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| 06 Dec 2011 09:49 PM |
| nobody knows who Shadowscar was born to all the know is his story.one cold day Tigerstar sent a border patrol instead of finding another patrol they found Shadowkit lying on the cold ground.so they took him back to camp.Tigerstar was suprized at the sight of Shadowkit.he told his warriors to put him in the nusery with the other kits.Shadowkit grew quickly and he soon was an apprentice.one day a warrior named Blackpelt got mad at Shadowpaw for being Tigerstar`s "favorite" ShadowClanner for he wanted to be Tigerstar`s favorite ShadowClanner.one day Blackpelt came up with a evil plot to get rid of Shadowpaw.a few days later Shadowpaw was in the apprentices den when Blackpelt asked if he wanted to go hunting with him and his friends.Shadowpaw said yes and they where off hunting.but then they went to a place that TIgerstar said not to go.Shadowpaw asked "didn`t Tigerstar tell us not to come here Blackpelt?" Blackpelt glared at Shadowpaw and said "no we arn`t" Shadowpaw looked at Blackpelt and said slowly "then why are we here?" Blackpelt glared at Shadowpaw again "blackpelt?" Shadowpaw said in a trembleing voice "whats going on?" Shadowpaw said slowly "you will soon find out..."said Blackpelt.at that moment Blackpelt and his friends attacked him.Blackpelt scratched Shadowpaw`s left eye and blinded it.then he was pined to the ground by Blackpelt."wh-why are you doing this?" said Shadowpaw scared for his life.Blackpelt replied "why do you think?!?!" at that moment he knocked-out Shadowpaw and left him for dead |
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| 06 Dec 2011 09:50 PM |
I tried so hard to focus, but I just couldn't read it. |
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| 02 Jun 2012 11:25 AM |
I am sorry for the grammatical problems within the story. I did not used to take interest in grammar. But, I have changed. If you choose to hate on it that's fine. However, I would like to tell you, if you know the basics of manners or being polite. You would keep your hateful opinions to yourself.
Your's truly,
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BioBot95
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| 02 Jun 2012 11:26 AM |
What IS Warrior Cats?
~@ Real Life is a myth @~ |
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| 02 Jun 2012 11:29 AM |
| @Bio, its a book series made by Erin Hunter. A psyeduom. The word that I can't frickin' spell. |
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| 02 Jun 2012 11:48 AM |
I have gone through this particular story and added grammar. I am sorry for the bad grammar in the other version.
Hear is the story:
No one knows who Shadowscar was born to, all they know is his story;
One cold day, Tigerstar sent out a patrol. They heard the faint mew of a kit lying on the cold ground. They couldn't just leave it there, so they took him back to camp.
Tigerstar was surprised at the sight of the kit. He saw something "special" in this kit. So he told his warriors to put him in the nusery, with the other kits. Soon the kit was able to walk. He liked to play tricks on the other kits by sneaking up on them silently in the dark, giving him his name; Shadowkit.
Shadowkit grew quickly and he soon was an apprentice. And a warrior named Blackpelt got jealous of Shadowpaw for being Tigerstar's "favorite"; for he wanted to be Tigerstar's favorite.
One day Blackpelt came up with a evil plot to get rid of Shadowpaw. A few days after the plot was made, Shadowpaw was in the apprentices den when Blackpelt asked if he wanted to go hunting with him and his friends. Shadowpaw was delighted to come with, and in no time they where off to go hunting.
They entered into a strip of land that Tigerstar said was across the border. "Didn't Tigerstar tell us that this is passed the border, Blackpelt?" Shadowpaw asked. Blackpelt glared at Shadowpaw and said "This is one of the best hunting spots." Shadowpaw looked at Blackpelt "So, you're going to hunt out of boundaries and get your tail kicked by Tigerstar?... Good plan." Shadowpaw said sarcastically. Blackpelt glared at Shadowpaw again. This time Shadowpaw wasn't so stupid.
This time he saw the emotion in Blackpelt's eyes; hate.
Shadowpaw had put it all together now. "What's going on?" Shadowpaw said in a trembling voice. Although it was a rather stupid question. He knew what Blackpelt was doing. "You will soon find out..." Blackpelt said. At that moment Blackpelt and his friends attacked him.
Blackpelt scratched Shadowpaw's right eye, blinded it. Then he was pinned to the ground by Blackpelt. Shadowpaw yowled, scared for his life. "Shut up you stupid kittypet!" Blackpelt screamed. Shadowpaw's vision started to blur. "You will pay, Blackpelt." Shadowpaw though. "You will die for what you have done this day."
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Again, please do not hate. I don't want another bad day. If there are any grammatical problems I am sorry. I didn't really have that much time. The story telling may be a bit bad. I wrote this a long time ago.
Shadow |
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Asassin37
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| 02 Jun 2012 11:53 AM |
| Evacuate the area to prevent contamination. |
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| 02 Jun 2012 12:05 PM |
| This is fan-fiction,and I love the warriors series,but this has NOTHING to do with ROBLOX. Please direct this to Movies/Tv/Books. Thank you. (: |
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| 02 Jun 2012 12:07 PM |
| Oops! Thought this was RT...MY BAD. |
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| 02 Jun 2012 12:09 PM |
@stink
It's still in the wrong forum anyway. |
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| 02 Jun 2012 12:09 PM |
| Well, I can see that people are still hating... I feel bad for you haters... Doing nothing with your life except making people feel bad because you're too demented to think before you hate... Poor, poor, you. |
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| 02 Jun 2012 12:33 PM |
| A wise man once said "Haters make you famous." And I wouldn't want to be too famous, now would I? |
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9volt
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| 02 Jun 2012 12:34 PM |
put this in 'roleplaying'.
also warrior cats is stupid :) |
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| 02 Jun 2012 12:37 PM |
| @9volt, Ah, this is where you are wrong. You see, it is not roleplay, it is a story. And Warriors being stupid is your opinion... And I would not trust an opinion from a "dimwit" such as yourself. |
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| 02 Jun 2012 12:39 PM |
| Not all furries like warrior cats, But everybody who likes warrior cats is a furry. |
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| 02 Jun 2012 12:40 PM |
| @Blastb00m, and the shame in being a "Furry" is? |
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| 02 Jun 2012 12:44 PM |
| i like the series but this is horrible. |
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| 02 Jun 2012 12:47 PM |
| @Coolxdude2, I would like to see you do better. However, I must say you look more like an abstract painting than an author. |
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| 02 Jun 2012 12:48 PM |
| And you look more like somebody who's trying too hard to make their avatar look like some depressed emo person. Your point? |
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| 02 Jun 2012 12:49 PM |
| @Blastb00m, I am an Emo depressed person. Emos tend to be Poets or Authors. |
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| 02 Jun 2012 12:52 PM |
@shadow, i could do much better then this. MUCH.
so you're judging me by what i'm wearing on a virtual game?
sure proves who you are. |
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