generic image
Processing...
  • Games
  • Catalog
  • Develop
  • Robux
  • Search in Players
  • Search in Games
  • Search in Catalog
  • Search in Groups
  • Search in Library
  • Log In
  • Sign Up
  • Games
  • Catalog
  • Develop
  • Robux
   
ROBLOX Forum » Movies/TV/Books
Home Search
 

Re: teen readers and writers!

Previous Thread :: Next Thread 
newwishful is not online. newwishful
Joined: 15 Oct 2010
Total Posts: 107
12 Nov 2011 11:36 PM
this is a peice of what i am doing
I ran through the Alleys of the Town my feet hurt but I had to keep running the guards behind me were carrying swords and catching up, the look in there eyes meant they were going to surely kill me. I had no idea what had happened on the way home from the market. I passed out and woke up I felt so warm warmer than I was when i had passed out. My eyes opened and I saw paws! Big white paws were my hands should be! I sat up and walked in front of a stack of shiny tin cans “WWAAAA!” in the cans I saw a White Tiger. I stumbled back wards and nocked over some trash cans. A group of guards heard them and walked towards the noise. I started to run and somehow turned back into a human I felt my self all over “Oh God why do I have ANIMAL EARS” I felt my behind “Tail I have a tail!” from behind I heard one of the guards yell “ Get back you Morpher!” “Morpher? Whats a morpher?” I thought to myself. I saw a girl with black cat ears on her head and a long black tail.
“This way!” she hollard she grabed my hand and we started running towards a brick wall! “Trust me!” she said I said back “Do I have a choice?” “Not really!” I covered my face but found myself in a room of kids with animal parts. “What the......” the room was full of colorful curtains and floating lights.”Welcome to Home For The Morphers or the HFTM” said the girl I stood there in aw “my name is May.” I stammered out my name “Sapphire. Sapphire my name is Sapphire.” “MAY!” Hollord a girl with fox ears and tail. “Hello Ginger. Can I help you?” “Yes I need you t- who is this?” “Somebody I just saved. That's all.” “Whats your name new comer?” I wanted to seem not so well scared “Sapphire Stone” “What is your stone anyway?” asked May “Stone?” “Oh you have no idea what is going on do you?” “Um no.” Ginger sighed “Take her to the leaders.” “Okay” We walked for a lil while then realized I know idea who these Leaders were “Who are the leaders?” “It’s in the name they are the 4 leaders of the Morphers. They will tell everything” We came to a door it was huge. “Enter.” said a voice on the inside the large door opened and four elderly people sat in thrones (at least I think they were thrones) “May why have you brought us this pitiful looking child?” Something boiled up inside me “I am not pitiful looking! I am tired from running 7 blocks!” “You Dare speak to us this way!” “Sapphire stand down!” I stepped back “I am sorry.” “I have brought her to you so you can tell her her gift details.” “Yes I see. Lily please come and tell us.” A young woman walked in the room from behind curtains “May I see your hands please sweet heart?” her sweet green eyes looked at me with love and I felt good all over. “Yes here you go.” I held my grumby hand out I felt ashamed she ran her smooth hands across mine “I am going to look into your memories now ok?” “Only look at what you need to look at.” “Okay I promise” She touched my head gently Then my hole body went numb and my hole lit up and Lily fell backwards then I felt my body feeling come back “Miss Lily! I am so sorry are you okay?” “Yes dear I am fine now know who you are! You are Sapphire!” “Ya I know that.” “No no dear your stone is Sapphire and your animal is Tiger” “Now May Sapphire leave us!” on of them held out there hand and we were shoved bye a gust of wind out of the room.


