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| 20 Dec 2011 09:15 PM |
I long to hear the soft whispering of the leaves in the trees. Though I know only a miracle can make it a reality, I will keep that thought as close to my heart as I can. Napoleon has always be suspicious to where I came from, and it will hopefully never dawn on that stupid old tabby. But I’m not sure it will be long, considering how much I’ve slipped talking about Snowflight and Emeraldgaze. There has never been a day since I was abducted by the twoleg kit that I haven’t thought about them. While gazing at the stars tonight, I figure that it might be to late. If they had come for me, they would have come suns ago… *** I leaped up onto the high ledge and yowled, “All cats old enough to catch their own prey gather around the high ledge for a clan meeting!” I watched as cats halted, their ears erect. I loved the feeling of superior power when I stand tall here, the wind on my muzzle. But I started to fume when nobody obeyed my order. How could they not listen to me, Breezestar? I prodded the rock angrily. Now when I repeated it, I got eyes, and a shriek. The noise came from a dark tabby she-cat, who scrambled up the pile of rocks leading to the high ledge. “Breezekit! Get down from there that instant!” I hung my small striped head and slunk down to her. She furiously licked me and carried me the rest of the way down by my scruff. I heard her hiss into my ear, “What were you thinking? If you were to fall you would have been crowfood! Stay in the Nursery for the rest of the day.” I padded to the Nursery self consciously, and I put my muzzle on my paws. Emeraldkit and Snowkit bounded over. “What happened?” they mewed in unison. “Just leave me alone for now. I’ll tell you later.” I grumbled. As they left I heard them whisper, presumably about me. I wanted to vanish into the slight fog hanging in the air. I let a loud sigh slip past my lips, and decided to think. About what would happen if I had tripped and fallen off the high ledge, would I have been able to see the sun shine again? I dismissed the depressing thought, and dozed off to pass the time. I dreamed of a russet-colored tabby, sour as mouse bile. He cuffed my ears, causing a nick and a small stream of blood down my cheek. “That does it!” I screeched. I flipped and pinned the cat, and scratched him, leaving a deep wound on his flank. He went limp, but I knew not to fall for that trick. I let go ever so slightly, still alert, waiting for him to pounce. That time never came… |
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Hyphalax
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| 20 Dec 2011 09:16 PM |
furries
the door is that way |
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| 20 Dec 2011 09:23 PM |
THESE STORIES MADE MY BRAIN MELT FROM STUPIDITY |
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Hyphalax
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| 20 Dec 2011 09:23 PM |
| I keep waiting for the easily aggravated people to show up, and flame the life out of you. |
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Hyphalax
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| 21 Dec 2011 03:13 PM |
| You realize I'm only 10, right? And haters make me stronger. |
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| 21 Dec 2011 08:07 PM |
| And, who are you 3, anyways? The only person I know on this wall is xXSpottedheartXx. |
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| 21 Dec 2011 08:08 PM |
Welcome to OT, newfrag.
um... RP is that way |
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| 21 Dec 2011 08:10 PM |
"Get down from there >that< instant!"
'This' instant is more commonly accepted. Otherwise, from what I can see, this is pretty nice Warriors-style writing.
"I have to disagree; God is Dan tier. NOT the other way around." |
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| 21 Dec 2011 08:13 PM |
| Pretty good for a ten year old:P |
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| 21 Dec 2011 08:50 PM |
| I didn't really revise, but thanks for telling me. The 'Be' in one of the first sentences is suppose to be "been", too. |
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| 21 Dec 2011 09:00 PM |
| And, Trollers on this page, I made a poem for you. I don't expect good comments, well, because you are trollers. |
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StuntMike
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| 21 Dec 2011 09:02 PM |
| Who are YOU? xD This is my Forum... :3 |
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| 21 Dec 2011 09:03 PM |
| warriors is written in 3rd person view |
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| 21 Dec 2011 09:03 PM |
@Cinna Yeah. That doesn't mean she can't write it in 1st. c: |
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Kaboogles
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| 21 Dec 2011 09:05 PM |
furries aint allowed here
only bronies |
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| 21 Dec 2011 09:07 PM |
@polarus
that's not how you do it, most fans that write about a book try to make it as similar as possible. |
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| 21 Dec 2011 09:27 PM |
Who says i'm not different? >:U
xD I told you guys, I didn't really pay attention. But yes, this is purposely in the first person. T.T |
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| 21 Dec 2011 09:29 PM |
| holy bananas get the hint we don't like furries here go hell and then go to rp forum |
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| 21 Dec 2011 09:30 PM |
| All of the trollers on this wall;most of you, go to my blurb and see my other forum. That is what I think of you, 'kay? |
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| 24 Dec 2011 11:14 AM |
| This is very good. I'm a author myself(Trying to get the stupid Harper Collines to accept my books!). I love the description in this, though it could use a little editing though |
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DOOMILES
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| 24 Dec 2011 11:19 AM |
WE WANT SCALIES!
Christmas lizards always bring joy! (well, all lizards do!) |
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