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| 31 Dec 2011 06:35 PM |
The backstory:you were on a mission in the alantic ocean.the submarine crashed into a underwater cave.water is seeping in through a crack. There is a hour of air left. Theres 4 air tanks.5 of you.
Rules:no spamming saying:i tak a msskale asd gt th the surcake(i take a missile and go to the surface)i worked hard on this X( Work together No romance Have fun
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Name: A.ge: G3nder: Job(mechcanic,scientist,etc..) Inventory(knife,radio,etc..)
Have fun... And i worked hard on this... Part 2 will have the island in it |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:37 PM |
Too little plot, lacks unoriginality...
nope.avi |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:38 PM |
Name:Marcus petson A.ge:26 G3nder:M Job:mechcanic Inventory:radio,hatchet |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:39 PM |
| Assassin...LOLWUT???its original |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:41 PM |
Pfft.
'Yu crsh n an island, srvive, hav fUn! lolololo ;))!'
Been done a thousand times.
Start making a real roleplay, one that has a decent backstory and detail. |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:41 PM |
| =/.\= Assassin's right. Describe the sub, tell us some backstory for crying out loud! |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:44 PM |
| You worked hard on this? Look at some of the other posts they are 100's of times bigger than this! |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:45 PM |
| Backstory x(:you were in a sub and it crashed into a underwater cave,the sub has 2 exits..one on the floor and one on the roof.there is in a hour of air left. Four air tanks. Five people.you are 167M underwater.you need to get to the surface |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:46 PM |
| Yeah i did work hard on dis... Thinking of a plot,etc.. |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:48 PM |
| Sigh.... Describe the Submarine. |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:48 PM |
I reworked your story:
Lost. Gone forever. You were part of an advanced team, manning a battle submarine on a highly classified operation. One night, the radar was jammed by an unknown source, as you scrambled to identify the source of the jam and whatever may lay ahead, you found yourself spiraling into oblivion. Well, more like a massive cave in a coral reef. It's been several hours since you fell. A leak has sprung, and water slowly fills your doomed vessel.. There is a hour of air left, not to mention the fact that one of the precious tanks of air had been ruptured during the crash. 4 tanks now remain, whilst five of the team struggle to hold onto life... |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:48 PM |
| Be more descriptive in general. That's all I gotta say. |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:50 PM |
| There you go! You even have some inspiration for your plot! Now get to work :o |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:50 PM |
| I did...here:the sub is a 2005 model S very cramped inisde.it has 2 main entrances, one on the floor the other on the roof,1 emergancy hatch at the back.does not have backup power sources.if it hits something then it turns off |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:51 PM |
| My fingers become very cramped working on a ipad...... |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:52 PM |
| And fix your grammar. If you don't type with proper grammar, it can't be considered English. |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:53 PM |
| There... now were getting somewhere! :D |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:55 PM |
| My fingers get annoyed writing on a ipad...dang! |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:55 PM |
| Then don't type on an Ipad???? |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:56 PM |
| *off to work on a better story!! I just need to wait intil i get to a computer |
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| 31 Dec 2011 06:56 PM |
| Assassin...i would but im on vaction so i dont have access to a computer |
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| 31 Dec 2011 07:00 PM |
| Yep lol im going home in 2 days then i will work on a great story |
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