dale111
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| 22 Sep 2012 01:16 AM |
Your words were so hurting Why would you do this? You threw me away like I was just nothing, Nothing to you anyways- You casted me away with no reasoning All for you it was just so pleasing Oh, how I was so afraid- Oh how I thought we were sisters But I was mistaken,
I should have seen your dismay. You locked me away, From all of humanity I watch you all for centuries Ignoring the sun, surrounded by darkness. Longed for your face, Frighten at my presence. No longer will you rule with your lies and your treason. For the day I return I shall take back what's rightfully mine.
You ruled the land far too long, For I have been watching far from above I've seen through your cruelty Your everlasting tyranny Now hand over my crown Your power means nothing to me You're a tick on the kingdom Leeching it's blood without any thought Soon to be crushed by your prey- As soon as I rule with my Iron fist Your world will be engulfed in my everlasting darkness All to be blamed on you for not stopping me. Now all you can do is rot away. |
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Deviated
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| 22 Sep 2012 01:20 AM |
0/100000000000000000
it duznt rhyme |
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dale111
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| 22 Sep 2012 01:21 AM |
| It's a ballad, Your generation might not understand it. |
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dale111
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| 22 Sep 2012 01:28 AM |
| And it does rhyme, it's not solid rhymes though, It more of a rhythm. It's not rap. |
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dale111
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| 23 Sep 2012 10:27 AM |
| had to do a lot of editing so Roblox would allow it. |
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link6249
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| 23 Sep 2012 10:40 AM |
my recomendation:
don't post songs on the forums....
With all the ro-rap stuff some one could steal it and use it as his own, or maybe someone from an actual record label.
But besides that, Pretty much good. :P |
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Jared343
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| 23 Sep 2012 12:05 PM |
| I red the first section, and I have one thing to say: Your an idiot if you choose a person to date that treats you like crap, and stop making love songs. I'd rather have a song that's original, this means not about crime, violence, relationships, or getting baked. |
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shonyshon
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| 23 Sep 2012 01:20 PM |
| Supremmacy, you don't know how stupid that sounded. |
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| 23 Sep 2012 01:21 PM |
| Oh, must've not read the whole thing, sisters. Lol sounds like I made an insest joke xD |
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shonyshon
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| 23 Sep 2012 02:45 PM |
| hey nice song. i was just wondering what was the process you used to write this or did you just write what was on your mind |
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lila47
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| 23 Sep 2012 02:47 PM |
Oh god this was good
Please stay :> |
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johnb
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2james3
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| 23 Sep 2012 03:24 PM |
| Amazing, I love music. You've got alot of creativity in you. http://www.punk-o-matic.net/ this is a great website to post music and stuff, you should use it... |
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johnb
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| 23 Sep 2012 03:25 PM |
| ^No trojans on that site, it's pretty legit. |
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2james3
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| 23 Sep 2012 03:45 PM |
| It's Very legit, its a game website, why would it be Trojan or maliwared? |
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| 23 Sep 2012 03:45 PM |
| Fair enough, but a bit predictable lyrics. |
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| 23 Sep 2012 03:45 PM |
| Well enough, but a bit predictable lyrics. |
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johnb
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| 23 Sep 2012 03:45 PM |
| Precisely. That's why I said it's legit. |
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| 23 Sep 2012 03:47 PM |
*Rage*
Damn you Roblox and their double posts! Because you told me that the early one was against the rules, so I changed. >:C |
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johnb
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| 23 Sep 2012 03:51 PM |
| How wuz it against the rules, lol? |
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| 23 Sep 2012 03:53 PM |
That's a mystery for me. Roblox just hates me, got banned for mentioning babies growing inside women once. IT'S SUPER NATURAL! >:C |
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johnb
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| 23 Sep 2012 03:54 PM |
| They be a bunch of fascists, in my opinion. |
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