lordneo
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| 20 Jan 2012 05:07 PM |
Teacher: We're doing narrative stories! Make a gripping opening!
-10 minutes later-
Time's up! [MYNAMEHERE], Please tell us yours?
Me: Miss, I don't want to...
Teacher: DO IT.
Me: "This must be it." I muttered as I folded up my map. I had traveled the world for these artifacts, and by god, I shall find them. I check the ruinous, vine-ridden doors of the crypt. No secret buttons. The door's lever was broken by weathering and age, but I managed to get it. The crypt's doors crumbled open. The stench of rotting corpses whafted from the door. I tried to hold in my wretching as I walked in, readying my sword.
Teacher: THAT'S DESCRPTIVE.
-Everyone giving me an odd look- |
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lordneo
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| 20 Jan 2012 05:11 PM |
At least I put effort into it. ¬_¬ |
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koopaNGC
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masterx
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| 20 Jan 2012 05:17 PM |
nice except for the part that the corpses smelled if the crypt was crumbling, the corpses would be skeletons, if not horribly decayed skeletons |
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lordneo
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| 20 Jan 2012 05:18 PM |
@Master
I don't think they had air ventilation back then. The stench would have stayed in. |
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masterx
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| 20 Jan 2012 05:20 PM |
hmm i think the miasma would eventually go away unless the room was airtight but the air would be incredibly stale |
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lion9031
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| 20 Jan 2012 05:21 PM |
>Narritive
obvious elementary student is obvious |
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lordneo
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| 20 Jan 2012 05:22 PM |
@Lion
College. I believe that is High school for you americans.
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lion9031
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masterx
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| 20 Jan 2012 05:23 PM |
what is english (guessing) college, if 'college' is the equivalent of high school and it's good to review |
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| 20 Jan 2012 05:24 PM |
once in english i had to comment on the symbolism of rap
it was the worst class ever especially because it cant symbolize what it actually said
and then we had to see the music video of it and then teacher was like "you all were wrong it actually was what it said" |
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masterx
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| 20 Jan 2012 05:27 PM |
@boeing717
that is amazing
this year i did a report on linus torvalds everyone started freaking out when i said he was a hacker |
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lordneo
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| 20 Jan 2012 05:28 PM |
We're studying how a good narrative can really grip a reader.
Basically it's advanced work I did before
But I'm Year/Grade 10. HOW IS THIS POSSIBRU. |
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