“Wake up time for class!” said May “Class?” “Ya just come on!” I found my self running with my new friend to “class” We ran through a door and I found myself in the woods with many other kids. A tall woman with eagle wings came in “Alright I am going to Point at you and then you tell me your name and your animal stone.” she started to point “Lilac Cheetah, Ruby.” “Damian Snake, Topaz.” “Juliet Polar bear, Amethyst.” “Charles Grayhound, Diamond.” “Zue Zue Wolf, Garnet.” after a lil while she got to me and May “May Panther, Aquamarine.” “Sapphire Tiger, Sapphire.” “Amber, Hawk Amber” “Terrance, Wolf Topaz” She pointed at lil girl she did not speak. “Um this is my little sister Rose, Ruby Loin. And I am Lily Cheetah, Ruby.”
The teacher looked happy and spoke “Alright time to pair you up with opponent. Ginger and Sapphire.” she kept reading on but I did not listen I only looked at Ginger in horror. She wanted me to fight her!? I did not even know how to fight much less turn into an animal. “Whats the matter scared?” “No!” “Alright you two time to fight.”
Report Abuse
DragonDestroyer13 is not online. DragonDestroyer13
Joined: 07 Nov 2010
Total Posts: 172
13 Nov 2011 12:36 AM
nice!!
Report Abuse
newwishful is not online. newwishful
Joined: 15 Oct 2010
Total Posts: 107
13 Nov 2011 08:47 PM
THX! are you a writer!?
Report Abuse
DragonDestroyer13 is not online. DragonDestroyer13
Joined: 07 Nov 2010
Total Posts: 172
14 Nov 2011 06:00 PM
yes
Report Abuse
DragonDestroyer13 is not online. DragonDestroyer13
Joined: 07 Nov 2010
Total Posts: 172
20 Nov 2011 11:48 PM
I trying to write a book
Report Abuse
newwishful is not online. newwishful
Joined: 15 Oct 2010
Total Posts: 107
21 Nov 2011 05:49 PM
Hmm so am i just wait till you here the next part!
Report Abuse
newwishful is not online. newwishful
Joined: 15 Oct 2010
Total Posts: 107
22 Nov 2011 08:58 AM
“Wait what?” Ginger smiles slightly and walks like a super model in to the center of the woods. “May I have know idea how to turn into an animal much less fight!” “Sapphire if you would please come out to the ring.” “coming..... I guess” I step out of the safety of my new found friend. A red mist surrounded Ginger and when it was gone there was a fox were Ginger should be “Well then come on morph!” the fox yelled “I guess that is Ginger and outta morph what that is.” I say under my breath. I stand on the other side of the ring. I thought about the animal I was and blue mist surrounded me. I felt so so powerful! I heard gasps from the kids behind me. Then I realized I had been scared for no reason! I was powerful! Then I found myself in animal form agian. Ginger was running fast towards me! My body went numb and I passed out or so I thought..... My body was moving but could not see anything and I heard “Fire Breath!” “Shield of power!” Nine tail fire!” “HA! Sapphire blade!” “aggg!” “Ruby armor!” “Sapphire Force!” “aaaaaaa!” Ginger sounded really hurt! “Sapphire thats enough!” but I still felt power surging through my body. “Sapphire stand down!” “aaaaaa! Make her stop!” I Pushed myself through whatever was blocking me. Blue mist came back lay on the ground. Ginger was brused badly and had A cut on her hip.... “Sapphire are you ok?” said May my vision just coming agian. “I-I think so...”
Report Abuse
DragonDestroyer13 is not online. DragonDestroyer13
Joined: 07 Nov 2010
Total Posts: 172
23 Nov 2011 08:19 PM
XD NICE ONE
Report Abuse
newwishful is not online. newwishful
Joined: 15 Oct 2010
Total Posts: 107
23 Nov 2011 08:32 PM
lol i am have an rpg thread based on this book if you wanna join it would be great!!!
Report Abuse
emmabell32 is not online. emmabell32
Joined: 27 Apr 2011
Total Posts: 19
03 Dec 2011 08:47 AM
Wow, newwishful. I was looking through the book fourms and recgonized your name! But that was really nice! :D
Report Abuse
popstarzoe is not online. popstarzoe
Joined: 31 Aug 2009
Total Posts: 753
03 Dec 2011 09:54 AM
Like it! I'm writing a book myself (Same forum, look for a thread that says Crystals (Read before you judge!!!)) I would appreciate if you could look at it and help me.
Report Abuse
newwishful is not online. newwishful
Joined: 15 Oct 2010
Total Posts: 107
03 Dec 2011 04:01 PM
OMG IT WILL NOTN LET ME POST THE NEXT PART! >O
Report Abuse
popstarzoe is not online. popstarzoe
Joined: 31 Aug 2009
Total Posts: 753
18 Dec 2011 12:31 PM
SAME HERE! I made myself a website for it (not done yet) and the link:
htt p: / /c r ys talseries. w e b s. c o m /
Remove the spaces.
Report Abuse
mageofpower is not online. mageofpower
Top 100 Poster
Joined: 01 Feb 2009
Total Posts: 43654
18 Dec 2011 12:35 PM
It's kinda hard to read giant text walls.
Report Abuse
XxDreamXx is not online. XxDreamXx
Joined: 10 Apr 2010
Total Posts: 1138
18 Dec 2011 01:07 PM
Nice story line. :)
Report Abuse
newwishful is not online. newwishful
Joined: 15 Oct 2010
Total Posts: 107
18 Dec 2011 01:15 PM
Thx Emma!
Report Abuse
newwishful is not online. newwishful
Joined: 15 Oct 2010
Total Posts: 107
18 Dec 2011 01:17 PM
Thx so much guys but IT WILL NOT LEME POST THE NEXT PRT mssg me if you want it........
Report Abuse
EliteSlash77 is not online. EliteSlash77
Joined: 29 Jun 2011
Total Posts: 3506
18 Dec 2011 05:21 PM
nice story and here is part of my horror novel i am writing :http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=57649295 read it if you dare! >:3
Report Abuse
EliteSlash77 is not online. EliteSlash77
Joined: 29 Jun 2011
Total Posts: 3506
18 Dec 2011 05:22 PM
another thing i am writing :http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=57497364 read if you like action
Report Abuse
iguanazor is not online. iguanazor
Joined: 07 Sep 2008
Total Posts: 31462
18 Dec 2011 07:41 PM
I don't have time to read this all, but I can say that it needs improvement.

