generic image
Processing...
  • Games
  • Catalog
  • Develop
  • Robux
  • Search in Players
  • Search in Games
  • Search in Catalog
  • Search in Groups
  • Search in Library
  • Log In
  • Sign Up
  • Games
  • Catalog
  • Develop
  • Robux
   
ROBLOX Forum » Club Houses » Clans & Guilds
Home Search
 

Re: My Vaktovian Story Part 2

Previous Thread :: Next Thread 
coolkid4598 is not online. coolkid4598
Joined: 09 Aug 2010
Total Posts: 2721
20 Sep 2011 06:28 PM
Please read the first one before you read this.
~-[{__________________________________________________________}]-~

Chapter 2: Recruitment

"Ahh!," I yelled as I looked into the red glowing eyes of the black helmeted soldier. "Shh, It's okay, I'm not going to hurt you, All I need to know is your name and your race," said the soldier. I looked at him blankly. "I...I don't remember.. ," I told him. He stared at me for a second, then said: "Come with me, I'll take you to my commander. He's a captain, and he's really nice", said the soldier. So I followed him, and he brought me to a small camp. There was a group of soldiers sitting around a campfire and talking. I hadn't realized that it was night. The soldier brought me into a tent, in the tent was a man, who was tall and strong. I looked at him thoughtfully. "Sir, I have found a boy, he can't seem to remember his name, where he came from, and what race he was. I think he may have Amnesia", said the soldier. The man looked at me, and then said "Well Hello there, I am captain Nathafairel Myani (chanomano) of the Vaktovian Empire," he told me. "Do you know where you are right now, child,?" Nathafairel asked me. "No," I replied. "Your are in Vaktovia, home of the greatest nation in the universe," He told me. "Look, soldier, take him to the place that holds machines that return all your memories to you, then come meet me, WITH THE CHILD, at Swampy moon," He told the soldier. "Yes sir," said the soldier, and then he took me to a dropship, and the dropship flew us away.

.I followed the soldier into a room, he then told me to sit in a chair that was located in the far right corner of the room. I sat down, and an helmet went over my head. The soldier turned on the machine, and I was soon asleep, and as I slept, all my memory returned to me...

. I woke up, the helmet was not on me, and suddenly I remembered everything, the soldier trotted over to me. "So, now can you tell me your name and race? ," He asked me. I thought for a moment... "My name is Makarov, and my race is... Vaktovian." "Good, now stand up, Makarov, and we shall go meet Cpt. Myani." I stood up and followed him to to dropship, I looked out the window as we entered the atmosphere of the Swampy Moon planet. About 15 minutes later we arrived at a base, and landed. I followed the soldier to the gate, and he shouted at the gate controller to open the gate, it opened and I followed him into the base.

. He brought me into a small room, with a meeting table, and there sat General DevilishPyro, General Korvak, Cpt. Nathafairel Myani, and Lt. General Sage. "Sit," Said Cpt. Myani. I did as he said. "We are gathered here to offer you a place, in the Vaktovian Empire Army Corps," Said General Korvak. "But first... have you ever fought, even threw a punch at a person..?" Asked Sage. "I have been in a couple fistfights before..." I answered. " Listen, go to the armory, get some Level 1 armor, and a Helmet. Then I will take you for your first training Lesson" Cpt. Myani told me. So I exited the room, and walked towards the armory, I put on a Level 1 suit, grabbed a helmet, and sighed. "Here is my beginning.. of a war life..." I said quietly to myself...

[Chapter 3 will come soon.]
Report Abuse
Studionymous is not online. Studionymous
Joined: 07 Sep 2011
Total Posts: 186
20 Sep 2011 06:29 PM
tl;dr
first
Report Abuse
NOOBLIVER is not online. NOOBLIVER
Joined: 26 Feb 2011
Total Posts: 357
20 Sep 2011 06:29 PM
Nice but periods flying in new lines and stuff it's confusing.
Report Abuse
ForTheShire is not online. ForTheShire
Joined: 26 Dec 2008
Total Posts: 3740
20 Sep 2011 06:30 PM
How do you seem to meet all the HRs?


tl;dr
Report Abuse
coolkid4598 is not online. coolkid4598
Joined: 09 Aug 2010
Total Posts: 2721
20 Sep 2011 06:30 PM
Are you talking about the period before each new paragraph? Because that is called.. err.. I think its spelled "Indenting".
Report Abuse
ForTheShire is not online. ForTheShire
Joined: 26 Dec 2008
Total Posts: 3740
20 Sep 2011 06:31 PM
Called using spaces or Tab.
Report Abuse
coolkid4598 is not online. coolkid4598
Joined: 09 Aug 2010
Total Posts: 2721
20 Sep 2011 06:32 PM
@ForTheShire Cpt. Myani had gathered them to talk about recruiting me before I had arrived, and I didn't meet ALL the HRs, just some. And I didn't really "Meet" Them.
Report Abuse
moaf is not online. moaf
Joined: 17 Sep 2008
Total Posts: 1320
20 Sep 2011 06:32 PM
Vak sucks, end of story.
Report Abuse
coolkid4598 is not online. coolkid4598
Joined: 09 Aug 2010
Total Posts: 2721
20 Sep 2011 06:33 PM
Flamers gonna flame.
Report Abuse
ForTheShire is not online. ForTheShire
Joined: 26 Dec 2008
Total Posts: 3740
20 Sep 2011 06:33 PM
So all of them. To meet you.



