keyra14
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| 23 Sep 2012 12:17 AM |
| I'm scared to post chapter one of a story I'm writing. What if it's trolled to death?? |
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keyra14
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| 23 Sep 2012 12:22 AM |
| I mean, I do want help on it. I know chapter one is friggin' short though... But I guess that works. |
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Dreadnor
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| 23 Sep 2012 12:32 AM |
| Just have a thick hide. If they troll it, ignore them. Just listen to the valid criticism. If everyone who posts is trolling, then you might have a problem with your storytelling abilities. |
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AbCatchem
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keyra14
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| 23 Sep 2012 01:44 AM |
| LOL. I posted it, just..Yeah. |
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Leodin
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| 23 Sep 2012 07:55 AM |
Careful, I may post Constructive Criticism.
And my Constructive Criticism is very blunt, and to the point. |
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keyra14
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| 23 Sep 2012 02:30 PM |
http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=78692484
I made it so no posts are allowed. LINK HAS BEEN FED. |
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AbCatchem
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| 23 Sep 2012 02:32 PM |
I saw your story earlier, and I liked it. However, something happened: http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=78696478 Maybe she was Trolling or trying to annoy you or something. .-. |
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keyra14
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| 23 Sep 2012 02:37 PM |
I see..... Well I'm going to act like I'm annoyed though it slightly amuses me that she did that. XD |
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hesher
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Leodin
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| 23 Sep 2012 02:57 PM |
My first little thing to point out.
"Carley walked beside Shayaa, her best friend. Nothing, NOTHING, could seperate the two. Carley always said, not even a shark could."
That's pretty much saying that a Shark IS either going to seperate them, or attack them. |
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hesher
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| 23 Sep 2012 03:23 PM |
| She used foreshadowing. It's a good element to a story. |
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Dreadnor
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| 23 Sep 2012 03:28 PM |
| Foreshadowing is best when used with subtlety. Don't make it obvious, but make so you have a slight hint. Like a dash of salt instead of dumping the whole container into your food. |
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keyra14
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Dreadnor
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| 23 Sep 2012 04:16 PM |
Just plainly saying you can't write isn't an excuse. You either want to improve, or you don't.
Do you have the passion? |
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| 23 Sep 2012 05:02 PM |
| ask for constructive criticism, there is bound to be some |
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keyra14
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| 23 Sep 2012 05:12 PM |
| Half and half, I never really was able to get into details or anything like that so someone would be like they love it a lot. |
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hesher
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| 11 Oct 2012 06:15 PM |
| I liked it. You have a good writer in you, keep improving! |
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