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| 28 Mar 2012 08:52 AM |
Come all, to thy Glistening Rock, where dreamers can be free, none will be let down, nor denied, to thy Glistening Rock,
Glistening Rock is such a magical place, filled with treasures, filled with adventure, filled with power no one could even dream of, all awake at Glistening Rock,
Glistening Rock is no secret, for all should know, of the magnificence it beholds, from it's golden glow, to the chilling shallows,
None should be afraid, for sailors all around, have found, thy Glistening Rock
I haven't really tried something like this yet, but I want to try and write things that I would normally never write. Nonetheless, I still desire feedback to see if I'm alright this field of Poetry. |
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| 28 Mar 2012 01:11 PM |
Amazing, but those two word lines could go into a bit more detail... Overall, you are a great writer. |
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| 28 Mar 2012 04:19 PM |
Eh, It was pretty good... I still want 50% when you're famous :3333 Приходите все, Твоему Сверкающие Рок, где мечтатели может быть свободным, никто не будет опускать, но и не опроверг, Твоему Сверкающие Рок,
Блестящие Rock такое волшебное место, заполнен сокровищами, наполненный приключениями, заполнены власти никто не мог даже мечтать, все спать по Сверкающие Рок,
Блестящие Rock для кого не секрет, все должны знать, великолепия он видит, от его золотого свечения, для охлаждения мелководье,
Никто не должен бояться, для моряков по всему, нашли, Сверкающие твой рок |
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| 28 Mar 2012 08:24 PM |
Thanks! I don't know if I will get THAT popular.. |
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| 29 Mar 2012 08:08 PM |
Bump. Need a little bit more feedback to determine what type of Poem I should make next. |
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