jason8630
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| 27 Aug 2012 02:47 PM |
Ba ba ba bum i'm here, Superman Returns is next after i rewrite what goes wrong when a studio gets more involved then it needs to, this also has a few scenes from the original
Cast: Tobey Maguire as Spider-Man/Peter Parker Kirsten Dunst as Mary Jane Watson James Franco as Harry Osbourne Bryce Dallas Howard as Gwen Stacy Rosemary Harris as May Parker J.K. Simmons as Jonah Jameson James Cromwell as Captain Stacey Dylan Baker as Curt Connors Thomas Church as Flint Marko/The Sandman Christopher Lee as The Priest
Cameos Bruce Campbell William DaFoe as Green Goblin Jim Carrey as ???
Plot: We open up to Peter being given the ring by May Parker saying he will marry MJ. During this Harry is sitting in his house looking at the painting of his father. He quietly promises to avenge his after. In anger he starts ransacking his own house, then he goes as far to toss a chair through a mirror, unveiling the hidden weapons his father used.
In the next shot Peter is proposing to Mary Jane at dinner, with Bruce Campbell doing a cameo where he loses track of time to bring in the ring in, eventually Gwen Stacy waves to Peter and MJ asks who she is,quickly she's upset at not being told about her but Peter calms her. The drinks finally arrive and she almost chokes on the ring and Peter does the heimlich and they laugh as he holds her and she says yes.
The next morning MJ is planning her wedding dress with Harry and she mentions him going to the church to talk to the wedding with the priest. Harry says he has to go and when Peter is talking to the Priest with May Parker, A new villain arrives. Harry Osbourne crashes through the window on a glider, as The HobGoblin. The priest takes May out of the room and Peter runs to the back but Hobgoblin throws a pumpkin bomb at him and the church catches fire. Peter shoots webs all over the fire to put it out and rips his jacket open and slips away and puts his mask on. They throws bombs, shoot webs, and throw those orange boomerang looking things that their name escapes me.
Spider-Man is cut up on his arms and chest, in a last resort he shoots a web at his glider and pulls it over to him. Hobgoblin and Spider-Man run at each other and Spidey is tossed into some church benches. The Hobgoblin grabs his glider, clicks the blade out and tosses it at his skull. Peter ducks and Goblin throws another group of boomerangs, ripping his body even more. He walks over to the broken hero and takes his mask off. Peter can't believe it's Harry and tells him he didn't kill his father.
Harry puts the mask back on as police cars surround the church, he pulls the glider out and holds it over the hero. He aims the blade for his chest but cops break in and open fire. Goblin pumpkin bombs them away while Captain Stacey is commanding his men to charge in. The Hobgoblin is overwhelmed with cops and glides out as Spidey web swings out, while being extremely damaged. Mary Jane is told by the Priest who calls to inform her the wedding may have to wait...
After the attack Peter is healing his wounds in the mirror, as we get word by Captain Stacey that Flint Marko, a man who has broken out of jail during a black out. He was arrested six years ago for a robbery he committed to help his sick daughter. He hops a fence and lands in a testing site and his genes are now filled with sand. He becomes the Sandman and he finally pulls himself together.
Mary Jane Watson however is auditioning on Broadway and Peter meets her backstage. He has a scar on his face and a bruised eye. He tells her Harry is The Hobgoblin. She is shocked and he says he has to escort her out for her safety. They walk out, in extreme paranoia and they get in a car, thinking nothing is wrong as they drive the back of the car explodes from a pumpkin bomb tied under it. Peter limps out and pulls MJ out of the car as the fire spreads. People scream in fear and Peter carries Mary Jane into an alley and looks around for Harry. He doesn't show so Peter finally rests as he holds her.
The next day in class Curt Connors asks Gwen where Peter is and she says she hasn't seen him in days. We cut to Flint Marko sneaking in his daughter's room. She wakes and he whispers that he won't leave her again. Emma Marko however, hears him and yells at him to get out while his daughter doesn't want him to leave. Flint leaves and says he isn't a bad person, he only has bad luck.
Peter and Mary Jane talk in Parker's apartment where she says she doesn't know if they can be together when both their lives are in danger. Before he responds word of a bank robbery comes in on his police radio. He unwillingly suits up and goes out to find the Sandman driving an armored truck away. They fight in the back and most of this fight is taken from the original scene. Sandman kicks him off and he rolls down the block. Sandman drifts away and he can't find him so he hides on a roof and cleans sand out of his shoe.
