|
| 01 Jul 2012 07:30 PM |
Plot -
This kid named Nichole wakes up, and goes outside. He goes to his friend's house and talks to him, and them they go to robloxia store. Just then, they hear a noise. There were bad guys just waiting to get in war. They start shooting. Then they all get in there car and start chasing each other. They were just nervous. They could not say anything. Just then, the bad guys car explodes, and Nichole goes over to check it out. They just start talking. Then they head back home.
Actors -
The bad guy team () () ()
Good guy team () () ()
We need 6 actors, and we will start fliming. |
|
|
| Report Abuse |
|
|
|
| 01 Jul 2012 07:30 PM |
| This is not the full scene, we will also be doing edit chat. Not in-game chat. |
|
|
| Report Abuse |
|
|
| |
|
| |
|
Knoxer
|
  |
| Joined: 04 May 2012 |
| Total Posts: 440 |
|
|
| 02 Jul 2012 12:02 AM |
To be honest. Your plot doesn't sound professional. One, it doesn't sound right, nor does it seem like it makes any sense.
1.) What was the purpose for a shootout? No one just starts popping bullets for no reason. Create a purpose for the story.
2.) A shootout and a car chase in one day, then they go home like nothing ever happened. Be releastic. If someone was to get into a brawl like that, you wouldn't just brush it off.
3) A friend? Give more detail. "This kid?" no. Give us some detail about the character? Is he strong? Is he cool? Is he nerdy? Give a character people could relate to.
Do that, and you'll end up with a hit. |
|
|
| Report Abuse |
|
|
Olympus23
|
  |
| Joined: 27 Mar 2012 |
| Total Posts: 2682 |
|
|
| 02 Jul 2012 01:04 AM |
| Oh, Knoxer, stop being so... jerky? Great idea to Han. |
|
|
| Report Abuse |
|
|
Knoxer
|
  |
| Joined: 04 May 2012 |
| Total Posts: 440 |
|
|
| 02 Jul 2012 03:20 AM |
| Olympus. I'm not being "jerky." I'm giving my advice. You just want to disagree with what I say, fine. But I could care less of what you think of me. |
|
|
| Report Abuse |
|
|
Olympus23
|
  |
| Joined: 27 Mar 2012 |
| Total Posts: 2682 |
|
|
| 02 Jul 2012 03:42 AM |
| She should make the video how she wants. She doesn't need advice from someone who hasn't make a video. |
|
|
| Report Abuse |
|
|
Knoxer
|
  |
| Joined: 04 May 2012 |
| Total Posts: 440 |
|
|
| 02 Jul 2012 08:23 AM |
| Umm. Are you talking to me? I'm making a 45 min. feature film. And when did he say, he didn't want advice in the first place. I'm tired of your starting stuff like this, you just can't help but to disagree. |
|
|
| Report Abuse |
|
|
Zilex1000
|
  |
| Joined: 14 Jul 2011 |
| Total Posts: 5647 |
|
|
| 02 Jul 2012 08:38 AM |
| Knoxer, not every video someone makes has to be a stylistic, high budget hit. |
|
|
| Report Abuse |
|
|
Knoxer
|
  |
| Joined: 04 May 2012 |
| Total Posts: 440 |
|
|
| 02 Jul 2012 08:56 AM |
I'm not saying it has to be a hit -.- I'm giving advice about the plot. |
|
|
| Report Abuse |
|
|
|
| 02 Jul 2012 11:58 AM |
| Im not a teenager. -.- Im a kid... |
|
|
| Report Abuse |
|
|