hippo444
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| 04 Aug 2012 11:35 AM |
The War with life
Chapter 1 ''How it started'' So this is how the story began Young man named Fred Brown has ended school and was aiming to get a job. He was looking for one : Bus driver , McDonald worker and even rubush picker. He had a hard life his mother and father after he ended school kicked him out out of house. He had 2 hours to get out he took money , clothes , food and other stuff. He had 80 dollars so he had to use it smartly he was looking for the cheapest hotel and found one witch costs 20 dollars a night . So Fred took 1 night at the hotel and started to look for an job. Since the nation was at crisis there were not much jobs all North and South America was empty of jobs. Fred went to town to look for a job he went to clothes shop to maybe ask if he can be even be a cleaner all he wants is just a job and suddenly 3 robbers enter the shop! Everyone in the shop escaped but Fred didint they were pointing at him with the gun . Only the cashier and Fred were left in the shop. They took Fred to the van and killed the cashier. Robbers took the money and put Fred to sleep and escaped .
Fred woke up tied to the chair with rope on his mouth he couldn't shout so he was screwed. He tryed everything to get out and nothing he could do . "BANG" 1 robber entered the room and told Fred "If you wanna get out you need to do a favour for us , oh wait 2 favour's first, dont tell police about who we are and second ... You will robb the bank by your self We reserched alot since we know quite well its about 500 million . There are 4 of us plus you witch means you will get 100 million sounds good, huh ?" Fred had to do it so he went to bank (They were observing him) So he had to do it. He put his mask on and said "THIS IS A ROBBERY" he took his gun out and pointed at the cashier Fred said "If you call the Police I'll shoot" He took the money went back to base without anyone knowing when he went in he saw the robbers looking at him Fred said " What I got the money , Whats wrong with you guys ?" Behind them there were 3 officers 1 of the robbers came up to him and stuck a sticker on to him saying "Go to your hotel we know where it is we will go out of the jail and we will collect the money oh yeh right take your 100 million". He run out of the base since there were 3 officers chasing him after 1 hour he lost them . Since he had money he bought a house and a car.
Chapter 2 ''Found a job'' Fred used over 80 million his left with 20 million He has a big mansion and a ferrari his living a good life now. -200 days after- Fred is left with 10 million his mother died and the robbers aren't still out of jail. Suddenly he got a message on his iPhone that his father is in hospital and for an operation he needs to spend over 5 million he thought his father wasnt really fair to him but since its his father he gave him that 5 million after 2 days his father died anyway he was left with 4,500,000$ Suddenly those robbers witch he remember ages ago died in jail so he said Well "I will spend their money since they died" 1 month after . 2 guys came to him and said "Yo, were freinds of those robbers maybe you remember them were here to collect the money" Fred gave them 200,000,000 and they said "why only 200 million ?" He said "Its only 2 of you and I got only 250,000,000" They said "Fine , Give us the 250,000,000 million then or else" they took the gun out took the money and Fred was left with BIG 0 -Some time later- He celebrates his 19 birthday walking in the shops looking at stuff that he could afford and suddenly police came up to him and said they remember him they took him to jail. he met lots of new guys One day he met a guy called Jason and told him the way to get out . Jason told him he is digging underground and if Fred helps him they can get out and live again a lovley life. They digged and digged and got out so both of them looked for a job they got a job of a soccer player quite nice job huh ? They play for L.A Galaxy . Jason and Fred earned enough money to pay money to get out of the jail Fred got kicked out of the soccer club since he didnt know much Jason tryed to do somthing about it and got him a job of a security gaurd on the stadium Fred after 2 months earned 1,500 and was able to live . THE END
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tecku1
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| 05 Aug 2012 02:03 AM |
Umm I'm not that good at English but you need to keep on one subject and not jump onto another subject for example-
this story starts with a young man called Fred brown. He's had a very hard life kicked out of his house and the worse of all no job. There was absolutely no jobs available at all. Fred had to keep tight on money and if he didn't find a job soon he would be lying on a street. Searching for a place to stay is as hard as finding a job currently in America.
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Spriteria
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| Joined: 02 Aug 2012 |
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| 05 Aug 2012 04:35 AM |
| no get out cause i dont like reading |
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