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isarule is not online. isarule
Joined: 01 Oct 2011
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05 Aug 2012 03:54 PM
Chapter One-
Her hair drifted quickly down to the vanity, where it stopped, was about a foot higher than the dark mahogany wood itself, she smiled at the reflection that she had seen every day before school started. She gently ran the bristles of the brush through her dark brown hair ,and put a light amount of makeup over her eyes. She quickly rushed into her closet, choosing an outfit, and rushing to put it on. One room over, another girl, who looked about the same age as the one before, but with sandy blonde hair, quietly applied a thick layer of eye liner, and looked pleased, as she roughly combed her chin length hair out, and grabbed the first two different articles of clothing she could find. As she walked out, almost ready to go to the bus stop, she slammed her hand on the door of her sister, screaming for her to get out to the bus stop.
“One second, Ellie!” The gentler girl protested, anxious to get a few more seconds of peace before they faced the cruel streets.
“No Cindy! We’re going to have to walk if we miss the bus! And if we walk, we will most likely get shot!” Ellie yelled back, sounding more sincere than she was.
Their mother, a shorter woman, with dark hair and forest green eyes, walked down the hall, sighing as she traced a scar on her lower arm “I’ll drive you Cindy… Ellie, you go catch the bus.”
“Whatever” Ellie rolled her eyes and walked out the door, mumbling to herself.
The girl’s father walked out from the kitchen, and yelled goodbye, as he left the house “Bye Danielle.”
“Bye Sam…” She closed her eyes, and went back to door, that slowly opened as Cindy came out, ready for school
“Lets go… We don’t have all day, and I have to get to work.” Their mother said.
Cindy, a shy girl, cautiously walked out the door, trying to ignore all of the propaganda hung around the small town. It had only been six months since the world broke out into warfare… And everyone felt the burn of not getting the supplies they needed to live luxuriously Now even the most simple things; soap, conditioner, were even considered a luxury. They started to drive in a small car, broken down, and very old, yet much better that the other people in the village, who either took busses or walked. She shivered at the thought of having to walk through the city, where everybody shot if anyone even looked at them the wrong way…
Throughout the crowded streets her mother drove, until the crowds parted at the bridge… It wasn’t long to the school from there, a few nervous paces from the car and she entered the building.
School was never a big deal for Cindy. She went, learned practically nothing, and then went back to her unsettling place she called home. There was so much going on in her life…
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Two class rooms over Ellie sat, running her fingers through her knotted hair. The teacher’s words were nothing to her… She didn’t need education; she needed to plot her next attack on the city… Once she had gotten enough information from the city buildings, she would hit enemy base. Her friends thought it was like suicide… If they only knew.
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jplynn is not online. jplynn
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05 Aug 2012 05:42 PM
I love it! :D
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isarule is not online. isarule
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05 Aug 2012 06:14 PM
Did you read the story before this? It is called Memories... here is the link!
http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=66917927
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pup321 is not online. pup321
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05 Aug 2012 07:26 PM
Thanks for your message with the link, Isarule.
I absolutely LOVE IT. I don't know about the future, but I bet this story is going to turn out even better than Memories was!
The only criticism I have is that the chapter is a little short, unlike the other chapters. But otherwise, I love where the story is heading to right now. I can't wait for the next chapter!

Keep up the good work! <3
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jplynn is not online. jplynn
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05 Aug 2012 08:37 PM
@Isa, yes I did.
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Thor8 is not online. Thor8
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06 Aug 2012 01:16 AM
Can't wait to read the rest. Keep up the good work, Isa! ^_^
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Chuzzle229 is not online. Chuzzle229
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06 Aug 2012 08:45 AM
Great job!
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Grahom is not online. Grahom
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06 Aug 2012 01:27 PM
You're very talented.
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isarule is not online. isarule
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11 Aug 2012 04:40 PM
I'm sorry I havent posted in quite some time... Im grounded from my laptop (This is my cousins... and im not lying...)

So here is the deal;


I will most likely come back around September, or maybe late august (My birthday is in 11 days, PRAY FOR THE BESSTTT!!)

Anyone who wants to be messaged when I come back, just reply me. Thanks.

I miss you all so much... And I really wish I could stay. I dont know how long i will be online.

