record yourself singing it and put it on youtube >.< |
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| 26 Sep 2012 05:20 PM |
| Thanks everyone I'm glad you guys all liked my song! Jaylen your verse was awesome! Ducky is a trolling kid who only respects the famous like you. |
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CeCe1225
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| 26 Sep 2012 05:43 PM |
| I L<3VE IT!!! You should really put it on youtube. |
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| 26 Sep 2012 06:21 PM |
| Im probably not going to do youtube work until I get some studio time. Im currently just writing songs. |
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| 26 Sep 2012 08:05 PM |
| Song just broke 275! My other songs got 1.400 and 4.400 hoping this one starts to boost! D: |
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saintboy
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| 26 Sep 2012 08:43 PM |
| True song. But nothing I would listen to again if it was a actual song. Ice you have talent. But you kinda waisted your verse with some of the things you were saying. Just think the audience doesn't want to know what they have to do they want to know what goes on in your life. Its not a lecture its a rap. If they wanted that then they would more into battling rapping. Nice job though Ice. Jaylen nice effort too. |
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| 26 Sep 2012 09:30 PM |
| I think you kinda missed the whole theme of this song. "realizing reality" yeah there is a reason why I chose that as the name. The song is about realizing in reality it's harder to be a rapper than on roblox. That's why it's me and jaylen lecturing the new people on what to do. And if I write about what goes on in my life that completely changes the theme. Glad you liked it though. |
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saintboy
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| 26 Sep 2012 09:40 PM |
| No I didn't. I said nothing about you being off topic or saying something that didn't fit the theme. I'm jut saying your wordplay in this song and what you chose to write in your verse was a bit weak and doesn't really excite the audience. All i'm saying is you should take in consideration of what your viewers want to hear from you as well. Ex: maybe talk about your childhood & how you had to push yourself in life to "realize reality" or something like that. But enough of that. Goodjob man just thought I could help u out with a view tips. & also about "Realizing Reality" theme... well jaylen what you said with your verse, it didn't really fit the song. |
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| 26 Sep 2012 09:58 PM |
| That songs ight need some more work,But nice job |
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| 26 Sep 2012 11:15 PM |
| Well thanks anyway! I respect your opinion. |
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| 28 Sep 2012 06:45 AM |
| Lol.You should make it to a real song.Like with music and all. |
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