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| 21 Jun 2012 03:03 PM |
I am creating this roleplay/ story that I think will be pretty good. I am still creating it all and I want to know if all this hard work will actually be worth it. I don't want to work for hours or days on a roleplay just to have it die before it even starts so please tell me if you like this basic plot and/ or if you have any advice on how I can improve it. Please notice that I am not striving for original, whenever I try to be original I fail. When I don't try to be original I succeed so...
The country of Tain was okay before the Emperor came. The king may have been a fool but he wasn't cruel. The rich may have ruled but they didn't take EVERYTHING the poor owned. The biggest assassin guild, the Draco, may have practically ruled some parts of the country but they weren't ALL murderers. The poor may have had bad lives but they weren't unbearable. Everything was as perfect as it could be, especially since Tain was only a new nation. When the Emperor came everything went downhill. No one knows who he was or anything about him. All that is known about the Emperor is that he is a powerful Empowered. He isn't just any Empowered though, he is a Demonic AND Paranormal Empowered. It is rare that anyone is that special but he is. Its no surprise that he took over Tain in only 3 days. It is also no surprise that all the other Empowered are being executed. The Emperor is determined to be Tain's permanent ruler. The Empowered are a special group of people who usually belong to one of 3 categories. Bla bla bla. This is not that important right now.
Do you think this could be interesting? Would any of you consider joining this? |
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| 21 Jun 2012 03:06 PM |
| Sounds interesting enough. |
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| 23 Jun 2012 06:08 PM |
| Does anyone else have something to say about this idea? |
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| 23 Jun 2012 06:19 PM |
| It's does seem interesting. If this was a roleplay, I'd probably join. |
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| 23 Jun 2012 06:23 PM |
| Sounds good :P. I'll join. |
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HamsDrek
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| 23 Jun 2012 06:26 PM |
| Ahhh, assassins. Yes, I do enjoy those... Sounds promising, if being an assassin is possible. It seems the main goal of this would be to overthrow this Emperor? |
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| 23 Jun 2012 06:30 PM |
| Wait, so would the character also be empowered? |
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| 23 Jun 2012 06:45 PM |
| They could be. The goal of the roleplay is to overthrow the Emperor. I am making it so it is slightly more complicated. You can't just organize a rebellion. You need certain people to side with you and you may need certain items. You don't just have one goal. To get something done you may have multiple goals. Anyway you could be pretty much anything. Rich or poor. You could be one of the Draco. You could also be Empowered. If you are empowered them you have 2 goals. Don't be caught and executed by the Emperor and overthrow the Emperor. |
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nights192
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| 23 Jun 2012 06:51 PM |
| Ick! Stereotypical as hell. |
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| 23 Jun 2012 06:55 PM |
You obviously didn't read everything or pay attention. I never strive for originality and I said why. "Even in literature and art, no man who bothers about originality will ever be original; whereas if you simply try to tell the truth (without caring two pence how often it has been told before) you will, nine times out of ten, become original without ever having noticed it." ~C.S. Lewis I also stated that this was the basic outline and that it was not finished or even improved. |
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nights192
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| 23 Jun 2012 06:56 PM |
Except this is essentially the story of Fable 3. At least TRY to make it interesting.
Oh lord! The Emperor is a stereotypical bad guy! I am special! We have to overthrow him! UP WITH THE PROLETARIAT. |
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HamsDrek
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| 23 Jun 2012 07:00 PM |
| Well, he does have a bit of a point. Try developing the character of this Emperor a bit. Characters that are stereotypically evil tend to be bland. Perhaps give him a bit of back story that would explain why he is such a tyrant? If he has supporters? |
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| 23 Jun 2012 07:02 PM |
"I never strive for originality" Not trying to troll, but I need to say it anyway. However futile the effort to be original may be, attempt it anyway. As long as one can see you truly are trying, you've done what you needed. But yes, if you go down into mere basic plot, nights is correct, sorry to say...
I wish this post didn't sound so much like trolling... |
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Quasar99
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| 23 Jun 2012 07:04 PM |
put it up! i'd definantly join |
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| 23 Jun 2012 07:06 PM |
I am still creating the story! The Emperor's back story and such was supposed to be revealed DURING THE STORY! I am not giving it away because that then gives away every single plan I have for the role play! That was also the basic plot. More is to be added later. It does not. And I can not strive for originality. I have tried before and when I try my mind draws a blank and I can not think of anything but cliches. I can not search for something and come up with an idea like that. It is impossible for me. And it may be the basic plot but that does not include all the plans and secrets that I am adding in. I also wrote that before I had any idea what I would really do. T_T |
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HamsDrek
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| 23 Jun 2012 07:06 PM |
| Oh, alright. Well, I guess, if you make this roleplay, I will join. Or, at the very least, consider. |
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nights192
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| 23 Jun 2012 07:07 PM |
| Then you should probably give up writing. |
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| 23 Jun 2012 07:14 PM |
| Nights. You've seriously gotten under my skin lately. |
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nights192
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| 23 Jun 2012 07:19 PM |
i’m going to tell you this
don’t listen to those guys. if you have a story/rp to tell i would hate for the thing to stop you is originality.
do you know why formula exists? so something very simple can turn out amazing. something for everyone can be enjoyable. forumla exists so you can focus on other things and make those great. HP? that was pretty cliche but j.k rowling made pretty good characters making the book even better. |
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| 23 Jun 2012 07:19 PM |
You've been trolling every thread that doesn't meet your standards.
Just. Like. Xil. |
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nights192
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| 23 Jun 2012 07:20 PM |
| This is not trolling. I am simply stating my opinion. |
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| 23 Jun 2012 07:21 PM |
| Well, your opinions are exceptionally rude. In all honesty, you need to be less open-minded. |
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nights192
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| 23 Jun 2012 07:22 PM |
| Less open minded? I am afraid I do not understand. |
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