Isarule (Izzi, or Isa :3)

PS. I seriously mean it... PM me if you want to be notified...
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isarule is not online. isarule
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28 Aug 2012 10:36 AM
My laptop broke:( I am working on my story on my iPad....
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super142 is not online. super142
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28 Aug 2012 03:44 PM
MORE NAO!
I'm joking, but I do think it's brilliant. Keep it up and bring more asap please.
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isarule is not online. isarule
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09 Sep 2012 02:08 PM
Chapter 2-
 A young girl ran down the school hall, ringing a tarnished bell.  As the mob of teenagers and children raced out of the chilly classrooms, she raced out of the way,into  a small and abandoned janitors' closet so she wouldn't be trampled. Cindy, who cautiously slipped into the small room where the girl sat,  Looked around uneasily, as she did every day before the meeting. She then pulled a bookshelf out, revealing a small crawl space, leading to a rocky wall. Cindy ran her hand against the wall, accidentally slicing her finger on the knife that was put in the wall for protection. 
She bit her lip, holding back her tears "Ouch." 
                 After taking a few seconds to wrap her wound, she pried the rocks off of the sides of the wall, starting to see the long rays of the  sun . Using both hands, She broke the wall open, and rushed out to the assembly hall, the younger girl followed, ringing the bell. Cindy then took her seat, on one of the rocks. 
                  A large crowd of girls, mixed in with some boys, walked into the small wooded area that used to be the playground. Gigantic slabs of rock were pulled around the area, that showed just the beginning of the small mountain.  They had fallen from an avalanche, obviously caused by a bomb that hit the top of the mountain.
The three taller girls that ran he alliance walked in, carrying a box, "Hello everyone!" shouted Ellie, who seemed glad that some of their finest people would be kicked because of petty arguments. 
           The crowd simply saluted back.
"Today, we will work on our ranks," Ellie announced, still grinning ear to ear.
             Cindy looked at her feet, which were poorly covered in torn sandals. She knew that Ellie was upset too, which would explain her worry this morning... Of course Ellie knew better than to kick Cindy from the alliance. Cindy knew too much. Like the way to trash Ellie's reputation... 
"Anastasia, what is the spy report?" Ellie asked in a very official tone, like she was leading a real army.
"Nothing much... We only have the information to the next big link," the short, tan, girl said,her dark brown eyes almost glowing  while she unrolled a rather large piece of paper.
The crowd cheered as Ellie walked over to her second in command, Cheryll VanHustion. "Cher, battle plans?" 
Cher, who was a taller girl, with blonde hair and blue eyes, smiled malevolently as she handed the papers over, whispering something in Ellie's ear.
Ellie giggled a little, a rare sight... "Okay, let's start with the people we're kicking..."
Cindy clenched her jaw as Cher stepped forward.
"I, have decided to kick Jen, Laura, and Ashley" Cher announced.
" I don't want to kick anyone this quarter..." Ellie announced, still giggling...
"Hah! Well there is no fighting back, I'm kicking someone who I got approval to kick... " Ana met eyes with Cindy, "Cynthia, I'm kicking you."
Ellie's smile dropped off of her face Cindy watched as Ellie suddenly became hostile, sharply grabbing Ana by the arm, and practically dragging her back behind a few rocks. Cher, noticing the hostility, adjourned the meeting. 
Cindy ran back behind the rocks, just in time to hear Ana exclaim that there was no turning back...

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I'm sorry it has taken so long:( I have been SUPER busy...
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pup321 is not online. pup321
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18 Sep 2012 09:23 PM
I was able to check back on the forums. Can't wait for the next chapter, Isa, you're doing great with this sequel! :) Keep it up.
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jplynn is not online. jplynn
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28 Sep 2012 09:09 PM
I just don't understand what has happened in the past.
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jplynn is not online. jplynn
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28 Sep 2012 09:09 PM
Wait, has WWIII begun in this novel?
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isarule is not online. isarule
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29 Sep 2012 08:20 PM
No this is in the future, it takes place in America.
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isarule is not online. isarule
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01 Oct 2012 08:14 AM
Hello fans! This is my first time on the computer in OVER a month!!! You have no clue how much I miss this easy typing... My laptop is going to get fixed sometime in the month of October...And I cant wait!!! So please bear with me, chapter 3 will up soon:) I miss you all!!
~Izzi
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swiftattak7 is not online. swiftattak7
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01 Oct 2012 08:30 AM
Not bad on the stories but I would add a little bit more detail on the city/village other wise it's great.
Swift~
[W.O.R]
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isarule is not online. isarule
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03 Oct 2012 04:07 PM
Well they barely have been in the village, but I'll keep it in mind!
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swiftattak7 is not online. swiftattak7
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04 Oct 2012 09:11 AM
I mean since they lived there for their whole childhood it would make sense that they would know the place nearly inside out.

