omzig
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:28 PM |
Micah’s eyes slowly opened as a light shined on his skin. His cheek was pressed against a cold concrete tile. The world around him was slightly blurry, but that only lasted for a few seconds. Once his eyes cleared up, he saw where he was. Some sort of warehouse that appeared to no longer be in use. How strange. Why would he fall asleep in a place like that? He sat up and peered his head around to see if anyone was with him. There was no one in sight. As he tried to stand, he realized how sore his back was. “Concrete. Not the best material to sleep on,” he said to himself. His hands grasped his spinal cord, and pushed out releasing an internal crack. “I guess I’ll drive home,” Micah thought to himself. “Wait do I even have a car? Or even a house?” At that point, Micah realized his memory had been shaken. He remembered nothing accept his name; Micah Ericksen
Whataya think?
Should I continue?
And if so, what would you like for a title? |
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jubguy3
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:29 PM |
I just finished one that was 11 pages on 12 font times new roman very little spaces, 24917 characters, 5697 words. UJELLY!!?!? |
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:30 PM |
Cool. Possible title: Memory Glitch |
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omzig
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:30 PM |
I would like input on my book. I'm glad to hear about yours, but yeah. |
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jubguy3
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:30 PM |
| But yes, I think you should continue. |
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omzig
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:31 PM |
| Errr. Glitch seems sort of wierd. Memory something might work. But it doesn't have to have memory. |
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:31 PM |
Sleeping on concrete does that. I hate it when that happens!
~I was the one who wrote gullible on the ceiling.~ |
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jubguy3
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:32 PM |
Use a thesaurus lemme go check actually |
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omzig
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:32 PM |
Lol. I liked that part. I want the book to be serious, but I want the characters to have an actuall personality. So I think Micah will be funny. |
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jubguy3
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:33 PM |
Hope this helped Main Entry: glitch [glich] Show IPA Part of Speech: noun Definition: error Synonyms: bug*, defect, flaw, hitch, malfunction, misfire, mishap, problem, setback, snafu, snag, something wrong |
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omzig
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:35 PM |
I have some synonyms.
bug*, defect, flaw, hitch, malfunction, misfire, mishap, problem, setback, snafu, snag, something wrong
Errr. Don't know if any of those will work either.
Except "Memory Problem".
Loljk. |
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omzig
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:35 PM |
Lol.
We both went to "http://thesaurus.com/browse/Glitch" |
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:38 PM |
Then, a man appeared in front of Micah. "Who are you?" he asked. The man replied, "I am the one you seek." "What does that mean?" asked Micah. The man said, "Never you mind now, you have much to learn. What I hear you have lost your memory." Micah replied, "It appears I have, how can you help me?" "Well, first, let's get you come food." sad the man.
~ KS1 ~ |
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omzig
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:42 PM |
Alright. That's awesome!
Thanks for the help.
But who should the man be in the end?
Jesus? Because he sure does talk like him. |
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:45 PM |
Wrong, it's an image of his father, it's the last person he remembers, but he's not sure who he is.
~ KS1 ~ |
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omzig
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:47 PM |
An image?
I was thinking more along the lines of... Someone real.
Because how will an image get him food?
Maybe it is his father?
Any thoughts? |
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:49 PM |
He's had memory loss, he doesn't know what's going on. The image of his father shows him a river nearby for water, and gives him food. They sit down and talk about the past, and learns about his siblings. Then, he starts his journey on trying to recover his memory.
~ KS1 ~ |
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sparks999
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:49 PM |
| Hm.. Micah.. There's a kid in my class named Micah. Weird. |
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xpsm1530
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:51 PM |
A long to his memory loss, he's gone kind of crazy and is seeing the image.
~ KS1 ~ |
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RoAnt
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:52 PM |
Continue please.
-The RT Ant |
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omzig
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| 07 Nov 2011 09:52 PM |
Errr.. What era does this take place in?
Because I'm trying to see if it should be like ancient times, with the Greek and whatnot, or if it should be modern.
If it's ancient, I need to change the warehouse thing.
And also, I get the image thing now. I'll put it to use. |
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