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HollyTheDogLover is not online. HollyTheDogLover
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23 Sep 2012 07:46 PM
I like to get this straight I am not a troll, if you think I am a troll because I reposted a thread Keyra made which was non repliable and made it repliable I was doing it because she needed to learn criticism everybody has to have some discipline so now back to the collab.

So lets get it straight I want this to be a roleplay about making countries I know its been done over and over and over but I want to add a twist the whole world are idiots and have to start from level one and build up till level six then they go back to one now get the idea? There is a way to surpass level 6 which is go through evolution 20 times so lets get to the story.


The lands every land had a secret that other lands didn't know that the whole united city of Cange was separated and they made separate cities now what land is there waiting for you?

I know its little but I will add more till some more people are into the idea

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userman90 is not online. userman90
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23 Sep 2012 07:47 PM
Jenyes ideya. Haf you consider write book?
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HollyTheDogLover is not online. HollyTheDogLover
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23 Sep 2012 07:51 PM
Uh speak in english.
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HollyTheDogLover is not online. HollyTheDogLover
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23 Sep 2012 07:53 PM
Anyone like the idea?
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Paintballguy62 is not online. Paintballguy62
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23 Sep 2012 07:58 PM
Its pretty good.
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TangledPuppet is not online. TangledPuppet
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23 Sep 2012 07:58 PM
I assume that you'll want criticism, as you enforce it in your post, so here we go.

First those run-on sentences bother me. If you want to make a good RP, you have to have good spelling (Which you do seem to have.) and grammar. Run-on sentences ruin that part, effectively destroying the RP.

Second, at what point is "level one" and "level six"? Is it during the caveman era to a futuristic land? I don't know, so you need to specify that. Also, what happens to make the human race go back to "level one"? Is it war, disease? Once again, I don't know, so you need to specify that as well.

I understand that this is a collaboration and all, but if you have an idea that you want to work with, you want to give out as much information as you can in a neat, tidy order. It will help a lot when attracting users to assist you.


~The puppets have been tangled~
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HollyTheDogLover is not online. HollyTheDogLover
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23 Sep 2012 08:12 PM
Ok grammar I might need I will proofread my story
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HollyTheDogLover is not online. HollyTheDogLover
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23 Sep 2012 08:14 PM
and that's exactly right Tangled level 1 to six and the world is restarted so everybody dosen't become crazy with inventions and stuff.
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HollyTheDogLover is not online. HollyTheDogLover
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23 Sep 2012 08:17 PM
The lands every land had a secret that other lands didn't know, the whole united city of Cange was separated and they made separate cities, now what land is there waiting for you? Will your city thrive and become highly intelligent or become the most dumbest city in the world the moves are up to you.
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HollyTheDogLover is not online. HollyTheDogLover
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23 Sep 2012 08:17 PM
And its random what makes them go to level one.
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HollyTheDogLover is not online. HollyTheDogLover
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23 Sep 2012 08:19 PM
Ok who else
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TangledPuppet is not online. TangledPuppet
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23 Sep 2012 08:21 PM
Alright, I see potential in this.




~The puppets have been tangled~
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keyra14 is not online. keyra14
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23 Sep 2012 08:26 PM
I might participate in the collab.



But, I made the thread I put my story on unrepliable for a reason. You would need permission from me to repost it, and now I am made because you say I needed to make it replieable. No. No. No. You are completely wrong, woman. Leave me and my stories alone. If I make it unrepliable, it stays unreplieable. GOT IT?
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HollyTheDogLover is not online. HollyTheDogLover
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23 Sep 2012 08:36 PM
Now the CS-Country sheet hmm how about this

Country n@me:(Can be fake)
How long has it been there:(Must be about from 5 to 10 years.)
Ruler:
Resources:(No saying full of diamonds or precious minerals only stuff like iron, copper, cows etc,)
Currency:
Allies:Edit when in the roleplay
Enemies:Edit when in roleplay

RS-Ruler sheet

N@me:
@g3:
Appearance:
Personality:
Strengths:(Nothing overpowered)
Weaknesses:
Rel@tives:
Bio:
CS-Citizen sheet

Appearance:(What they usually look like)
Money:
Hate the ruler or love the ruler:

SPS-Special people sheet
N@me:
@g3:
Appearance:
Personality:
Strengths:
Weaknesses:
Rel@tives:
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HollyTheDogLover is not online. HollyTheDogLover
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23 Sep 2012 08:37 PM
Ok.
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HollyTheDogLover is not online. HollyTheDogLover
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23 Sep 2012 08:40 PM
Ok should I post this now?
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keyra14 is not online. keyra14
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23 Sep 2012 08:50 PM
And Holly, I wanted to also add;


I had it so posts couldn't be made on it here because I was also going to put it up on deviantART and get criticism there. -_-
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HollyTheDogLover is not online. HollyTheDogLover
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23 Sep 2012 08:54 PM
the whole world are idiots and have to start from level one and build up till level six then they go back to level one and the world is restarted so everybody dosen't become crazy with inventions and stuff. And its random what makes them go to level one. There is a way to surpass level 6 which is go through evolution 20 times.

The lands every land had a secret that other lands didn't know, the whole united city of Cange was separated and they made separate cities, now what land is there waiting for you? Will your city thrive and become highly intelligent or become the most dumbest city in the world the moves are up to you.

CS-Country sheet

Country n@me:(Can be fake)
How long has it been there:(Must be about from 5 to 10 years.)
Ruler:
Resources:(No saying full of diamonds or precious minerals only stuff like iron, copper, cows etc,)
Currency:
Allies:Edit when in the roleplay
Enemies:Edit when in roleplay

RS-Ruler sheet

N@me:
@g3:
Appearance:
Personality:
Strengths:(Nothing overpowered)
Weaknesses:
Rel@tives:
Bio:
CS-Citizen sheet

Appearance:(What they usually look like)
Money:
Hate the ruler or love the ruler:

SPS-Special people sheet
N@me:
@g3:
Appearance:
Personality:
Strengths:
Weaknesses:
Rel@tives:


All grouped and accounted for.
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