J. Jonah Jameson is in his office and we get the scene from the marketing guy and the secretary. Pete walks in quickly during this as Jonah asked for him. Parker is asked to find picture of the Hobgoblin by Jonah Jameson and he quickly asks why he looks all beat up then says nevermind.
Peter finally returns to class and Curt pulls him aside and asks if he is ok. He assures him he is only having a few problems outside of the class he will take care of. As they talk Gwen interrupts as the class leaves and says she's worried about him too. He assures them and Stacy leaves. When Connors brings up the work he missed, a gas comes through the vents and Curt passes out as Peter covers his mouth and slips out to the door and opens it letting air in. Suddenly The Hobgoblin flies back on his glider and waves. Peter carries Curt out and tells him there must've been some problem with the air unit. He says he'll check on it and Pete heads back home.
The Sandman during this time is looking at his locket of his daughter and makes a plan to attack the largest bank in New York City. Peter wakes up in the morning and May calls asking if the wedding is still on. He says he'll talk to the priest and MJ later. he walks to the bathroom, brushes his teeth and drops the brush. He has a weird hallucination that he is a goblin himself. He then sees himself stabbing the Green Goblin and murdering him, as Harry thinks it happened. He yells no at the mirror that this isn't true and his neighbors come to check on him. He pushes them away and runs out. A quick shot of smoke coming from the green toothpaste he used. He has visions of everyone on the street being made of sand and The Green Goblin flying over him asking why he took a father from his son. He denies the murder and passes out in a near by alley.
This allows Sandman to rob the bank easily but Parker is woken up by Mary Jane who came to visit him. He is now ok but she says Sandman is robbing the bank so he web swings over to find an empty vault. He chases him through the subway and we get the train fight scene. Spidey knocks Sandman into the water as he himself has landed on a group of pipes that spring out more water, sending Sandman into the ocean.
Spidey swings out and finds The Hobgoblin waiting for him as he is almost home. The two have a war of words and Hob refuses to believe Spidey didn't kill his father. He says he was only toying with him when he used the car bomb, the gas, and the tooth paste. Now, it's for real. They square off and Peter manages to crack the mask a little but he is busted in the back by the glider and hit a few more times. The Hobgoblin stands over him and beats him more, until his face is bloodied. Spidey manages to kick him off and use the glider against him. He damages the Goblin suit, cracking the chest, legs, and back to a certain degree. He says Harry will never be as strong as his father and he swings one more time at his leg.
He yells at him that he didn't kill his father, The Hobgoblin then tackles him and says he won't die like his father did. Gobby drops a quicky Pumpkin bomb and Spidey swings out avoiding the explosion. They web swing and glide all over the city fighting as Mary Jane has been fired from her Broadway show she walks out to see the two fighting. May Parker sees it on TV as The priest notices it at a store TV set on his way home. J. Jonah Jameson rushes over but can't find a camera. They eventually take the fight to the bottom of a construction site, where Flint Marko eventually drifted from a drainpipe into the sand and becomes larger than ever. He smacks Spidey and Goblin away. They fight it out with pipes and Peter kicks Goblin off as he webswings one of Harry's pumpkin bombs into the face of Sandman. He tosses even more and shoots webs all over the eyes of Sandman.
Marko trembles and Peter is then smacked to the ground by the glider and only nearly saves himself. Sandman stumbles and falls over. Hobgoblin then drags a knocked out Spidey to the roof and of the site and demands revenge. He holds his last bomb and peter wakes up to see it. He says it doesn't have to end this way, and Hobgoblin says it will end with the vengeance of a man taking back from a killer that took all he had. Peter tries to tell him Edward never loved him but Harry refuses to listen out of anger tries to throw a punch but Spidey pushes him off but grabs him, not letting his former friend die.
