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| 04 Jun 2012 09:52 PM |
Characters: yellowdude9209: Ivan Equinox Faeles PointlessChris24: Gelias Criterius Xenatus: Xodoli Frigidus Leeruby: Frostus Criterius Scazzard1: James Latro AceB190: Lance Gladio AlexR1212: Fortis Solidor Gromlix: Icarus Jr. Criterius
Remember, this is a short story so don't expect a lot of paragraphs in each chapter. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ The waves crashed against the side of the boat. We were heading to the TGI coast, in squadrons of boats. "Remember James, stick with the Sparrows, or else you might run off and I die" I suggested. "Alright" James replied. "SUIT UP SPARROWS" shouted James as we neared the shore line. Xodoli, Ivan, Lance, and I all checked our gear and equipment. "Clear" we all said. I checked the shore line, only to see bunkers at the top of the hill, with people manning LMG's. I looked to the right, and saw Fortis, Icarus, and Frostus on another boat. Their boat gates opened, and bullets came flying by into the boat. "EVERYONE, JUMP INTO THE WATER!" I shouted. Lance and Ivan jumped in the water first, then James, then Xodoli and I jumped in last. Bullets flew by and cannons started raining upon us. We arrived on the sand. "Keep moving, don't stop!" Ivan shouted. An explosion landed in front of us and James flew backwards. His left kneecap was gone, and he needed medical help. I dragged James to cover. "James, are you alright?" I asked. I checked behind the cover, only to see a cannon shell head towards the piece of cover we had. It hit the wall, and made us all go flying. My head hit the ground and I became unconscious. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Icarus saw me on the battlefield, lying over a crumpled wall. "Gelias!" he shouted. He ran over to where I was, and shook me. "Gelias! Get up!" he continued to shout. It was no use though. Icarus dragged me to some cover, and put some water on my face. I woke up with a start. "Icarus, where am I?" I asked. "Somewhere near where you became unconscious" he replied. "Crap, where's James? I have to keep him alive" I said. Then, I saw Ivan fighting off waves of TGI with his dual flights. I got up and ran by his side, and took out my Menace. "Let's make sure they never declare war on us again" I say as I take out one of the bunkers occupied by an LMG. We advance forward, driving the TGI back. I climb up the hill and take out my Pulse and see a TGI. I spray him down and I get inside the bunker. Other troops advance forward, chasing after the TGI. As I look at the computer, I look back and see a nuclear bomb coming down. "Get down!" I shout as the bomb came down. -----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
I haven't wrote a story in a while, and I have other things on my mind. Tell me what you think below. |
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gromlix
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| 04 Jun 2012 09:56 PM |
| Real good Gramps. Can't wait to hear the sequel. IDEA- How I came back to life. I died in some previous story. |
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| 04 Jun 2012 09:58 PM |
Your Icarus in this story, not gromlix.
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gromlix
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| 04 Jun 2012 10:00 PM |
| In whatever next chapter you make...Please actually separate your paragraphs. It kills me to see stories written as giant blocks of text. |
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| 04 Jun 2012 10:01 PM |
I spaced it...stupid ROBLOX forums.
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Scazzard1
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| 04 Jun 2012 10:22 PM |
| THIS IS AUTOMATICALLY LOVELY FOR I AM MENTIONED |
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| 04 Jun 2012 10:24 PM |
your welcome, my pirate friend. arrr...
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| 04 Jun 2012 10:38 PM |
| Coollio I like how this starts, with the Sparrows showing TGI who's boss! :D |
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Mike82098
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| 04 Jun 2012 10:40 PM |
Really nice story you wrote, Point.
Don't mind puncuation right now, mind your imagination.
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AceB190
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| 04 Jun 2012 10:45 PM |
lance gladio. awesome.
Azn|Persuasion ^^ |
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| 04 Jun 2012 10:46 PM |
I had to look you up. Lol.
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Xenatus
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| 05 Jun 2012 05:08 PM |
This story is great. Keep writing!
"It is not titles that honour men, but men that honor titles." |
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| 05 Jun 2012 06:14 PM |
| Chris, you forgot to add me!!! |
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AlexR1212
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| 05 Jun 2012 09:13 PM |
Bump.
I'ma do my thing until the day the reaper come for me. |
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| 05 Jun 2012 09:17 PM |
| Pretty good man, keep up the good work! :) |
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Flammus
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| 05 Jun 2012 09:28 PM |
Good story
Mention Raminas Solidor (me), Fortis' older cousin. <3 |
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tixslave
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| 05 Jun 2012 09:31 PM |
k. I'll see what I can do.
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| 05 Jun 2012 09:32 PM |
| Chris, it's a really good story man! Also, I'll be changing my name to ThunderSlayer |
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| 05 Jun 2012 09:32 PM |
| ... How come there is no High Ranked TGI in here with OP guns?! |
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Flammus
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| 05 Jun 2012 09:33 PM |
| gen that's something you need |
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| 05 Jun 2012 09:34 PM |
| @Gen, was it too complex for you to read or did you actually read it? Lol |
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| 05 Jun 2012 09:36 PM |
Second chapter coming out later tonight. And gen doesn't read books. He reads...
BOOKITS.
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