jijibibi
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| 01 Jun 2012 01:01 PM |
-continued, if you havent read part 1, please do so here. ttp://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=69047175- c:
I looked to the corner. Objective Diamond!
As a brash person, i rushed but it was too late. I fell into a trap. The trapdoor opened but i managed to grab onto the ledge of the trapdoors, pulling myself up.
I looked up into the bright sky, and my AI helped to darken the world abit. There were six suns, in a perfect hexagon shape. No, they cant be generated by nature. They were artificially created, but by who?
"Heh, nice one." someone said and with a pat on the back.
The WSC Resoulte - D connected with our minds and broadcasted a message. We are currently in Alpha Centuari, 8 billion years before Sol were born. Everyone was shocked. The Sh'darr tried to use time travel to actually go back into the time before we were even created, erasing our existance once and for all, including another spacefaring race, called the Chelk.
They were also hunted and killed by the Sh'darr. Once, we were allies. As one, standing together. But they were erased.
The Chelks responded by sending their ships deep into Sh'darr space but failed. The Sh'darr were not in good mood. They used one of their gigantic meteorite ships to drop 5 AntiMatter bombs into the Chelk homeworld. They, are now extinct. Humans, have always longed for venegance for the Chelk destruction. Why did it begin? Lets have a look back in time.
In 2150 AD, humans have mastered nanotechnology, and that is, until the 23rd century, where there was this gobal economics crash.
Why? Because, if you brought a couple of "foodseeker" nanodrone colony , and released them into dirt, they would return with a full meal. If you brought a "Housebuilder" nanodrone colony and put them into dirt, you can return a few hours later with a fully functional 2 story mansion with airconditioning systems all wired in place and a working computer for internet access, with chairs and tables and beds. No one then ever brought anything and that led to a crash.
The Sh'darr were actually, afraid of us! They are cowards, asking the Humans and the Chelk to stop ALL research on nanotechnology, cybernetics and computers.
The second brodcast came in. "All troops, cesae fire and return to your dropships. The Sh'darr are offering surrendring terms." Brigadier Super said. "To who, us? NO! WE WONT SURRENDER!" Field Colonel Ultimateguy shouted back. "Calm down, THEY are surrendering." Brigadier Dizzdazz calmly said.
Everyone was shocked. A civilisation, more advanced than ours, one who can construct artificial suns, use entire meteorides as ships, surrender to US? It was impossible.
"Why?" Everyone asked in unison.
The chairman's voice took over.
"Since we are in the past, they are afraid that their actions might change the course of their own civilisation forever. They are offering ceasefire, treaty terms..."
Everyone then sighed in relief that the war was finally over.
Peace.
Uniting with faimly members.
The war is over.
At what cost? Did we come to a point where a treaty is just possible, looking at my comrades die? Each action have their effects. A domino effect. Say. A child who have cancer, rushing the hospital, can be cured. The child will then be inspired to cure cancer and save lives, which, this "dominio" piece is tipped over, it will affect hundreds, or thousands , or even millions of people, on Earth and on its colonies.
It was a relief.
The Earth have reached into a new golden age. We will not forget the sacrifice of others who did so much.
"Attention, all troops. Yes, this is a bad way to end a war but atleast we can come up with enough time to actually research on better technology and we WILL, and i PROMISE, that we will erase the Sh'darr of their existence to avenge the allies ,the friends we once had. Their destruction and sacrifice is unforgettable!"
The Chelk. They have been our first contact ith aliens and ET's. We traded information to them and vice versa. We were managing so well.
The Sh'darr just have to ruin it. Why?
I looked around.
Everyone is cheering as the dropships came to pick them up.
They are finally heading for Earth.
They are headed for...
...home.
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| 02 Jun 2012 07:55 AM |
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| 04 Jun 2012 03:55 AM |
"It's an OK story. Lots of comma errors, you need to correct those! Probably the best plot I've seen till now, I'll give you that. It's sort of hard to read it, and there should be less description and more action in the middle part. I'm not sure about your hopes in the contest, but I'd say you're one of many that has a chance on the top 3"
You said that on someone else's thread, basically to the exact word. If you're going to give false opinions then you can get out.
Anyhoo jiji. It's an OK story. Lots of comma errors, you need to correct those! Probably the best plot I've seen till now, I'll give you that. It's sort of hard to read it, and there should be less description and more action in the middle part. I'm not sure about your hopes in the contest, but I'd say you're one of many that has a chance on the top 3 |
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