HACK3R
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| Joined: 10 Feb 2008 |
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| 02 Oct 2011 02:20 AM |
The date is 8/2/2021. Commander SONICTHEHEDGEHOGXX is sitting in his office in Fort Alianor. He reaches for his cup of coffee, just as the wall bursts open. "What in the world?!" Sonic exclaims. Sonic steps back, just as a robotic arm appears from out of all of the dust and debris. The arm reaches for Sonic and carries him into a giant robot, about 6 stories tall. As soon as he enters the robot, he sees SHADOWTHEHEDGEHOGXX smiling and welcoming him. "You... You are so.." Sonic says "Handsome? Awesome?" Shadow interrupts. Sonic punches Shadow on the shoulder then sits on the captain seat. "Didn't you hear about the group party this night?" Shadow asks. "No, I haven't... What's it for?" Sonic replies. "Some Sergeant's birthday..." Shadow replies. "Oh. I guess it's only fair." Sonic says. Sonic engages the jet boots of the robot and flies off towards to the FEAR Party Place. They soon land by the beach. Sergeant HACK3R is happy to see Sonic and Shadow land at the party site, as it is his birthday. But as soon as HACK3R goes to welcome Sonic and Shadow, 4 helicopters hover over the site and send down 5 soldiers from each helicopter. The soldiers threaten to kill Sonic and Shadow, unless FEAR were to surrender to their clan. This... is the last straw.
Please leave reviews about my new book! It took me about 20 minutes to write it, and I hope you all like it.
Thanks for reading, HACK3R |
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swat7890
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| Joined: 03 Feb 2011 |
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| 02 Oct 2011 03:09 AM |
| IT REALLY GOOD AND I MEAN ONLY 20 MINUTES soz caps |
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| 02 Oct 2011 06:17 AM |
| Reasons why I am not a fan: Too many people making FEAR stories now.... And it doesn't have much drama.... |
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zach2222
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| Joined: 24 May 2008 |
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| 02 Oct 2011 03:02 PM |
| Giant Hand Bursting through the wall o.e? |
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| 02 Oct 2011 03:02 PM |
| A Different Topic would be preferred. |
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HACK3R
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| Joined: 10 Feb 2008 |
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| 02 Oct 2011 03:03 PM |
| Hey guys, it's only the first chapter... I'll make the second chapter today, I'll make it way more exciting and dramatic. Besides, Sonic himself said it was a good idea to make this. |
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HACK3R
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| Joined: 10 Feb 2008 |
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| 02 Oct 2011 03:05 PM |
| Ferrari, this is a book. It's in the Movies/TV/Books section. I'm sure this is the correct topic. |
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| 02 Oct 2011 03:12 PM |
| No as in, too much people are making stories about FEAR. It would be nice to make one more Emotional or dramatic. |
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HACK3R
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| Joined: 10 Feb 2008 |
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| 02 Oct 2011 03:38 PM |
| Oh. If you guys don't want me to continue this story, I won't... cuz I'm getting alot of bad feedback T_T |
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catworld3
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| 03 Oct 2011 01:26 PM |
| You continue your story, it's a good practise for your Vocabulary and grammar, don't really take in the Bad feedback, Take in the supporting feedback which tells you to improve it. My idea is to change the topic of FEAR, it's too unrealistic when people use it too much. Maybe a Dramatic affair or etc. |
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kalibb
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| Joined: 11 Feb 2010 |
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| 03 Oct 2011 06:17 PM |
It moves to fast. But don't give up keep making stories! |
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| 03 Oct 2011 06:36 PM |
| This is the saddest thing I have ever seen... |
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HACK3R
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| Joined: 10 Feb 2008 |
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| 10 Oct 2011 12:01 AM |
| I've decided not to continue, since I will not have enough time to make more chapters since school is in the way... :( All the haters: You're welcome. All the people who liked it: I'm sorry. |
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| 10 Oct 2011 12:08 AM |
| Guys, Don't be so mean. He wants to make the second chapter but how? How? With all this feedback. I think it's Cool. |
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HACK3R
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| Joined: 10 Feb 2008 |
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| 03 Nov 2011 11:09 PM |
| Instead of making this book, I will start a DIFFERENT book with more drama and action! I'll put the link up later today |
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