rsmithnvm
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| 20 Sep 2011 03:40 PM |
Well, this is my story, how it all happened. I sat in an abandoned building, no one here, just me. I was only very young at the time, i didn't know if i had brothers or sisters. I only knew my parents had left me here, they are long gone now. I never really had a family. I was a loner, but not exactly the only one in the city, not anymore. ---------------------------------------------------------- "Is anyone in the city?" I heard someone say. I looked out the shattered window and saw people with black helmets on with red glowing eyes. "Clear the buildings, check if their is anyone alive here!" I turned around looking at the stairs and i crawled to a dark corner, i knew i was going to be spotted. Then their one was, he came up looking at me, "I found a kid!" He yelled. Then most of them came up on my floor, crowding me. "Move out of the way." The commander said. Then they made a line on each side of the Commander and saluted. He stared at me, "Who are you?" I asked. "We are Vaktovians," he said. "Eh, Never heard of Vaktovians." "Bah, we don't have time, grab the kid, and lets take him to Swamp." One Vaktovian walked up and grabbed me. "Where are you taking me!" I yelled. "We will tell you later," said a Vaktovian. Obviously i was going to be held prisoner, i'm hoping for the best, like a family... Maybe if i have brothers or sisters, maybe i could see them their. We arrived, finally. I looked around, a Vaktovian let me go. I immediatly stepped in a small puddle. "Welcome to Swampy moon," said the commander. We walked to the gate, and the Commander said, "Open the gate!" ."Yes, Sir!" they said. He walked up to the control switch and opened the gate. "Take the boy to the jail." He said. "He's just a kid, why put him in jail?" A Vaktovian said. "Do what i said!" He yelled. Then i was grabbed and took to a jail that smelled like sewer.
"Now, I need to ask you some questions." He said. "What are they?" I asked. "Who are you?" he asked. "I'm Vextrus." I told him. "Last name?" "Xul." I told him. "Vextrus Xul, Correct?" "Yes." I said. "That's weird, we've seen two Vaktovians here named Vextron Xul, and Casterma Xul." He told me. "I have brothers and sisters here?" I asked. "Many." He replied. I gave out a smile, "I actually have family here!" I yelled in happiness. "On to the second question... will you fight for Vaktovia?" He asked. "Yes, Sir." I replied. "Good," "Well, Any more questions?" "Just one more." He told me. "Have you ever fought anyone?" He asked. I stared at him for a second. "Well, no i haven't, i'm only Nine, and i was abandoned." I told him. "Oh well, Welcome to Vaktovia. You will start out as a Vaktovian Army Corp, you wont be the youngest." He told me. He opened the jail door, and gave me the level 1 Vaktovian Army Corp suit. I looked on the right shoulder and saw the number '1'. I looked at him, "Nice to meet you, Vextrus Xul." He opened the door and left the prison. I put on the suit, Well, I am now a Vaktovian. [Chapter 2, Coming soon.]
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DroidG11
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GM352
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| 20 Sep 2011 04:00 PM |
| Um why do those people who aren't even in VAC or VAK read these threads? |
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link1991
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| 20 Sep 2011 04:03 PM |
| What an excellent novel indeed! You've got some talent there. |
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| 20 Sep 2011 04:05 PM |
| Lmao, everyone saying it's good is in VAK |
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88dragon6
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| 20 Sep 2011 04:10 PM |
| Good Novel! I can't wait for the second... So your Vextron or Vextrus you had a typo... |
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| 20 Sep 2011 04:10 PM |
| I'm not in VAK, but I say this is very well done. |
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| 20 Sep 2011 04:10 PM |
| Why waste time writing stories for stupid, pathetic clans like Vak? |
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| 20 Sep 2011 04:11 PM |
Wrong section. You take roblox to seriously. |
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| 20 Sep 2011 04:11 PM |
| AW YOU GOTTA BE KIDDING ME,IM IN FEAR,DO YOU SEE ME POSTING ANY CRAPPY WAR STORIES ABOUT THE "great exploits of the venezians"OR SOME CRAP LIKE THAT?! NO!! SO STOP POSTING THIS CRAP IN OT!!! |
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| 20 Sep 2011 04:12 PM |
You know, for some reason the only clan I ever see people make stories for is Vak.
Strange. |
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| 20 Sep 2011 04:13 PM |
| Hmmm... for some reason my story and this one are....somehow...the same it is very similar to what has happened to me when i joined... |
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| 20 Sep 2011 04:14 PM |
"Hmmm... for some reason my story and this one are....somehow...the same it is very similar to what has happened to me when i joined..."
Oh, it's a roleplay group? |
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mjemje
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| 20 Sep 2011 04:14 PM |
Go to C&G, where MAYBE people will care.
-You and your silly "being reasonable," I wear a present. |
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voge2
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| 20 Sep 2011 04:19 PM |
Very well written. I may try to write something to compete.
And SuperCommander, you say that and yet you wear the Borg suit made by Emperor Vaktus of the Vaktovian Empire. |
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rsmithnvm
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| Joined: 31 Jan 2010 |
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| 20 Sep 2011 04:20 PM |
| Nice start...and it's very true about you not being youngest. My cousin's seven...He joined VAC when he was six. |
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| 20 Sep 2011 04:20 PM |
@Voge:
Your point? Just because I wear something he made doesn't mean I have to like the Vaktovian Empire.
I got this because it was the only good Borg set there was. |
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