They have one last talk as Harry says sorry Pete, and hits the button on the bomb. The bomb explodes, killing The Hobgoblin as Peter swings away. He puts his head down and pulls his mask off. He sheds a tear at being unable to save his friend. We cut to Peter on a confession booth with the priest where he is told he couldn't do anything, but let fate decide. Flint Marko then walks in and takes confession. Pete slips back and listens in. Marko says crime wasn't the right choice for what he has done. The priest says he hasn't seen Flint in over six years but says all is forgiven for those who deserve it. He says thank you we see him walk out and drift way into the sky. Mary Jane waits outside for Pete and he hugs her, saying he couldn't save Harry. She says it will all be okay, for now. In a final shot of the two hugging a man played by Jim Carrey walking into the Daily Bugle hands in picture of Spider-Man, Sandman, Hobgoblin and says he'll take cash for them.
They ask his name and he says his name is Quentin Beck.
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| 27 Aug 2012 02:57 PM |
| I dont liek spider man3's spider man :C |
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| 27 Aug 2012 03:07 PM |
>Jim Carrey as Mysterio OH MY GOD YES |
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jason8630
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| 27 Aug 2012 03:09 PM |
| Jim Carrey can play so many different comic book characters. |
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| 27 Aug 2012 03:13 PM |
@First Poster Not Raimis fault he had to make that. He wanted Vulture and Scorpion. Sony wanted Venom, Harry as some type of villian, and Sandman. |
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jason8630
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| 27 Aug 2012 03:15 PM |
| i think he was talking about the actor playing Spidey |
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jason8630
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| 27 Aug 2012 05:21 PM |
| the rewriting of Superman Returns will either be tonight or tomorrw |
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MCAdo
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| 27 Aug 2012 05:26 PM |
Wow. Euurg. This sounds much more grounded and well-written than the actual movie.
This is great. |
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jason8630
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| 27 Aug 2012 05:34 PM |
spank you very much and so i remember
Done Rewritten films Batman and Robin Batman Returns Superman III Superman IV: Quest for Peace The Dark Knight Rises Godzilla '98 Spider-Man 3
Written films The Punisher 2 The Man of Steel series
Soon to be done Superman Returns
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| 27 Aug 2012 08:43 PM |
what
also jim carrey should have been the riddler
and why wasn't there a kinky scene between james franco and tobey macguire
wth
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jason8630
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| 27 Aug 2012 08:54 PM |
| I appreciate you contributing nothing at all. |
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| 27 Aug 2012 08:57 PM |
you're welcome
aka I don't understand what rewriting something necessarily impacts and/or a threshold of jaguars but it looks like you can write scripts pretty neat so hey there's my contribution to you.
and a bit more on topic it'd be pretty neat seeing mysterio in a spider man film. I myself have always wanted to see carnage and see how much they'd mess it up.
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| 27 Aug 2012 09:16 PM |
"aka" I'm pretty sure that's not how you use AKA.
"something necessarily impacts" I guess it impacted you enough to write some half-assed non sense. |
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| 28 Aug 2012 12:18 AM |
oh mate
"I guess it impacted you enough to write some half-assed non sense."
I'm guessing you misunderstood most of what I said haha
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| 28 Aug 2012 01:13 AM |
also:
I read through the whole thing, and it was pretty neat. definitely written better than the actual movie, haha.
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| 28 Aug 2012 07:23 AM |
Oh, god. I love this.
Jim Carrey as Mysterio is genius, but I thin, Carrey would portray a better, Carnage. He has that somewhat insane look upon him sometimes, but still good.
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| 28 Aug 2012 10:23 AM |
| Jim Cary as Mysterio or Carnage would be AWSOME! I'd LOL more at the movie than I normally do... What can I say JK simons makes me laugh as JJ |
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| 28 Aug 2012 10:26 AM |
Btw not really like the original film, however I still like it and nice work dude.
Oh and Harry was refured to as The New Goblin in the credits not Hob goblin. |
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| 28 Aug 2012 02:06 PM |
| i know i changed him to the Hobgoblin |
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| 28 Aug 2012 03:18 PM |
| Fair enough, I think he should have been called Hob Goblin in the film even though he wwasn't in the comics. |
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| 28 Aug 2012 03:56 PM |
| Sam Raimi wanted to make him The Hobgoblin or the New Goblin so i rolled with the first |
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| 28 Aug 2012 06:41 PM |
| i did mention i would do Superman Returns, but i have done multiple Superman rewrites and writes in general so i'm not very enthusiastic to get it done, so i may just skip over it as i feel uninspired to finish it right now, i did write down a lot for it but i feel as if it's not even worth posting. |
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| 28 Aug 2012 06:43 PM |
-this is the thread i was making but i felt as if it was pretty uninspired so i didn't bother to finish, but if anyone wanted to read it, here it is unfinished.