As of right now, sentences are either too long or too short. You also either lack detail or add too much.

I'll probably be able to read over it later today or maybe tomorrow, and then I will offer advice.
Report Abuse
EliteSlash77 is not online. EliteSlash77
Joined: 29 Jun 2011
Total Posts: 3506
19 Dec 2011 04:17 PM
who me?
Report Abuse
newwishful is not online. newwishful
Joined: 15 Oct 2010
Total Posts: 107
05 Jan 2012 10:11 AM
Really? Man it's un edited! And to much detail really? and not enough? what are a book reviewer?
Report Abuse
EliteSlash77 is not online. EliteSlash77
Joined: 29 Jun 2011
Total Posts: 3506
06 Jan 2012 04:41 PM
... Stop commenting on my stuff
Report Abuse
pmcdonough is not online. pmcdonough
Joined: 04 Mar 2011
Total Posts: 3638
06 Jan 2012 05:36 PM
im making a book about a person who was (not gunna tell u u need to read it its called second chanse the thread is called secondchanse (just a book) )



can u help me with advise? i need to stop advisning people and get advise ym self
Report Abuse
newwishful is not online. newwishful
Joined: 15 Oct 2010
Total Posts: 107
06 Jan 2012 08:59 PM
Sure i will help anyone who needs it! x3 I feel so EPIC being asked advice! x3
Report Abuse
Previous Thread :: Next Thread 
Page 1 of 1
 
 
ROBLOX Forum » Movies/TV/Books
   
 
   
  • About Us
  • Jobs
  • Blog
  • Parents
  • Help
  • Terms
  • Privacy

©2017 Roblox Corporation. Roblox, the Roblox logo, Robux, Bloxy, and Powering Imagination are among our registered and unregistered trademarks in the U.S. and other countries.



Progress
Starting Roblox...
Connecting to Players...
R R

Roblox is now loading. Get ready to play!

R R

You're moments away from getting into the game!

Click here for help

Check Remember my choice and click Launch Application in the dialog box above to join games faster in the future!

Gameplay sponsored by:
Loading 0% - Starting game...
Get more with Builders Club! Join Builders Club
Choose Your Avatar
I have an account
generic image