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| 05 Sep 2011 10:38 PM |
~Chapter one!~
"TAYLOR!!!" I heard Paul my step dad holler. "Yes?!?" I said running down the stairs, still applying my mascara. "Yes sir. I need you to pick me up some drinks. Now." He said with an edge to it like he was tre3tning me. "I cant I have to get to school early. Me and some friends are meeting up to stu-" I was cut off there by his hand colliding with my cheek making my head whip to the side, and me to fall backwards, a small huff of air escaping my lip chapped lips. "I didnt ASK you to get it I TOLD you to get it. Go get it NOW!" He yelled looking down at me, spit flying out of his mouth. I stood up as fast as possible and went for the door with a tear rolling down the side of my face. Slamming the door behind me, my biological dad entered my thoughts and his face and bad jokes that he thought were hilarious filled my head. "I miss you...." I mumbled, my wavy blonde hair blowing behind me and out of my face as I thought about the man that took his life.
(Tell me what you think!!! Should I continue???) |
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ryann
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| 05 Sep 2011 11:11 PM |
| I don't see the plot, you just began randomly but it's not bad. |
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| 05 Sep 2011 11:36 PM |
| (The plot has realy started. Hm I just realized I put chapter one! OOPS! Meant for that to be the prolouge and for chapter one to have the plot....) |
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ryann
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| 06 Sep 2011 01:43 AM |
| I can see this story getting good... Continue. |
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| 06 Sep 2011 08:12 PM |
| I will post more later when im un-grounded. Sorry! |
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| 09 Sep 2011 08:02 PM |
Chapter Two:
I walked down the sidewalk I took with my real dad to go to my first day of kindergarden. I remebered Kenneth and Jake my two year older twin brothers laughing at how nervous I looked. I also remember how much I laughed when he picked them up and carried them over his shoulder as a joke to make me feel better. Times are different now. My dad is dead, My mom married Paul because she couldn't get a job and because he owned a house, Kenneth and Jake our 18 now and basicly ignore me, David is 15 and doesnt need me anymore and is too busy with being the schools top student, and my only releif in life is Aiden my 12 year old brother and Abby my pet German Sheperd who I can feel comfertable with. "Hey Taylor!" My best guy friend, Dustin, hollered from across the street walking this way with my only other friend Jesse, Also a guy. I kept walking, tears still rolling down my face making my makeup run and the rims around my eyes red and black. I zoned in on the market one block down totaly blocking out all sounds. The only thing that stopped me was Jesse walking right infront of me making me trip ontop of him. |
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mat1099
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| 09 Sep 2011 08:49 PM |
| Pretty good so far! Keep it up! |
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| 10 Sep 2011 11:37 PM |
(I'll continue anyway....) Chapter 3:
"T-" Was all Jesse chould say before his back hit the concrete and my elbows went into his stomach.
"S-s-s-sorry!" I studdered rolling off of his stomach.
"Guys!" I heard Dustin say running over. "Taylor whats your prob- What happened."
"Isn't it obvious? She tackled me!" Jesse chuckled. I glared at him, not in the mood for jokes. "Sorry. Whats wrong?" He asked, his face turning into a concerned look.
"I-its nothing... Your pants! Im so sorry!" I muttered while looking at where a bloody knee had taken refuge where a nice un-touched leg covered in jean fabric a few moments ago.
"Nah its cool. Scars build character." A crooked smirk spreading across his face, "But seiriously, Whats wrong? You look like someone just maced you!"
I chouldnt help but smile at his stupid joke. |
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| 11 Sep 2011 11:10 AM |
| Cool :D Whens next chapter???? |
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| 11 Sep 2011 03:13 PM |
| Um not sure if I should continue |
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| 11 Sep 2011 03:24 PM |
| Oh wow! That was really good!!! Cant wait for the next chapter! (: |
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| 13 Sep 2011 05:29 PM |
Chapter Four!!!
"It's Paul..." I said, Jesse helping me to my feet.
"Again?!?" Dustin exclaimed, an expression of shock on his face and worry in his bright green eyes.
"Yes again. Can you not do that?" I asked Jesse who was oddly staring at my face.
"Im sorry but normaly your left cheek doesnt have a bright red hand print on it and your eyes arent usualy bloodshot or surrownded by a bright pink circle. If you want I can round up some friends and drive him out of town." He said trying to make this a less serious conversation. We all started cracking up hystaricly making a family of 3 riding to the elementery school behind us extremely confuzed.
"You'd do that for me?" I joked totaly forgetting about going to the store for Paul.
"Give me a time and a place!" He challenged with a spark in his eye and and a fake evil expression.
"Oh would you quit it!" I said hitting his shoulder lightly, "Your going to scare off all the little kids!"
"Buy me an ice cream?" He said smiling.
"Earn it! If you know all the stuff were studying I might consider it!" I told him and started walking to Medsen High, the highschool we all attend. |
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