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| 17 Oct 2011 01:47 PM |
1802, industrial revolution era, city of Gelido in the UCR empire.
"Last night, at a time of about 2:30am, a feral nation citizen was found dead in the streets of Gelido. Killed by a clean shot to the head, by the doctors report, at point blank. 2 UCR citizens reported hearing a deafening gunshot, later on a flintlock pistol was found discarded in alley near by the scene. Feral nation ambassador; feral warlord Carotking has identified the body as feral nationalist LittledudeJ. He seemed angered, saying that this was the 11th body found dead by the UCR fanatics. It has not been discovered if this death is linked with the other murders caused by the rightly nicknamed "UCR fanatics". Officer Fiht345 has been assigned with investigating this murder" Senator Froast finished his report, sighing at the thought of having to walk to president TDfall's Gelido mansion, the thought of walking in that stinging rain and walking past the drunkards in the slums sickened him to the core. He envied council member Theredcoat, who had his own army of servants at his bidding. He picked up the vine walking stick and slid on his tophat and coat. He walked out of the door, getting greeted by a lovely wall of rain and cold.
Feral nation, city of Nighthawk.
Stickmasterluke went ruby red with anger on hearing the report that foot unit Jasonbomb7 told him. The foot unit squirmed under the glare of Stickmasterluke, wishing he hadn't been chosen to deliver the news. Another feral nation citizen, found dead by some pathetic UCR fanatic. Dark thoughts crawled into his mind, thinking that if they can't control their citizens, maybe we should discipline them... Stickmasterluke discarded the memory. Feral nation was a prosperous and large country, but UCR was an empire, scaling a small chunk of the world. It would be a hard war, with no advantages to it. But if it came to it, it would have to happen. The feral citizens would demand it, he knew it. "Send word that i, the founder of feral nation is coming to the UCR empire for a meeting, TDfall is expected to be there, Amura is coming with me, tell him first so he has time to prepare. Go foot unit, dismissed" "Yessir!" the keen foot unit replied, running out of the feral estate. Stickmasterluke lurched off to find a servant to send for the leaders and council members of the nation.
Intermediate some12 stalked the feral nation citizen through the streets of Orion, hand on his katana. It had been a gift from his father, who had got it from a wealthy country in the east. It had intricate designs on it, a sword of great quality. Swords were dying out, replaced with these little flintlock pistols and muskets and rifles, it had been like this for a few centuries, since gunpowder had started to been used effectively in the UCR empire. But Some12 preferred the sword, especially his katana, silent...deadly. He was about to give the blade of his gift to this feral nation rat.
END OF PART 1 If people enjoyed, i'll happily continue writing! I wanted to try a new-ish type of story, tell me if if worked..! Troll the thread if you wish, i know someone will. Its inevitable. But please leave feeback. |
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| 17 Oct 2011 01:51 PM |
| Well, that was intresting to read. Make more if you can, They're awesome. |
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| 17 Oct 2011 01:52 PM |
| I chose UCR and feral nation due to them being one of the first few groups being made. |
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| 17 Oct 2011 01:52 PM |
Epic though, more more
~VS, Third In Command~ |
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| 17 Oct 2011 01:53 PM |
| @Omar, I'll write part 2 tomorrow, and thanks :D. |
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kskid99
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Sorlor
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| 17 Oct 2011 01:55 PM |
Except, UCR and Feral Nation WEREN'T the two first clans to be made.
Please learn your facts.
You can say this in the story, provided it is now fictional. |
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| 17 Oct 2011 01:56 PM |
@Sorlor, ONE of the few first groups to be made, not THE first. Thanks anyway. |
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| 17 Oct 2011 01:57 PM |
| Good Story. This must be the only thing you've posted without more than one death... |
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| 17 Oct 2011 02:03 PM |
Nobody called 2nd hmm... I CALL 2nd
VS Captain |
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| 18 Oct 2011 02:43 AM |
3rd
It is very interesting to read it is great and nice grammar continue making more.
-VS Captain |
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| 18 Oct 2011 03:39 AM |
| Indeed epic stories you write Explicit. |
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poik12
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| 18 Oct 2011 03:43 AM |
DETECTIVE COLE PHELPS LAPD, WHAT HAVE YOU GOT?
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| 18 Oct 2011 09:46 AM |
| Thanks Opper, Tall, everyone for the positive feedpack ^-^. |
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EpicTwist
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| 18 Oct 2011 09:47 AM |
Murder murder murder murder murder murder... murder murder. ...murder murder. |
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teslobo
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| 18 Oct 2011 11:51 AM |
| ever thought of building gelido? |
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| 19 Oct 2011 09:44 AM |
| @Tes, Gelido is an UCR fort, i just made it into a fortified city for the purposes of the story. |
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| 15 Jan 2012 10:01 PM |
| It's a bit odd seeing this. |
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