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| 11 May 2012 07:18 PM |
| when a group of frenids go on a trip to californa when they come back the town that they grew up in together in is musterily diserted.As they go and try out why every one gone to and what they gotten in to this time they find out that there town is not the only undead place around! |
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mjemje
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| 11 May 2012 07:20 PM |
1. GOOD GOD THAT TYPING FIX IT
2. There is no character sheet.
3. The plot tries too hard to be dramatic.
4. Zombie threads are very (very) unoriginal. |
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| 11 May 2012 07:21 PM |
Woo no character sheet OR rules! Name:Chuck Norris power:SUPER POWAS!!!!! Appearance: Jet pack, potato head
I BEAT THE CRAP OUT OF ALL THE ZOMBIES |
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DoomDark
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| 11 May 2012 07:22 PM |
WOOT.
Name:Chuck Norris 2 Power:ALL Appearance:Jetpack,french fry head.
I BEAT THE CRAP OUT OF ALL THE SUPER ZOMBIES. |
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| 11 May 2012 07:30 PM |
| srry about that im not good at this k sooo...i where a white tank whith a light colerd jean jacket and riped up jeans whith black and white snekers whepons a first aid kit an knife and a pistil hair is dirty blond long and whavy meh age is about !& and a hafe power is...super speed and super stranth nAME IS:C.J. SHORT FOR CHRISTY JONES LAST THING...I THINK I HAVE one light icey blue eye and a lightish brown eye on the left and icey blue on right |
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mjemje
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| 11 May 2012 07:31 PM |
Name: guy Powers: super DUPER powers Appearance: super DUPER looking
i beat teh crap out of the stupid chuck norris noobs |
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| 11 May 2012 07:31 PM |
| srry my age is 17 and a hafe |
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mjemje
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| 11 May 2012 07:32 PM |
None of the errors I pointed out were fixed at all. You cannot improve if you do not try to. |
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| 11 May 2012 07:33 PM |
| hey guy where are we going agin...its taking for ever to get to the stinking place |
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| 11 May 2012 07:34 PM |
| how do i do it??/ plzz tell meh |
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| 11 May 2012 07:36 PM |
| Dude, im younger than you and i got better grammar. |
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| 11 May 2012 07:37 PM |
FIX YOUR DAMN GRAMMAR
GOD-DAMN
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| 11 May 2012 07:48 PM |
Use punctuation.
Use correct spelling.
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| 11 May 2012 07:55 PM |
"why am i so EPIC?!? cuz im meh!!!!!!!!!!! do i ansept freind reqests? yea i do!!! do i wuv kittens? omg yea i sure do!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ohh and did i say i waz EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! CUZ I AM!!!! do i love skate bording yea i do!!!! and last buttt most importent i wuv ZOMBEZ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LIKE SHOOTING THEM IN THE HEAD WELL THATS WHANT I WANA DO WHITH NOOBS!!!...and sacrificing meh own life for meh team mates!!!@.@ soo yea ohh and did i say i waz EPIC CUZ I AM!!!! soo im chill fun and i love to kick zombe butt well lets say not just zombes boys to so...see ya!XD"
From this....things blurb. This creature has absolutely no grammar. |
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| 11 May 2012 08:08 PM |
| ohh just be qiet yo lol i do have bad gramer |
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| 11 May 2012 08:14 PM |
| i cant i dont know how to... |
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| 11 May 2012 08:33 PM |
| Oh My...The nations stupidity is increasing! - Faultydex |
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| 11 May 2012 09:38 PM |
| Faultydex...you're one to talk. |
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faultydex
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| 11 May 2012 11:20 PM |
| Thank you,thank you.-Spongebob Squarepants |
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| 11 May 2012 11:47 PM |
Faultydex, you are such a hypocrite. But, yes, this person has no grammar at all and is very much hopeless. I'm afraid, it's too late to save her, sorry everyone.
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| 12 May 2012 09:34 AM |
| yea i know srry guys ther tipos lol but this group cant go on much longer...+=.( |
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| 15 May 2012 10:53 PM |
| ...So bad I could tell from the title it was. |
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