#lol
Report Abuse
DubbaJ is not online. DubbaJ
Joined: 08 May 2011
Total Posts: 137
20 Sep 2011 06:33 PM
>Are you talking about the period before each new paragraph? Because that is called.. err.. I think its spelled "Indenting".

That is not indenting.

Fool.

Indenting is spacing before the start of a new paragraph not putting a period before it.

Lrn2grammar.
Report Abuse
coolkid4598 is not online. coolkid4598
Joined: 09 Aug 2010
Total Posts: 2721
20 Sep 2011 06:34 PM
In shool I have been taught not only to space, but to put a period before you start.
Report Abuse
coolkid4598 is not online. coolkid4598
Joined: 09 Aug 2010
Total Posts: 2721
20 Sep 2011 06:35 PM
Plus not everyone can ALWAYS never make mistakes with grammar.
Report Abuse
ForTheShire is not online. ForTheShire
Joined: 26 Dec 2008
Total Posts: 3740
20 Sep 2011 06:35 PM
Nope. Not how you do it.

This is how you do it blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah.
Report Abuse
DubbaJ is not online. DubbaJ
Joined: 08 May 2011
Total Posts: 137
20 Sep 2011 06:36 PM
>In shool I have been taught not only to space, but to put a period before you start.

Yeah...

I dun know what you learn in "shool"

But here in school we learn the correct way of things.

And that is not putting a period in front of the beggining of a paragraph and calling it indented.
Report Abuse
coolkid4598 is not online. coolkid4598
Joined: 09 Aug 2010
Total Posts: 2721
20 Sep 2011 06:36 PM
Have most of you even read the first chapter...
Report Abuse
ForTheShire is not online. ForTheShire
Joined: 26 Dec 2008
Total Posts: 3740
20 Sep 2011 06:36 PM
y it no indent?
Report Abuse
DubbaJ is not online. DubbaJ
Joined: 08 May 2011
Total Posts: 137
20 Sep 2011 06:38 PM
>Have most of you even read the first chapter...

Nope.

I didnt even read this one.

I just correceted your flawed grammar.

And by the way you type I dont want to red either of the chapters.
Report Abuse
coolkid4598 is not online. coolkid4598
Joined: 09 Aug 2010
Total Posts: 2721
20 Sep 2011 06:39 PM
Well I'm sorry for trying to be creative, Fudgenugget.
Report Abuse
spartank45 is not online. spartank45
Joined: 07 Sep 2008
Total Posts: 9390
20 Sep 2011 06:40 PM
lol

I've read many Vaktovian stories, So far this tops all the roleplaying ones.
Report Abuse
coolkid4598 is not online. coolkid4598
Joined: 09 Aug 2010
Total Posts: 2721
20 Sep 2011 06:40 PM
You mean you liked this?
Report Abuse
StudioScript is not online. StudioScript
Joined: 16 Mar 2011
Total Posts: 703
20 Sep 2011 06:41 PM
theyre gonna be good at roleplay nudge nudge wink wink rofl
Report Abuse
coolkid4598 is not online. coolkid4598
Joined: 09 Aug 2010
Total Posts: 2721
20 Sep 2011 06:41 PM
If so, thanks.
Report Abuse
coolkid4598 is not online. coolkid4598
Joined: 09 Aug 2010
Total Posts: 2721
20 Sep 2011 06:42 PM
Ah, Hello Studio. I see your unbanned.
Report Abuse
DubbaJ is not online. DubbaJ
Joined: 08 May 2011
Total Posts: 137
20 Sep 2011 06:44 PM
>Well I'm sorry for trying to be creative, Fudgenugget.

How is you using terrible grammar trying to be creative?

I said I wouldnt read your little stories because your grammar sucks.

When did I say ANYTHING about creativity?

At all?

Maybe if you go to first grade you can learn some grammar and more people will want to read your stories.

Maybe.
Report Abuse
Previous Thread :: Next Thread 
Page 1 of 1
 
 
ROBLOX Forum » Club Houses » Clans & Guilds
   
 
   
  • About Us
  • Jobs
  • Blog
  • Parents
  • Help
  • Terms
  • Privacy

©2017 Roblox Corporation. Roblox, the Roblox logo, Robux, Bloxy, and Powering Imagination are among our registered and unregistered trademarks in the U.S. and other countries.



Progress
Starting Roblox...
Connecting to Players...
R R

Roblox is now loading. Get ready to play!

R R

You're moments away from getting into the game!

Click here for help

Check Remember my choice and click Launch Application in the dialog box above to join games faster in the future!

Gameplay sponsored by:
Loading 0% - Starting game...
Get more with Builders Club! Join Builders Club
Choose Your Avatar
I have an account
generic image