whoisdiss
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| 28 Feb 2012 02:49 PM |
Chapter7 No No! Staring:xWOWZABOYx Wolverinex345 Whoisdiss Man1122
We were at the base waiting for Man1122 to give the order to move up,We were all in gulielue suits'."Okay move up..." Cried Man1122, "I got the guy on the end..." Said xWOWZABOYx,"Okay on my go Man1122 take that guy right there.Wolverinex345 you take the guy over there to the left.On my go...3...2...1...Fire!"We all shot our 5o L1a1 Sniper Rifles' at the same time.There was no sound because we all had sliencers' on."Okay let's go get there bodys' we will take there suits' and move in...Hoah! "Back here again!" Said xWOWZABOYx, We all put the F.E.A.R Gaurd suits' on."Man1122 you keep gaurd.xWOWZABOYx Wolverinex345 with me!" "Hey Whoisdiss Sir ummm...We have to go come on we better not get our selfs' killed..." "Don't be a coward Wolverinex345 let's go!!" "Sir I really don't wan..." "LET'S GO!!!" Said xWOWZABOYx,
We were inside the base walking bye Gaurds'"Sir I don't feal good...Oh i'm sick let's do this later let's go!" "Wolverinex345 why are you so worried we can do this!" "Sir please I don't want to be here!" "COME ON AND SHUT UP!!!!"...*Boom* "Clear left...Clear right!" "Okay xWOWZABOYx find the tape to the D.N.A room.That's were our hair's will be find the tape that was recorded one week ago!" "Yes sir!" "Wolverinex345 keep Gaurd!" "Sir I found it...UHHH SIR YOU NEED TO SEE THIS!" "What is it!" "Look someone stealing our Hair samples!" "Wait zoom in on that face...OMG IS THAT...WOLVERINEX345 Taking our Hair samples'!"Me and xWOWZABOYx turned around Wolverinex345 was not in the room!"We need to get him!" "Man1122 alert alert Wolverinex345 is a traitor I reapeat he's a traitor!"We ran after Wolverinex345 but he was to fast but then!*Boom* Wolverinex345 was shot in the head right between the eye's!'Who did that!"Said xWOWZABOYx,"Told you I was in the F.E.A.R Juggernaughts'!"
"You ideot we could have kept him for intel why he did it!" "Ummm...Whoisdiss Sir you need to see this!" "What!" "It say's Reach Interdusterie's!" "Wait wait he's still alive Whoisdiss sir!" I walked over to Wolverinex345 "You want to know why I killed those Gaurd's.So I could get into your base.The man I work for Want's top be you!I my plan was working ou so far We knew you go to the prison and I had to fake get you out!But I was gonna kidnapp you and your Freinds' on the chopper.I never got to that!My plan failed here..."
"He's dead!" Cried Man1122, "Pack up boy's we are going to Reach Intredusterie's!" "We are going to Wipe the man who caused this face off Venezia!" "I can't wait to put Million Bullet's in his head!" "It will only take one!"
We were in the Helicopter,"I can't belive he did something like that!" "It's okay xWOWZABOYx!" "We will get revenge right!" "Yeah we will for SpeedSonic1234 and For PrisonedGuide77 our lost freinds'" "Hoah!" "Hoah!" "Hoah!" "For Venezia!!!!!"
Tune in next week for next Chapter... |
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| 28 Feb 2012 02:50 PM |
"Forse" I stopped there.
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| 28 Feb 2012 02:56 PM |
Here's a tip, contact your members and ask them to either give you code names OR make them give you a fake roleplay name.
That wolf guy could be "Wolf" or a name like "Alex Redwood."
It makes your story, come alive.
~DA |
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| 28 Feb 2012 03:22 PM |
| Take DA's advice, using code names or nicknams, like X or xWOW for me, and wolf for wolverine. Try looking at my storys, and see how they are structured, where I make spaces, the kinds of punctuation and so on. BTW, it's called task 'forse' for a reason. long story, no need to explain, but THAT'S its name! |
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whoisdiss
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| 28 Feb 2012 03:30 PM |
| I don't like using code names it dosent feal like your there.That's why I use your full name's! |
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| 28 Feb 2012 03:30 PM |
Well, it looks weird.
Xwolf sais
Wolf said
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WatTyler
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| 28 Feb 2012 03:31 PM |
Use the Forse.
■▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬๑۩๑▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬▬■ This Thread is Minor Threat Territory Now.
Captain Wat Tyler http://www.roblox.com/My/Groups.aspx?gid=201714 |
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whoisdiss
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| 28 Feb 2012 03:32 PM |
| Well if i don't use there full name i dont feal right |
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whoisdiss
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| 28 Feb 2012 03:32 PM |
And why is it called forse I alwats thouht you spelled it wrong xWOW |
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| 28 Feb 2012 03:33 PM |
@Whoisdiss
Here is what you can do. Use that "Starring" thing like you do in the begining but like this
Staring xWOLVERINEx as "Wolf" Soandso as "Thatguy"
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whoisdiss
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| 28 Feb 2012 03:34 PM |
| Whos xWOLVERINEx is xWOWZABOYx and i ment to say *Always |
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whoisdiss
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| 28 Feb 2012 03:36 PM |
| Anyway guy's did you still like the big twist in the story that what i though everyone would be talking about the big twist |
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man1122
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| 28 Feb 2012 04:12 PM |
Like i said, try to be more clear on who is saying what. alot of parts are out of order like u go from one person talking with another person talking with out of warning. try to make more clear please. |
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| 28 Feb 2012 04:16 PM |
Oh god, lost all my respect and interest at "Forse"...
...Dumb kid, how o ld are you...? 2...?
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| 28 Feb 2012 04:29 PM |
What do you know about FEAR? Your feared to tell the truth.
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whoisdiss
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| 28 Feb 2012 05:40 PM |
| hey im trying to make a good story idiots and you do this to thanks mobs |
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whoisdiss
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| 28 Feb 2012 05:46 PM |
| anyone like the plot twist |
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Altair55
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