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| 04 Feb 2012 02:09 AM |
| The midnight mist chilled my skin. I had a bad feeling coming here was going to not be good. I walked as the sand blowed against me. I approached the old abandoned house. I walked in hearing the creaky steps of the old hardwood floor. I saw no furniture. Only a picture of a old man. His eyes stared at me looking cold. No kindness. I needed to get out of here now. And fast. A chill ran down my spine. Should i risk going back out now that the lightning started? I needed too. I ran back into the sandy woods. The darkness followed behind, as if to catch me. |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:11 AM |
"A chill ran down my spine. Should i risk going back out now that the lightning started? I needed too"
Bish I know you did not just use the wrong 'to'. |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:12 AM |
| I ran, but the darkness caught up. I should have never came here. I knew what could happen. It caught up to me. I felt trapped as it swirled around me. Froze me. I woke up in a different world. It was all grey. I saw blood everywhere. People being tortured. Chains and locks. The most terrible of all, was how they were getting tortured. |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:13 AM |
| Why would i care what kind of too or to i used? Im not even fully awake. |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:14 AM |
| If you're not fully awake, why are you writing stories? |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:16 AM |
| I creeped by, the torturures didn't notice, as they were too busy caught up with that. I saw people hanging by their hands from the cieling. The screams of pain just broke me. I backed up as a torturer hammering a person glanced behind. I hid in the shadows. The victims noticed me, they were looking surprised. I have found the way out. The land was lush, but the people were terrible. |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:17 AM |
| Because im bored, and it's fun. Why are you reading if you don't like them? |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:18 AM |
Your logic = fail How would he know if he didn't like them unless he read them? |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:20 AM |
| Because I like criticizing things and seeing how people react. Most people are like "Man, haters gon' hate" but most people new to ROBLOX are really easy to make angry and it's fun as heck. |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:21 AM |
| They were barbaric. What a waste of land, i thought as i looked at the people. They were cutting their meat while they were still alive. Letting the poor animals suffer. I could not wait till i got out of this place. This terrible place. I saw people that were dead, left lying on the ground. I was disgusted at the awful sights. |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:22 AM |
| I am 3 months 7 days older than you. I am not new. |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:23 AM |
| READ MY STORY, PLEASE AND THANK YOU, SIR/MAM. |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:24 AM |
@ Cross
How come you don't say get out when other people post stories on here? This is off topic. Stories are not roleplay, they are stories. Stories count as off topic. Therefore i don't have to get out because i can post anything i wan't here. |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:26 AM |
"Therefore i don't have to get out because i can post anything i wan't here."
>"i can post anything i wan't here"
Can't tell if trolling... |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:28 AM |
| Pressed the ' key by accident. I meant want. |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:33 AM |
@Peace
Oh no, I wasn't criticizing your grammar. I was criticizing the imminent danger of you automatically supposing that the forum's name enables you to post whatever you want on it.
In simpler words that you may understand: "Das not how it werk" |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:33 AM |
| hold on, did the story stop |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:35 AM |
| I still can post whatever. It's off topic. Off Topic is off topic. Why critizize only mine, if your'e critisizing this then go, shoo and critisize all the other stories and roleplays on here. I'm just thinking you automaticly don't like me on first sight because i wrote this story. This is the first time i did a story on OT anyway. |
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| 04 Feb 2012 02:44 AM |
| Why are you reading my posts if you don't like them. How is this mangled? Ivegot pretty good grammer compared to alot of people. I know people that don't know how to spell boy in my class so, if you don't want to read them then don't i posted this for fun not for critisizm. |
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