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| 15 Apr 2011 02:29 PM |
Chapter 1 The plane and the mountain.
Durring the ides of March, while there was still snow up in this northern state, a plane, worn and old, most likely older than you, glided over Saddleback Mountain. Inside the cockpit, "Tiny Dancer" came on. You could hardly hear it over the noise from inside the plane. The chaperone, MSE6, was arguing with a girl about her attire. MSE6 complained that her pants were too short, and the girl was saying that they were past her hands. Outside, I could see for miles, even without my glasses. The trees, carefully sculpted out of the ice blanketing the mountain, glistend in the bright sunlight. The pines, dressed in a lush deep green, stretched on forever, as the mountain hooked arround them. The piercing blue sky was dotted with a few lazy white clouds, drifting along without a care in the world.
As I beckened for Tazard to come see, MSE6's temper blew, and she smacked Aderessa in the face with her hammer. Aderessa's bedangle fell off, and she bent down to pick it up just as the hammer skidded over her hair. It thudded against the plane, and there was a sickening crack, as the plane flew through many colors, and ultimately dissapeared. We all fell, the ground hurtling towards us, the trees no longer things of beauty, but deathly spikes standing at attention, ready to disembowl us all. |
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| 15 Apr 2011 02:33 PM |
...MUST... ...FIND... ...GRAMMAR... ...ERROR... |
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ZACKBOT
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| 15 Apr 2011 02:39 PM |
I can find grammar errors easily.
Look:
> Inside the cockpit, "Tiny Dancer"
>"Tiny Dancer"
Corrected: "Tiny Dancer," |
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GME123
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| 15 Apr 2011 02:41 PM |
| Sounds awesome. Am I on it? :DD |
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| 15 Apr 2011 03:14 PM |
Chapter 2 Survivors?
My eyes fluttered open to a dark, red sky. The ground below me was no longer snowcovered, but was now cobblestone. It wasn't a road, unless this road was very short and wide. Next to me, MSE6 clutched the handle of her banhammer. On my other side, Geri woke up, and something was obviously wrong, because she wasn't talking like geri.
What came out of geri wasn't something I've heard before. It was unmistakeably english, but it had such a thick accent, I couldn't even place it. All I could make out was "Welcome ... come to ... of ... broke ... locks ... with ... alive ... everyone ... trapped forever ... ". Geri sank back down, and suddenly everyone was awake. Everyone looked fine, save Aderessa, whose hair was singed from the ban hammer.
Several members of OT had sever amnesia. MSE6, Tazard, Fastlane, doremi, and Microchip were all unable to recall anything, but their name and the fact they were an OTer.
We walked down the cobblestone, and realized that it didn't go very far. About 20 feet and it became a severe chasm. This was true in all directions. Then, Fuzzyperson found the answer. |
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patysr1
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| 15 Apr 2011 03:18 PM |
I will come into the story. As Patysr1 wakes up, he notices that Aderessa is still laying on the ground. "Oh god. I knew we should have booked a morning flight." Patysr1 tries to wake Aderessa up. |
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| 15 Apr 2011 03:20 PM |
| Blacksite2217 awakens and loudly utters "Beavers and ducks" out of a minor epileptic siezure. |
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| 15 Apr 2011 03:24 PM |
| Ban land where you landed? |
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| 16 Jan 2012 06:42 PM |
Chapter 3
Fuzzyperson's head was all that was visible. When we got closer, we could see her standing on a dark, black smokey blob, almost cloud-like, but darker than the darkest storm. WOOSH! She sped away from us at speeds that most people have never gone in their lives. Soon, she was out of sight. Up came the next cloud. We climbed in, and sped off to where fuzzyperson went.
When we arrived, fuzzyperson was nowhere to be seen. Puffyperson was scared that her sister had died or something. Suddenly, a great big voice drowned out the grotesque wailing from Puffy.
The voice spoke, "Those who wish to enter, be warned. If you don't make it out by the time sun has risen, you'll be here forever."
We talked among ourselves for a while, and then decided that we need to go in in order to escape, and save Fluffy. We stepped over the threshold of the cave that would be our proving-grounds to escape. After entering the cave, the opening shut, leaving us in the dark. |
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| 20 Jan 2012 11:22 PM |
I get to be part of the rescue team, If it becomes relevant to the story
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