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| 27 Sep 2011 07:35 PM |
Hope you like this story. It's a story about RAID versus RED. It's my first story, tell me what you think.
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Desertedbart: Line up!
Everybody else: Yes, sir!
Desertedbart: We will be raiding RED. We will be getting there by Gunship, and also shooting from the gunship.
Epicfacekiller123: Sir, when will you tell us our positions on the Gunship?
Desertedbart: When we get to the gunship.
iKeyloggz: Greatirondaniel, Desertedbart, and I will lead this raid. Follow me to the gunship.
[At the gunship]
Desertedbart: Darkness159, man the radar. Axeltvs, you man the turrets. CaptainJordan1234, man the missiles.
Greatirondaniel: What am I doing?
iKeyloggz: You are making sure everybody is doing their job here.
Greatirondaniel: Ok.
[In the air]
Darkness159: We're approaching the RED HQ!
Greatirondaniel: Everybody, prepare for battle.
[In turret & missiles room]
Greatirondaniel: If you can, start firing the missiles and turrets at them!
Axeltvs & Darkness159: Yes, sir!
[At RED HQ]
Lejam7890: Sir, a RAID Gunship is heading towards us!
DoctorCooper: Fire a missile at their propeller, make them crash. Lejam7890: Yes, sir!
[In RAID gunship]
Darkness159: Sir, a missile is heading straight for us!
Greatirondaniel: Everybody, BRACE FOR IMPACT!
________________________________________________________________________ Did you like it? It's my first story. Chapter 2 coming soon.
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iKeyloggz
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| 27 Sep 2011 07:37 PM |
| I wanted to leave you on a cliffhanger. |
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| 27 Sep 2011 07:40 PM |
| Can I be in the next chapter? :) |
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tguinn8
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| 27 Sep 2011 07:54 PM |
| So much drama... Join us for part 2 coming soon..... lol :D |
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| 27 Sep 2011 07:59 PM |
| You guys will be in the backup squad that comes later. |
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| 27 Sep 2011 08:12 PM |
Preview of Ch. 2: Darkness159: Maday, the missile hit the propeller, all the systems are offline! iKeyloggz: This is gonna be a bumpy landing! |
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| 27 Sep 2011 08:58 PM |
| can i be in the next chapter to ::3 |
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| 27 Sep 2011 09:08 PM |
| Guys, you won't get into the next chapter. Probably chapter 5/6. |
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tguinn8
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| 27 Sep 2011 09:18 PM |
| When will chapter 2 be finished? |
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| 27 Sep 2011 09:25 PM |
| Chapter 2: http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=55484805 |
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| 28 Sep 2011 09:09 AM |
| I want feedback from non-RAID as well, ;3 |
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| 28 Sep 2011 09:11 AM |
Put all the chapters on one thread.
Awesome story! |
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| 28 Sep 2011 09:18 AM |
| Ok, thanks ;3, but i'm posting on different threads, so I can shout it in RAID |
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| 28 Sep 2011 02:33 PM |
| OMG YOU MISSPELLED MY NAME!!! AND IM NOT EVIN IN CHAPTER 2!!! LOL BUT STILL! |
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| 28 Sep 2011 02:36 PM |
Too much gunship. Boo.
[_/See You starside\_] |
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| 28 Sep 2011 02:42 PM |
axel, you're one of the people that are getting food and you'll be one of the people working on the boat |
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