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SN0X is not online. SN0X
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22 Sep 2012 08:20 AM
It all started on a sunny day. That's the strange part- well, a strange part. It wasn't the hottest day. Nor was it the brightest. It was just sunny, and cloudless. It was windy, but I couldn't feel the wind slithering through my skin and the gaps in my clothing. The sky was also quite pale...whiter than usual, as if it was sick. I would really like to tell you how it felt...maybe you would understand more. But words are very limited. So, there I was, standing in the playground, aged 11, unaware of what was about to happen. I'm not sure where it happened. It may have been beside me, but it could have also been behind an object in front of me. I just saw a big flash, looked behind, and then felt my stumache freeze while it dropped down to my pelvis and slide down my leg.
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It's for my homework. A horror story opening.
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WoWman123789 is not online. WoWman123789
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22 Sep 2012 08:21 AM
I like it so far, but I find it slightly repetitive. A lot of "It" openings
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SN0X is not online. SN0X
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22 Sep 2012 08:29 AM
My teacher told me being repetitive in this sort of opening is good :(

Ahh well, what do you suggest I replace it with?
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23 Sep 2012 08:24 AM
BUMP.
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