A movie thats a sequel to the 1980 Superman II...and it takes place in 2006...umm...what? Yeah this is no longer a sequel, it's a film written as Superman exists and has been spotted stopping crime a few times already.
Side note: I already used Metallo, Bizzaro, Prankster, and Morgan Edge in other rewrites so they will not be used here.
Cast: Brandon Routh as Clark Kent/Superman Natalie Portman as Lois Lane Sam Huntington as Jimmy Olsen Kevin Spacey as Lex Luthor Clive Owen as Bloodsport Frank Langella as Perry White Jessica Alba as Ms Teschmacher Guy who can do monkey voices, and CGI visuals as Titano
Plot: As Clark Kent enters the Daily Planet Jimmy mentions that Lois is off interviewing the presidential candidate, Lex Luthor, Perry White walks by and tells Clark that Lex is a good man, he also compliments Lois on being so good at her job, mentioning the Superman interview she had gotten. Clark hints to him being a criminal and they shake off the idea. Jimmy also asks how his date went with Lois and he says "well..could've been worse" Lois comes back with the interview and Clark, being socially awkward tries to slip the idea that Luthor isn't the man he claims to be but she shrugs it off and asks if they can go out again some time and she is unsure.
Perry then tells Clark he wants him to go check out the scoop about a monkey being taken into space tomorrow. We then cut to Lex Luthor in his office telling his low IQ secretary Ms Teschmacher that everything will fall into place soon enough. We see Clark visiting the space convention where they show the monkey they are training, Clark asks a few questions, but with his super hearing a man being attacked is overheard. He sneaks to the alley, changes and flies on over. He finds a man in a white mask, with white Germany army outfit all white with a Third Reich symbol on his chest. He is aiming a pistol at a beating jewish man.
Superman taps him on the shoulder and the man turns and tries to fire at him to no avail. He backs off and yells "Bloodsport doesn't back down to you! The Third Reich will be back!" Superman appears in front of him again and punches him into a brick wall. Bloodsport crawls towards him but Supes drags him to the Police station. They mention they've been after a white supremacist terrorizing Jewish citizens for months before Superman showed up.
The next day We go to Lex Luthor looking at a map with Ms Teschmacher where he points to Metropolis, then California, then Chicago, then Detroit, then Florida, he then says after the election it will all be his, once and for all. Teschmacher doubts this and says he's out his mind. Lex then tells his doorman to inform the scientists at the lab of LexCorp to prepare the Lex Bots for his presentation today, with only one day left until the election.
We go to Clark and Lois at the presentation with Jimmy taking snapshots. Lex presents a small fraction of a robot army he has built over time in his lab with some help. He states the US will now be safe at all times with these robots present in the war, and soon as police officers on the streets. A few giggle at the thought of robot police, until Lex shows one of them drilling through a placed Brick wall for show. They all sit in awe and clap. Lois Lane however asks why do we need robot police if we have superman. Lex grunts, adjusts his tie and says Superman may not be the good guy you see him as.
Clark looks away and Lex has one of the robots speak English, saying "We will protect Metropolis, and the world if you elect Lex Luthor tomorrow." the audience claps at the robots. Lex walks off and Teschmacher asks why he waited til now to show these off, and he states that no one has time to top him now.
Tomorrow morning as the final votes are being casted the NASA rocket takes off with the monkey in it. As the final votes count the rocket goes farther and farther out into space. As they announce the winner of the election a green meteorite hits the rocket and burns it up. Another TV with the launch is on and Clark notices and sneaks out the window and suits up. He flies to the rocket at the speed of a bullet and just in the nick of time holds the rocket before it hits the ground. Everyone inside fell to the bottom and wrecked. Superman sets the space machine down and flies off. The crowd is in disbelief and word hits, Lex Luthor is our new President.
Superman flies back into, changes into his suit and walks out the bathroom asking who won? We notice the monkey is missing from the wrecked rocket. Everyone else is being attended too. They mention the monkey being up front in the machine. A slow transformation turns into a fast and dangerous one as we see the primate laying in the ocean, once dead, now turning into a monster of sorts. His eyes open and he flashes Green eyes and becomes an over 400 foot tall monster. He dashes out of the water and onto land. Clark heads home that, talking to Lois about Luthor becoming president, slight mention of Bloodsport being arrested, then the Lexbots. Lois is fooled into Lex being a good spirited business man.
