luniso
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| 03 Feb 2012 02:59 PM |
[[I WILL NOT LIE IN THIS SPEECH.]]
One day, back in my newbie days, i liked to play games! I was as happy as can be! Then, i saw an Ad. The Ad made me like ":o". I clicked the Ad and it let me to F.E.A.R. I think you know what happened next. Yup! I said "Eh..." and went to the "Games" page. Then i was playing a game and say SONICTHEHEDGEHOGXX for the first time ever. I was a newbie so i ignored him because i didn't know he was the best clan owner and the best builder (EVER). So i was playing. Then i hear everyone talking about F.E.A.R. I hear "FEAR" and "fear" and "F.EA.R" and "F.E.A.R". After i thought... "wow dis grup must b rlly popular" (Note that i was a newbie and i used no grammar). So i searched it up myself. After i saw the group, i joined. I joined because it was famous. Not because of it's epicness. After a month or two, i actually went to Alianor 1.0. It was cool. It was amazing! After that i decided to like FEAR. I looked up to JOHNSTER98 because he was the first Leader (General) i met. I've been trying to become a General (Colonel) for my whole time in FEAR. And, eventually, i hoped i would become a Leader (General)!! I think i should be a Colonel in F.E.A.R because i am a good Leader. F.E.A.R taught me how to use grammar, F.E.A.R taught me how to script, F.E.A.R even taught me how to build!!! And so i look up to F.E.A.R. I have dreams of becoming a Colonel. I have people who would agree!! AND TILL THIS DAY ON, I BOW TO NEVER QUIT F.E.A.R!!! NO MATTER HOW MANY TIMES I'M FLAMED, HOW MANY TIMES I AM DEMOTED! NO MATTER HOW MANY TIMES I'M HATED!!! I WILL NEVER BETRAY F.E.A.R!! I WILL NEVER BETRAY F.E.AR AND I WILL NEVER QUIT F.E.A.R AND LET MY HOPE DOWN. AND IF I GET EXILED, I WILL JOIN AND START OVER. I WILL GET MYSELF BACK UP THERE. I PROMISE THAT TILL THIS DAY ON, I WILL HELP F.E.A.R. I WILL LEAD THOSE LOWER RANKS TO VICTORY. AND WE WILL CRUSH WHOMEVER STEPS IN OUR WAY (Except allies.)!! THANK YOU F.E.A.R. THANK YOU FOR ACCEPTING ME. :] |
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mariopoi
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rolliply
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| 03 Feb 2012 03:05 PM |
| Need to make longer, but. KK |
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| 03 Feb 2012 03:12 PM |
Honestly... Im going to use Constructive Criticism here...
This was not too good of a Speech.
From what I read, its basically you joining FEAR, And you wanting to become a Colonel.
The Caps was a big turn-off, As well. They show your trying to make that part be noticed, Yes. But they are also showing that you dont have the proper grammar. Powerful words stick out better then Cap'd or Blod letters.
If you put more time into this speech, It would be a lot better. Everyone has potential, And I know you are no different, but this speech did not even meet Qualification to be a speech in General.
It was over all to me, Unappealing to Read due to the fact it was not well written. My best bet was you made it as you went, Then posted it right away Without Re-Reading at least 3 times to make sure it was doable.
And there are no Colonel Elections right now. Its just bold fact. People are spreading Rumors, And maybe you got caught in one. But there is no Elections as of right now. But that shouldn't stop you from Pre-Writing your General Speech. You just need to keep it safe, Somewhere.
Hope this helps. |
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luniso
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| 03 Feb 2012 06:20 PM |
| I know... I didn't put much effort i was just bored and it seemed pretty epic and stuff when i said it outloud. :P |
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| 03 Feb 2012 06:27 PM |
Lun, Nice Speech but spread it out. More detail....It's basically you Joining FEAR and wanting to become General (Colonel)
More Detail how you are trying to get it....You need some people to back up with your side. |
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| 03 Feb 2012 06:33 PM |
I LOVE, how you are making a COL speech,
WHEN WE ARE NOT HAVING THEM.
>.>
~FEAR Honors Replica Marines A.Colonel Colonel IAF~ |
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| 03 Feb 2012 10:24 PM |
| What I am about to say is totally un-related to this topic.I was patrolling fort alinor.All of a sudden raiders came.There was only five of us and we did our best.With one final effort I went down that hill and killed all the raiders.With my kills at that point exceeding ten, they started leaving (after they talked trash to us).By the end me and one other person were left.I felt good.For that I think I should get promoted.*side note*Some bone head on one of the forums i was looking at said the wars never end. im pretty sure i dont need to explain to him the whole concept |
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luniso
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| Joined: 10 Jun 2011 |
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| 05 Feb 2012 09:13 AM |
| ._. Like i said, i was bored. I wanted to do something FEAR related.... |
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