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| 14 Mar 2012 04:17 PM |
Roses are red, violets are blue. Some of my friends think I must be deaf, boy are they so wrong too. They whisper little thoughts, they stare at me it’s true. Why do they gaze at me like that, they must be hiding something new.
Angry I am, but not as you think. I'm most observant as ever, but they miss the realization in just one blink.
I know it now, it's not just from out of the blue. I can see them squirming, but I guess I can play along with their little jig too.
I’m not fragile, but I’m not strong. They think it shall break my heart, but heck they are insanely wrong.
▬♦▬♦▬ ೋღ❤ღೋ ▬♦▬♦▬ ೋღ❤ღೋ ▬♦▬♦▬ ೋღ❤ღೋ ▬♦▬♦▬
TADA! Lol. comments, thoughts, suggestions, opinions...? Anything?! XD! You would understand my accusation if you knew my the people in my life in real. Its not really just an accusation, its the pure truth. |
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| 14 Mar 2012 04:36 PM |
| This isnt the best poem, and it may sound inane in your eyes. Because, you would have to be me to understand the predicament. And if you don't understand it, then i sounds stupid. |
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| 15 Mar 2012 03:39 AM |
| Wow, thats.....Incredible! :o |
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| 15 Mar 2012 05:21 PM |
| Nice poem! :) I hope everything goes better for you with these issues. |
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| 15 Mar 2012 05:44 PM |
| Best poem i have ever read! |
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| 15 Mar 2012 06:23 PM |
| Thank y'all! And thank you SCS, your so kind! Best friends, who are girls, tend to get dramatic and frustration flares. Things will get better, they always do. :) |
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| 15 Mar 2012 07:36 PM |
| It's a good poem, though the lines get a bit long. If I were to revise this, I would shorten up each phrase and put in more emotion through poetic devices. Nice work, though. |
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| 15 Mar 2012 08:31 PM |
| Thank you for the advice and thoughts! |
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| 15 Mar 2012 09:59 PM |
| That was incredable and just amazing. I understand where you are comming from. Thanks for a great poem to read. |
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| 16 Mar 2012 03:03 PM |
| Amazing poem dude. I hope things go well for you. |
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| 16 Mar 2012 03:05 PM |
| Thank you all. Your comments are so generous. |
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| 16 Mar 2012 04:17 PM |
Please check out.... http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=64431006#64431807
Thanks! :) |
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| 16 Mar 2012 09:46 PM |
Anyone wanna give me a prompt on what i should write my next poem about? :) Okay I know this sounds funny, but i prefer the prompt not be all.... "happy". I dont want it to be happily ever after. Thanks!
~Megz |
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| 17 Mar 2012 04:46 PM |
| Not bad. Though you might want to shorten the lines a bit. |
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