Clark implies Lex maybe using the bots for other use. Before he finishes the thought, the giant primate with beaming green eyes stomps through their city. Lois screams and Clark pulls her away, stumbling while doing it. He takes her to her car and tells her to go home, as he has to warn the Daily Planet. She says they'll know when they look out the window.
He tells her to go and Clark finds a phone booth, suits up and tries to fight the beast. The radiation of the monster has given it kryptonite vision that it fires at Superman. We cut to Lex arriving in a limo at LexCorp where he rolls down his tinted windows and sees the fight. He rushes out of the limo and demands his lexbots hit the street, he calls it good publicity. Superman is shot down by the vision and lands in the street, leaving a large pot hole. Outside the Daily Planet Jimmy Olsen and Perry White run away from it, saying it's larger than the titanic.
The beast stomps it's way across the city and even destroys a prison wall, where we see man with a shaved head, blue eyes and a limp attacks a guard, limps to the storage room and puts on his outfit, he is once again Bloodsport. He grabs a near by pistol from a knocked out guard and runs through the broken down wall. Superman crawls his way out of the gaping hole in the street and manages to get the strength to fly. He catches up to the monster and uses his laser vision on it's back. The beast's hair catches fire and it falls over. When it hits the ground the fire goes out and Superman manages to use his freeze breath on it's feet, stopping it's mobility.
He quickly heads to the prison break and rebuilds the wall with ice breath. He flies around and notices Bloodsport opening fire onto a Jewish neighborhood. He catches the murderer again and this time uses wind breath to make him smack his skull off of a house near by. Bloodsport limps off while bleeding from the head as Lexbots are all over the streets. The bots take down prisoners and Bloodsport manages to shoot a few but The man of steel lands another punch and knocks him out cold. The Lexbots pull Bloodsport into a van of criminals and drive off. Citizens applaud the bots and not Superman.
He heads back to his Fortress of Solitude and checks the crash footage. He notices a green flash when the meteor hits. The knocked out monster has been carried away by a large group of helicopters with nets and straps. The beast is now chained in a open desert field where Lex Luthor calls it "Titano" naming it after the Titanic, due to his size. Ms Teschmacher says he shouldn't keep that thing around and Lex says it will come in handy. He walks to a nearby tent, showing his map stating he will use the monster to destroy all of America's enemies, then unleash it on Florida, where he'll buy out the territory and turn it into his own giant piece of land, he will then strike it onto Detroit, Chicago, California and Metropolis, placing blame on the chief commander. . One of his men says his plan is insane he turns and says "Insane? WRONG! It's genius, not insanity!"
As he yells the vans of criminals waiting to be transported sit outside the prison. Bloodsport awakens and stumbles out of the back door. He knocks out a guard, takes their rifle and shoots down the other bots and guards. He steals the van to drive off. Superman flies back to Metropolis, now at almost 5:00 AM. Lexbots patrol the streets and Bloodsport hits a few and walks out, he opens fire into a live crowd and says The Third Reich will reign again. Superman flies overhead and lifts the van up and holds it over Bloodsport's head. He slowly turns and Superman holds the vehicle with one hand and chokes him with the other. Lexbots then arrive and fire into Bloodsport. He is shot multiple times in the back and falls over and dies. They shoot at the man of steel but he just throws the van into them, onlookers are confused on who's side they are all on.
We go to Lex staring directly into the beast and arrogantly demanding it to do his bidding. He states he knows enough about primates to do this, but Teschmacher tells him it will not work the way he thinks. He flies off and changes back into his normal suit. He walks to Lois' house to drive her to work as carpool but Lois gets in and says "Hey Superman" He is startled and she states he is never around when Supes is and she won't believe anything else. He removes his glasses and slowly drives to The Daily Planet saying they need to talk.
We go to Luthor talking to a calmed Titano, asking his men to remove the chains. They tell him no way but he says they either remove the chains or the Lexbots remove them instead. The unlock the cuffs and Titano follows the orders of a corrupt President. Clark and Lois are talking in her office about the situation. During this Lex has Titano walking behind him |
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| 29 Aug 2012 05:10 AM |
| I can see you didn't care so much you showed up to act like a dumb ass. Good work. |
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