rsmithnvm
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| 06 Oct 2011 06:35 PM |
[Before you read this, If you haven't read Chapter 6, Do it now. http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=55765923]
We flew in the gunship over Vaktus' War Zone, not far from Swampy Moon outpost. Fire blasted in the air, burning the oxygen. Death was all over the place, R.A.T and VAK were everywhere. But we weren't exactly going there, we were going to place that was filled with vents and was deathly cold. R.A.T and VAK scattered the place, not promising that alot of them are dead. - We arrived at the place, it was like a maze, just death everywhere. Rooms filled with blood, dead bodies sat against the ground, and layed on the wall. Blood dripping from there head, holes inside there body. Death was all around us, but couldn't promise that I wouldn't join them. -- "Ok, I've got a plan, It may sound crazy but have to." Javier said. "That is?" I asked. "Well, CT will be sitting on the other side which there are vents leading there. Vivex, Vextrus, and Xenondryyak. You'll be in the vents. Got it?" "Understood." Vivex said. Javier raised his hands and opened the vent, and grabbed us taking us straight in. "We will gather up at CT, and take him down," He said. "Awesome." Vivex told him. - He closed up the vent, and we crawled through the vents as quiet as possible. Are guns faced forwards, and spider webs and dust flew into our mouth. "..." I heard someone talking but couldn't hear it clear. "Hold on guys." I whispered. We came to a halt by a vent, and I looked down through the cracks of the vent. There stood R.A.T guns in their hands, they pointed them, and a bullet blasted. Javier and Zerrox blasted through the hall firing the guns, R.A.T hit the floor, faces pounding into the ground. - All the R.A.T were on the ground, and Javier came out of the hall dragging Zerrox. Bullets layed in him, blood coming out of his chest. Xenondryyak came up infront of me watching his bestest friend he's ever had die. I saw water come from the corner of his eyes. Blood came out of Zerrox's mouth, "G-g-g-good-bye, my friends." Zerrox said, and his soul traveled this dead maze, lost, and gone, forever. Javier stood over Zerrox, and Zerrox's eyes slowly closed. I looked over at Xenondryyak, and his eyes sparkeled with tears. - I looked at Xenondryyak, "We have to keep going, all that Zerrox wishes for is that we win this war, for all the ones we lost, Profit, Spargon, Zerrox."I whispered to him. - Xenondryyak started crawling through the vents without a peep. We were crawling through these vents for hours, until we finally reached a stop. The last vent, CT stood with a bunch of his men standing next to him. "We have to kill them, For Zerrox." Xenondryyak whispered to us. I crawled next to him, and quickly Xenondryyak turned around with a gun pointing at my head, he took of his outfit revealing a R.A.T uniform. - (If you wonder why I included this part, this is because Xenondryyak Xul is really in R.A.T now.) "Good work, Xenondryyak." CT said with a smile on his face. "You traitor." I told him. "What can you expect?" Xenondryyak said. I quickly kicked the vent and he fell. --- Xenondryyak quickly reacted and threw a grenade inside the vent. Vivex turned around and crawled fast, as did I, but the grenade pulled us back. It exploded, and the vent collapsed taking us down. My back hit the wall, and we hit the ground with Vivex landing on my back. The R.A.T came to us guns pointing at our heads, "I've got plans for you." CT said with an evil eye staring at me.
[Vaktovian {2} - Chapter 8 Coming Soon] |
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Colvarp
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moaf
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| 07 Oct 2011 10:49 AM |
| Well you fail moaf, if you can't understand he is making this for FUN, why do you comment bad things to him. He doesn't HAVE to let people comment on his work. You know what, if you think this is bad, why dont YOU write one. why don't you try to prove his is bad, I bet if your two books were shown in a forum contest, rsmithnvm would win in a LANDSLIDE |
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fiht345
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| 07 Oct 2011 07:50 PM |
| I just cannot stop reading these stories. Good work so far. |
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| 07 Oct 2011 07:51 PM |
WHAT. IS. THIS. I. THOUGHT. VAKTOVIA. WAS. KILLZONE. |
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moaf
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| 07 Oct 2011 07:52 PM |
http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=55860078
Already made a story.
Why I don't like these stories, is because it's HARDLY realistic (Not to real life, but none of this is actually possible in the game itself), and you find a million of the same things over and over.
"I AIMED THE GUN AT CT'S HEAD"
"I SHOT CT MULTIPLE TIMES IN THE HEAD"
"I SHOT 10 ADMIRALS IN 12 SECONDS"
And so forth. |
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moaf
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| 07 Oct 2011 07:53 PM |
| And after you guys collapse in the vents, I'm pretty sure all the conscripts, or morons in RAT would just instantly kill you, nothing is ever that dramatic. |
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