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BrianK2355 is not online. BrianK2355
Joined: 13 Mar 2008
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05 Oct 2011 03:26 PM
When We Rise Again.


[Chapter 1: Silence]

Silence. It lingers over you during the night. It keeps us calm. But for me? It was different.

Silence was what I heard as I laid there on the ground next to the red lakes of my fellow soldiers. Silence was the crackling of the fire engulfing the battlefield. Silence was the shadows of debris falling before me. I saw everything of what happened. The great war was over. All has ended. My mind, in dead silence. My life was running off into the distance.

Once, I was the great leader of great army, and now I was one of them, the dead bodies of my own men scattered across the wasteland. For many months, the great super clans have prospered in peace, but it took only a few days for everything to fall apart.

I remembered a few months back, rumors have spread of a secret organization called the Order. I ignored those rumors, thinking that it was myth or legend, but I knew I had made a mistake. As I recalled all of my memories, I knew that my story had to be told.


[Chapter 2: Prosperity] Coming Soon.


~BrianK2355~
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Lissitski is not online. Lissitski
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05 Oct 2011 03:27 PM
Nice.
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BrianK2355 is not online. BrianK2355
Joined: 13 Mar 2008
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05 Oct 2011 03:27 PM
This is my intro for my new Story: When We Rise Again.

I will be making more chapters very soon! Give me some feedback!
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KingKrodon is not online. KingKrodon
Joined: 23 Oct 2008
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05 Oct 2011 03:27 PM
Nice!
Can I be in it? As a UAF or a loner/Order guy/anything else is fine.
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BrianK2355 is not online. BrianK2355
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05 Oct 2011 03:28 PM
Probably I'll add you.
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CVW is not online. CVW
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05 Oct 2011 03:30 PM
Nice story, keep it up.
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BrianK2355 is not online. BrianK2355
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05 Oct 2011 04:00 PM
[Chapter 2: Prosperity]

There was a great celebration happening at the FEAR Rally Point. FEAR members were waiting to see Commander Sonic make his speech to all of FEAR. I sat in the backseat of a humvee being escorted to the Rally Point.

Right next to me was Sonic, in his personal jacket with sunglasses covering up his eyes. The sun was shining through the windows as I watched the crowd cheer outside. After Sonic looked around the humvee, he finally faced towards me. I will never forget his words.

“Brian, when I am gone, my wealth and power will be passed down to you. For you have been a friend to me since the beginning” he said. “I care more about my FEAR members than all the money in the world. Please keep them safe. They will need you. What you do will make a difference for FEAR.”

I nodded. I knew my duties as a FEAR leader. I knew that FEAR would be in my control when Sonic leaves. I knew my responsibility.

The humvee stopped. Sonic stepped out of the humvee while I followed right beside him. We both went down a pathway with two lines of crowds on our left and right. Sonic waved at the cheering crowd as he walked down the path. As we reached the stairs, I shook hands with some of the generals standing at the stairway. Some thanked me, and some greeted me.

Sonic finally arrived at the podium. His sunglasses shined in the sunlight above. I stood right behind him as the huge crowd clapped and cheered for Sonic to say his first words.

But when Sonic was about to say his first words into the microphone, something went terribly wrong.

The whole world fell to its knees…

[Chapter 3: Trembling] Coming Soon...

~BrianK2355~
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DestinySword is not online. DestinySword
Joined: 23 Jan 2010
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05 Oct 2011 04:02 PM
Goodie. I like da title.

WHEN WE RISE AGAIN, OH! WHEN WE RISE AGAIN, OH! WHEN WE RISE AGAIN, YEAH! WHEN WE RISE AGAIN, TOTALLY!

Put me in story pl0x I'm a FEAR Officer put me in it pl0x.

WHEN WE RISE AGAIIIIIIIIIIIIIIN
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KingKrodon is not online. KingKrodon
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05 Oct 2011 04:02 PM
Cliffhanger.
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slasher3499 is not online. slasher3499
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05 Oct 2011 04:07 PM
Great so far. Are you adding anyone? As in taking in requests?
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BrianK2355 is not online. BrianK2355
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05 Oct 2011 04:09 PM
Probably...probably not.


I'm taking a lot of significant people.
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slasher3499 is not online. slasher3499
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05 Oct 2011 04:13 PM
Mmk, Just wondering.
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BrianK2355 is not online. BrianK2355
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05 Oct 2011 04:28 PM
bump bump
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BrianK2355 is not online. BrianK2355
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05 Oct 2011 04:37 PM
BUMMMP need feedback.
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JasonIIII is not online. JasonIIII
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05 Oct 2011 04:39 PM
Can't wait for chapter 2.
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iKeyloggz is not online. iKeyloggz
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05 Oct 2011 04:40 PM
Can I be in the story?

:]
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uk2kgreat55 is not online. uk2kgreat55
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05 Oct 2011 04:46 PM
Nice job Brian :D
Can I also be in teh storeh? I would be happeh if you would let meh :3
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robloxdude027 is not online. robloxdude027
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05 Oct 2011 04:46 PM
Great story. Keep it up!
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madlydavid252 is not online. madlydavid252
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05 Oct 2011 04:59 PM
How about soinc gets thretened by some vs troops hidden in the audiance then you take him to the safety of alinor where I help him from danger in my secret bunker under the main building.
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TheGreat1234 is not online. TheGreat1234
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05 Oct 2011 05:03 PM
Can I be in it?

I want to be a guy who stays alive throught many attacks then near the end gets killed off epicly by you.
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BrianK2355 is not online. BrianK2355
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05 Oct 2011 05:14 PM
Jason, I already posted chapter 2
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boby342 is not online. boby342
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05 Oct 2011 05:17 PM
Dude this is really good, I'll be posting mine soon.

~/APN Captain \~
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zach2222 is not online. zach2222
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05 Oct 2011 06:03 PM
Brian, I never post good comments about FEAR Stories, its all about war and dying. Yours though, I love your grammar, voice! Keep makin it bud.
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lejam7890 is not online. lejam7890
Joined: 04 Jun 2009
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05 Oct 2011 06:50 PM
Nice story! You should put me in one of the General spots. lol.
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tenniscat is not online. tenniscat
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05 Oct 2011 06:55 PM
Very nice, keep writing!

CLIFFHANGER.

I hate cliffhangers because it means I HAVE to read more. :c

But really nice job, keep it up!

-RAT Honors (blah blah) Marshal tenniscat
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