Also it would be nice to know how hard it was, for example the people who didn't do as they were said got punished.

I like the idea though. It sort of reminds me of The hunger Games (with Katniss wanting to attack the capitol) any way keep it up. My only critic is the detail the rest is great.

Swift~

[W.O.R]
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BaGoo77 is not online. BaGoo77
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04 Oct 2012 10:08 AM
Oh my gosh! isarule! Haha I didn't notice YOU wrote this story! I LOVED Many Missing Memories! Keep writing, I want to hear more stories from you!
Fellow Writer
~ B.G
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pup321 is not online. pup321
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04 Oct 2012 07:27 PM
I was getting worried when I checked every day for (what seemed like) a whole month. I hope Chapter 3 will be here soon!

~Pup~
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coldbloodedkiller9 is not online. coldbloodedkiller9
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04 Oct 2012 07:34 PM
I suggest you read this-

http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=79448767
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isarule is not online. isarule
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05 Oct 2012 10:34 AM
@above, can't copy paste, just explain it.
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isarule is not online. isarule
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07 Oct 2012 12:51 PM
Chapter 3-
Ellie was never much of a violent type. But she was so confused, she couldn't Wrap her mind around the fact that her own sister hated her, her best friend betrayed her, and she had to fix this all by herself... She could never purposely hurt anyone, but she could teach someone to.
Aside from that, Ellie felt horribly guilty for letting Cindy leave without assuring her that she would almost definitely be able to stay in the alliance... Ana's terrified expression was enough to prove that Ellie was taking it too far... Ellie's arms fell slack as she walked up onto the rickety old playhouse that was their stage...
"Wait everyone," almost mumbled, looking down "we will hold a veto meeting tomorrow... Everyone who would like to witness, may..."
This started some chatter... Ellie jumped off, swinging off of one of the poles. She quickly put everything where it was supposed to be, grabbed her box, and sealed the entry, ignoring the knife with blood on it. As she placed the bookshelf back, she caught a glimpse of Cindy, who usually waited for her sister.
Ellie shivered as she ran down the freezing hall. She ran to the bus and boarded just before it drove off... Ellie spotted Cindy who sat at the very back seat, it wasn't very hard to tell even from several seats away that she had been crying... For one thing, her mascara was all over her face, and she was wearing a frown that looked like her world had been turned upside down.
Ellie grimaced and walked back to her,"Can I sit with you?"
Cindy didn't even spare her a glance "No.."
Ellie turned to Cher, who looked at both Cindy and Ellie sympathetically "You can sit with me El,"
"thanks," Ellie said and slid in next to Cher.
The road from the school led into the rich neighborhood, Their relatives lived. Ellie had always secretly envied their perfect and rich family. They saw the streets, filled with many elegantly dressed women, walking through a ruined city. There was no changing the fact that this was war... Then, they passed the road of mansions, one huge block of granite after another, Ellie hated the detail, much like her mother, but Cindy loved the fine carvings. As she settled back in her seat, they took a turn onto a rather rocky road. the bus slammed the teenagers around, but they were used to it. Yet another turn. Ellie was very surprised that the streets in her home town were dead. There wasn't a person to be seen, all of the shutters closed... Not even one solder stood in the bare streets. Ellie looked up to Cindy, whose expression exploded with fear.
"Ellie..." She whispered.
As the sun peaked out from the clouds, they appeared almost instantly... But not in time for the bus to stop, and the back of the bus exploded. Ellie flew out, grabbing onto her seat and watching as Cher gripped the seatbelt, Ellie offered her a hand. She pulled Cher up onto the shard of bus, and the last thing Ellie saw before she blacked out, was her mother, wearing a shocked expression as she maneuvered around to her daughters.
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I'm sorry the chapter is so short:)
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